"If only he could step in now..." Your words have given voice to that deepest of all regret, to go back and do it over. I often wonder why we rarely look back and recognize those times when we got it right. Either way, we look back don't we? I would recommend a Haiku written by "gerabel" entitled "Steps I Never Took". Same subject, different form. I think you'd enjoy it.

I'm not particularly well versed in proper literary terminology so I'll simply say that I thought this poem beautifully written, rich with unexpected images. It gave me the opportunity to "see" what regret my look like.

Oh, and the line "...'other way' t-shirt" was my favorite. A perfect picture of the arrogance of hindsight.

I enjoyed it very much. ~ Sheryl

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Wow, Hey Phillip long time no see;
this is a very clever poem.
hope all is well
~katie

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

A very clever poem. (I swear I did not read what Katie said!) Hindsight would be brilliant before it is needed - but then it would prevent us from learning from our mistakes. Some wonderful and memorable phrases. Hope to see some more poems soon.

Posted: Sep 11, 2008

I love your choice of words and imaginative imagery and personification. You say alot with few words.

craaig

Posted: Sep 30, 2008