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The Child In Me

Poem By: Rio SU Kashyap
Poetry


There was a child inside me who has been stolen by the wicked world and turned into an adult. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 10, 2008    Reads: 49    Comments: 7    Likes: 2   


Once upon a fleeting time,

There was a child in me.

The positive side of everything,

She used to see.

Innocent, calm and cornered,

She used to be.

No stress, no responsibilities, no deaves.

Big, small injuries,

The same day used to heal.

In front of me,

Life spread like a sea.

With happiness as high as the keel.

Unexpectedly, soon

The rudder was jee.

She went from flower to flower,

Like a bee.

At every luring flower,

She sat to deem.

Carefully selecting,

Just honey she reaped.

Which she also carried,

To others in need.

They were compelled to feel,

And to be feal.

But things are not,

As straight as they’re seen.

Veil of adulthood,

Fell upon the wean.

She fell in the weel,

Of life’s entwined reel.

The honey extractors,

Ceased all her honey and gee.

Once upon a fleeting time,

There was a child in me.


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Comments:

As ever full of deep thoughts for some-one so young. I hope that you regain/retain your optimism, not always an easy thing, I know.

Do you think that perhaps substituting the word centered for cornered, would work ? While cornered gives the sense of what you mean, in general English usage cornered means to be backed into a corner with little means of escape. This would certainly describe the situation as you see it in the second part of your Poem.

Centred (from centre of gravity) or in American English Centered, means to remain balanced no matter what the position.

Lovely to be able to read another of your Poems.

Kind regards,
Nonna

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx for the suggestion. But it is cornered only as I was a little child always sitting alone in a corner.
Thanx for the comments.

This poem is very deep and powerful!
I like it, the way it is set and written, all of it.
And if you don't mind, can you comment on my poems as well??

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx!!

The positive side of everything,

She used to see.

Innocent, calm and cornered,

Just honey she reaped.

Which she also carried,

To others in need.

I FELT AS IF IT"S ME....I also lost all the innocence over time, became opportunist, mean and everything needed to face the society....to grab and make things my own....THEN, kriish came to my life and i realised 'what am i doing?" This poem stirred the same passion and innocence of childhood regd every small things like toys made of clay, paper boat, Swing and simplest things of life.....

LOVELY ONE RIO....U WILL NEVER LOSE URSELF SINCE UR FEET IN FIRMLY ON GROUND....GOD BLESS YOU

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

THANX! FOR SUCH A GOOD BLESSING. A BLESSING IS ALWAYS GOOD!

hi! rio. this is life. no matter how old v grow, a child'll always remain within us. our experiences shape us into an adult, which i guess here r not pleasant. despite the negatives, one's approach to life must remain positive and hopeful. good work here. keep it up. lol. ;-)

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

THANX!

i love it:) the child in us never die nor disappear, so continue to cherish it. great job:)

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

THANX!

i love it... i remember when i had a poem like this... but i didn't published it... anyway... keep up the good work ^^,

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

THANX!
YOU MUST PUBLISH IT NOW. I WILL DEFINITELY READ IT.


^^Hello Rio !! This is very good...No doubt,when i was reading it the pink highlited color and poems theme,work together as i felt well...bee is beautiful.

Good work and keep it up with new height of Passion.

Have a good day to you and God bless you.

Your brother-VICKY.punne4e

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Bro!!



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