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Departures Never Sent

Poem By: ReganFinch
Poetry


I write a lot of depressing stuff. But sometimes depressing stuff can just be plain depressing. So, I decided to let you all read some happy poems (I know, its unbelievable). Here is the first one I am putting up today.

I have always loved those poems where the poet describes something detail by detail (love, place, feeling) and I thought I'd try that out with this one.

This one (except for the few revisions I made before I posted this) was written way back in 2005. Thank you all and make sure and tell me what you think!

Regan

(P.S. I didn't add a song on this one since people were saying that they liked the song, THEN that they liked the poem. I want my poem to stand center-stage.

Also, I ask that when you read this, please read it slow and thoughtfully. If you speed through this, it sounds choppy. Read it as if you were reading it to your own love; soft and delicately.) View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 19, 2008    Reads: 117    Comments: 33    Likes: 16   


You remind me of the summer I spent

in the forgotten weeds of lower Manhattan.

Of the wasted winters spent knee bent

upon couches, staring into open pane windows.

Your hands bring back memories of dinners

underneath candlelight, surrounded by leaves.

Of breaths that I forsook for just another

glimpse of your beautiful face, nonchalant

like Mona.

Your smile is the sun upon many waters,

your fingers, the redwoods beckoning other worlds.

Your hair has changed but yet is still my own.

For I know that underneath those brunette strands,

their resides that blonde stream that I consistently loved.

Your laugh is a mirror that projects my spirit into you

and it is clean and unblemished.

But to say "I love you" is so predictable; maybe

words cannot describe departures to other places

not seen.


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Comments:

Oh, wow. Breathtaking.
Reagan, this is beautiful. I could hear the violins, cellos, and maybe some woodwinds in the mix.... A very sweet poem. "But to say "I love you" is so predictable; maybe words cannot describe departures to other places not seen." Love is such a strong word, yet sometimes it just doesn't seem enough, does it??

MA

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Nope sure doesn't... Thank you so much Amber! I really wanted those feelings to come through and I am glad that they did. Thanks :)

cool. this one makes a little more sense right off the bat...lol. On thing, though-- in the fourteenth line, you have "their". did you mean "there"? that's all--thought i'd point that out. I love it, though:) you're really talented... :D

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :P Yes you are right. I believe I type by the way words sound instead of how they are spelled....ah well. Thanks for pointing that out!

ooo! very beautiful! i read it nice and slow and savored every line. the imagery in this is fantastic!! when you were describing certain features, my favorite being "your fingers, the redwoods beckoning other worlds", my jaw dropped! soooo beautiful and not to mention very clever! it wasn't the cliche imagery used to describe a lover. this was fresh!
i adore this :)

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! My writings have never been called fresh before...I'm definitely going to remember this comment for a long time, lol. Thank you so much Alice :) I really did work hard to make this sound "fresh" and yet, at the same time, familiar. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

it is as they all say Regan; very, very beautiful
~katie

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much katie :)

I can picture a man standing by a fireplace looking at his beloved sitting on a couch opposite of him. he's remembering all the things you described. It's such a beautiful piece Regan. =) Mandy

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Mandy :) Your comments always bring a smile to my face.

beautiful!
I loved it.
It sort of reminded me of a song I know. But it didn't too much.
Just the part about Manhattan.
butt I really loved it
:]

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! :)

Very detailed as you say, I could see the person you were writing for; the memories the feelings;) It's like a series of snap shots of your relationship and it holds one of my favorite qualities in writing~its unique, nice.
~rain

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much rain :)

this really is beautiful-were you in love at the time you wrote it? ;D

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :) Yes I was, the problem is, I believe I still am...but I guess that's where poetry starts to heal me.

beautiful! Wonderfully amazing!

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

This is a breathtaking poem, truly lovely. A magically written ending.

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! :)

that was very very beautiful and i was floored!

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

This was sooo beautiful!I likes this very much:"But to say "I love you is so predictable;maybe words cannot describe departures to other places not seen.

That was so wonderful.And its true.Say "I love you"has become so predictable.Theese days everything is taken by granted.And It means nothing any more.Its a bit sad.
But its still romantic to say that...Well...really beautiful poem,lol.

:)

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :)

hi! regan. this is like a breath of fresh air. love is in the air. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much bubbly! It sure is ;)

Wow, such a delicate beautiful love poem. I did imagine reading it to some special, oh and she loved it. You have such a lovely way of bringing back the past as though it only happened yesterday. The images are evocative, romantic, and deep sunk into the emotions of both writer and now reader. I do love your style of writing! I also love the images you use, as though nothing much is going on around you except this beautiful woman who means everything to you in that moment!

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

EXACTLY what I wanted Matthew. Thanks man!

I like this one but let your poetry speak for itself! You explain too much.

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

How did I do that :S Thanks :)

Hi Regan, i really really took lots of time before writing this comment...this one just took my breath away...so sad ....yet so enlightening....

