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It's just a poem from the tip of my tounge if it's not good all well it only took five mintues. No win no lose no reason to sing the blues. :)
*Um..This was my first Booksie poem. It isn't as good as my newer ones. But it's special to me. This is how I met my closest Booksie friends.....I've added a song and a picture but I didn't touch the mistakes and I didn't make it longer or better. Even though I could.....I like it just the way it is. the song is Lithum by Evanescence.* View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 14, 2008    Reads: 91    Comments: 9    Likes: 6   


It's like ice that never melts or fire that never burns.

It's like a story without an end or a began

Yet it's time that I'll never spend

It's the breeze that brushes against my knees

yet I never feel it

Though it's not it feels like sorrow and spreads like joy

It's the blood to my vains but still the source of my pains

It's the anger I feel and the pleasure I never get

Yet I'll never understand the bond or the heart or the soul

It's the love that beats through me that cuts me raw

I've been through it all

Just one that shall be heard

If it's just one Don't let it be me


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Cool I like it!

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay someone likes it:) Thnx for your comment.

Loved it very much.

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

thnx:)

hi! sam. what contrasting emotions u experience. if u r greedy for love, i must say, hail sam! good work here. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thnx! Love is not cheap. It's all mine.....Kidding you can have......a little.:) *hogging all the love in a connor.*

I do like this-it's very intimate, but I do check for serious errors-u might wanna change the line 'it's like a story without an end or a BEGINNING'...that's all...hope u don't mind the spellcheck-other than that I really like it..:D

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

:)

omg that's a great poem i love it

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thnx it was the first one on posted here.:)

Hey sam :) At first I thought this poem was incredibly simple but yet after multiple readings, I felt deeper meanings. You really are a good writer and one that I will have to make sure and keep my eyes on! Regan

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Yeah most people don't relize how deep a poem can be with only a couple of lines...THNX for your comment.

Another great poem here Sam.Nothing greedy about wanting love and someone to love you back.Take what you deserve.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) FINALLY someone understands what this ones about....Alot of ppl have been guess way off. Thank you!!

Damn i just spilled my drink reading this... lol i like this... ITS GREAT!!!

Posted: Aug 30, 2008

Author Comment:

:) thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed your read. And I'm sorry about you drink!

Hay Sam sorry this is like the 500th comment I put that isn't really about the writings besides saying it good and all but I need you opinon shouls I keep writng Half blood a get it the boot

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

ha ha. Don't worry about it! The number of comments I get rates me higher....
Ummm...Honestly??? Give it the boot.... XD



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