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She Wants To Be Different

Poem By: sam316547
Poetry


Well I wrote it for a friend who doesn't really see herself. Yet again I wrote it off the tip of my toung. It doesn't matter if it sucks. She'll still read it. just cuase she's my friend.
*I've edited this and I added a second verse. It still isn't the best that I could do. I just hope you enjoy it. The song is Three days grace- Animal I've become. Hope you like it.* View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 15, 2008    Reads: 80    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   


She wishes she were different

She wishes she were diferent she wishes she could change

But all she does is rearrange

Her heart leaks sorrow Her eyes drip tears

She wants to be beatiful she wants to be seen

But she already is

Her voice is mute and Her eyes are shut

She wants to be famous she wants to be heard

But she doesn't try

Her eyes will dry her heart will mend. She will be seen she will be heard.

She just needs to open her eyes, to hide the lies

And seal away all her worry becuase there is no hurry.

She already different.

Even if she can't see all of the wonderful things she could be.

Even if she doesn't stand out.

That's not what it's about.

We'll stick together, to weather the storm.

Her words of courage shall keep us warm.

I wish she could see just how much she means to me.

If she knew that what I saw in the mirror

wasn't fear of not fitting in.

But sorow of rejection that isn't there.

Could she bare the cuts so bravely?

Could she hold in all the tears

Left behind for hard years.

Could she wipe away the fears

Like she does the tears?

I wis she wouldn't hide.

I wish she could see what she really means to me.

Dear friend. Please know that you don't need to change

Because to me, can't you see......

You're already different.


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I don't think this sucks at all. It is a reeflection of how many of us feel in today's world. Just tonight I watched the US "You think you can Dance" auditions and a young man came on who insisted he stood out and was different because he was overweight. He didn't want to lose weight because he felt that this was what made him stand out. I was pleased to see the judges tell him that he doesn't need to harm his health to be unique (or words to that effect) - he only needs to find himself. This is what your poem converys to me as well. We are all individals and unique. Good poem, good message.

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thnx. I get now.LOL I read my comments down to up my bad. I really love your comment so much. THNX for reading.:)

reflection, sorry for typo!

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

OK..... Thnx for your comment......I think.

Hmm. Interesting. Your central focus is good. I like it.

However, as I always say, its the little things that kill. Please re-read everything several times.
Those little typing errors leapt at me and kept me off the theme and point of your writing.

Actual poemwise its has a good theme but I feel you should expand more.
You speak of how she feels. Unseen, Unheard and you say that will be. How ever there is no WHY she will be.

The last line helps but doesn't make it clear enough to me.

As always just a thought.

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

:) I personaly hate writing poetry so no harm done.... :)
I stick to fiction and if it can't be helped Epics. :)

That was really beautiful.I really enjoyed this one.It's so good to have caring friends.It's good to know she has a great and caring friend like you.I bet she loved this poem and couldn't thank you enough.Excellent job.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX.....She was happy. Her and I are like sisters, I hate it when she cuts herself down. :(



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