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :)

excellent imagery... beautifully expressed, and similes were great, but i must say, your sad poems are more better, you need practice with the gud ones... and plz do check out my poems !!!

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. How so? What makes the happy ones inferior to the depressing ones? Hmm...

A lovely piece...took my time in reading it, just as I would read it to a loved one. It is magnificent. It plays so well..it is a song on its own. Love it.

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much whitehart :)

Hey! You do "happy poems" justice! This is beautiful written with images that stick with the reader. Great job!

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

this was breathtakingly wow-ish! im speachless at the flawless words! wow!

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

Your smile is the sun upon many waters...Very nice, I really enjoyed that one. Take Care, Ted

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Ted :)

wow, this was breathtaking. You really have a talent, I loved it. it was so lovely and yet struck me as a little sad. I loved it!
Steph(:

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Steph :)

wow, very moving... i loved it

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :)

Lionheart
(not registered user)

It felt exactly like those moments where you could be lost in your thoughts, in the most boring of situations, entangled in memories and long missed feelings...
Ive had that recently... i have forgotten what the symptoms of an infatuation feel like. No butterflies in the stomach, no weak knees... this reminded me of those times. I guess seeing the same faces all the time really run their course.
The imagery was alive. Happily lost in thoughts while being in the surroundings. You could smell the material.

Very nice title by the way. A clever way to put it.
A pleasure to read.

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

It takes me so long to respond to your comments I'm sorry. Twenty something other people have commented so here goes my two cents. I shed one lone tear for this poem first of the night. They have been waiting to come. Like Dane Cook says sometimes you need to have a real good cry. I haven't had one in a while and rarely shed tears. The love and beauty you speak of with your words makes me sad more then anything sadly. It is so beautiful that it makes me wish I had something missing from myself. That skeleton key to unlock the soul and passion within the lifeless vessel I am. Not sure this really describes my interpretation of your poem more of my emotions when reading it. Sorry if that is bad. Take Care Regan Cheers Brian

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Brian, when something that I wrote creates such a personal reaction such as this...it makes the 9 years I have been writing poetry worthwhile. I thank you so much for enjoying this one and really understanding what I was trying to get across. This comment makes me want to write (and that doesn't usually happen, hehe). Thank you so much Brian :)

glimpse of your beautiful face, nonchalant

like Mona.
I can only imagine the Mona Lisa, slyly smiling when I read this line. I have to admit that it's not the usual way to describe a lover and I love it for that. Especially with "departures to places unseen" I think it was. I loved that line. It was just breathtakingly beautiful.

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Yep, that was what I was going for :) Thanks Laurel!

Like Mona...love it.
I left a really cool response, but booksie comment monster ate it.

Ok, so...i read this as the author longing for the security that he felt in his childhood and he feels again with this wonderful wonderful woman in his presence.

The redwood of her hair is that of an angel, as it transports him to another realm. Also, redwood is such warm imagery and I can smell wood on the wind, a fragrance I associate with my childhood and all the dreams I had.

Never assume that you are loved, but always know it. People forget to do that Regan. I do so adore your poetry.

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Absolutely beautiful...thank you so much peach :)

fantastic! i loved the whole thing! =)

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Hi Regan, this is the first poem of yours that I have read, and going by the summary you've written, it looks like I have chosen the one you've written with a style different from your usual. I will go to the others later, but this one had me spellbound. There was an air of beautiful nostalgia all through the poem. It felt like a moment in the mind of a long married man who looked back with love at the times he had spent with his beloved. You are very good at your choice of words - they are simple words in themselves, but you know exactly where to place them, every single time. That's when they become magical. 'Brunette' and 'blonde' were the only two words which I felt were not consistent with the spirit of the rest of the poem (they sounded too, shall I say, commercialized?). Perhaps you could substitute them with something more poetic, like maybe cinnamon and golden, or some such words? I think I'm going to enjoy exploring your other poems too.

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Urja :) I do understand what you are saying about 'brunette' and 'blonde'. I will consider changing them since it would give the poem more flow. Thanks again Urja!

umm...not so sure what to write..hehe:P...kindda speechless after reading such a breathtaking poem.

LOVED it! I'd say you have done a great job in this one!
And this your first poem I read so far.

Take care and keep writing!

nuttyz~

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you nuttz! You take care too :)

I couldn't seem to get myself out of the world of awe!!
A very brilliant poem with so much meaning!
This has to be my favourite poem so far!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much LeAnne!

This was great. Honestly, it was my favorite love poem ever. It's so personal and beautiful. Wow...

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow REALLY?! I'm absolutely dumbfounded. When I get that kind of comment from a truly great poet....man...I just can't take it, hehe. Thank you from the bottom of my heart :)

A beautiful poem, Regan. You have written about LOVE with such emotion, sensitivity and delicate imagery. Thank heaven we have some beautiful poetry such as this to share as sometimes, "I love you" just doesn't seem like enough...

Peace and love.....Jerry

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Jerry! I really appreciate that :)



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