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Long Gone

Poem By: sam316547
Poetry


Tags: gone, pain, sorrow, loss, losing

To be honest....I suppose I'm writing about a loss. I'm just really not sure why. I have a gut feeling, that something's going to happen...So I wrote a poem. I don't know who it's about and I'm not really sure what it means. but somehow I feel guilty...
The song is "My immortal by evanescence...It use to be a different one. I changed it, I hope. If it sounds like RB still than the song is Sorry, put the blame on me by Akon. I hope it isn't though! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Oct 9, 2008    Reads: 172    Comments: 15    Likes: 5   


Long Gone

She dances with the wind
Showing grace
As it slowly pulls apart her face
Allowing piece by peace to fade
A little more
Each and everyday
Until all I see is the air
All of the pain that she would bare
All of the hurt that slashed away her soul

That would make it to where she wasn’t whole
It is all gone
Like a lonely pone lost in a game of chess
There is no more claim
For her to this world
There isn’t a sooth to the burring ice
Even though she’s wiped away the tears more than twice
She isn’t hear to sing her song
She is long gone
Each word, that I’ve heard
Each sip of sorrow
That I’d try to borrow
Is no more
She isn’t here for me to adore
She’s long gone
Without her smile
I could last but a while
Before it fell apart
Like shards of glass through my heart
Sometimes I wonder
What if she’d been heard?
What if they’d seen?
What if they hadn’t been so mean?
Would she still be here?
If I could, I would
Hold her close
And never let her go
They wouldn’t have to know
About the tears she wept
Or the cuts
That bled
From the inside out
Then they wouldn’t have to know what it was about
Why we were together to weather
The storm you’d send
But now it’s to late
She’s just left as pain in the wind
To float through the trees
And ruffle the leaves
If I’d known
What she’d never shown
I would of listened
Put away the tears that glistened
To erase the marks and slashes
To dry up the blood
I would of tried
Instead of asking why
Why’d she die?

I only wait
And hope she’s reached the gate
Until her sorrow fades
Until her pain melts away
Until I know that she has nothing to show
But a smile
That could be seen from a mile
Away
Until that day
I wait here for her
I wait and wait
But she is long gone
There is no more song to hear
There is no one to hold near
There is only the wind
That never seems to end.......


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Comments:

Ummm...The picture is a girl sitting by a grave stone....Point made? I didn't mean to write something so sad. It...Just came out this way.

Posted: Oct 9, 2008

I can relate to how you feel... There are days that something isn't right..and I can't shake the sadness.

I hope everything is ok with you... that feeling can be un nerving when it's origin is undefined. It's great that you wanted to share your experience with us... Thanks

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh...No thank you. I'm sort of happy I'm not alone....

That is really good you show us what your say instead of telling us. you show us a picture with your words. Its great and I Love it!

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm very happy you enjoyed it. :)

Wow.That was really really good but so sad.Excellent poem.I really really loved this.It brought tears to my eyes.This was really amazing.Excellent job Sam.Keep it up.

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you viper! I always enjoy reciving comments from you... :)

I ABSOLUTLY FREAKEN LOVE IT!!!!!!!!

Posted: Oct 12, 2008

Author Comment:

ha ha LOL. Thank you. :)

OMFG i totaly know how you feel. it is really good no good dosnt even conver it i cant think of a word to discribe how good it is

Posted: Oct 12, 2008

Author Comment:

THANK YOU!!!! :)

Samm!
this was amazing
better than amazing
it was brilliant
lovvveed it
XXXXXXD

Posted: Oct 12, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! :)

I only wish you didn't have to go through this...I love the poem, but it is so sad...don't blame yourself...but know that you care, and that is what matters...even though I can't entirely understand specifically what it's truly about, I connect with you...and the poem is written amazingly...you have a beautiful soul, girl....lots of love, I send you from afar, as a booksie friend
Sincerely,
*meg*

Posted: Oct 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, you words mean more than you will ever know....

Thats ok sam can you check out my new writing Sweet Sacrifice

Posted: Oct 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah....No problem.

It was a beautiful poem!-it might make me sound sick or what ever but it was-I Loved it! it had me thinking!

+Hecate+

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you...No you're not sick. I appericate your comment! THANK YOU FOR READING! :)

Hehe thanks for the welcoming back comment =]

Also, thanks for telling me about the poem because it was awesome xD.. i really enjoyed it and I can't wait to read more so keep me posted, k?

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Sure. Thank you for reading it. :)

___ this poem... woah... it was beautifully written and very touching. Great job, keep it up! ^_^

Posted: Oct 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. :)

I loved it, very beautiful. You are another one I am going to have to watch! Keep up the good work.

~:~Misery

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. :)

OMG! I loved it. I dont know why but I feel like that sometimes. Does that make sense? The words are so beautiful yet dark. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work and I hope u comment on my writing. martin x

Posted: Oct 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Of course I'll comment on your writing. Thans for reading....
And yeah it totally makes sense. :)

WOW!
This was such a lovely piece!!
I really enjoyed it!XD
'i like it' voted!!

Posted: Nov 12, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Thank you.



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