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The Mirrors To Your Soul

Poem By: snowbelle
Poetry


Tags: child, eyes, pain, hurt, adult, lies

this is the poem i wrote after seesawmaes challenge. this is the picture she sent me. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 28, 2008    Reads: 87    Comments: 10    Likes: 4   


The Mirrors To Your Soul
 
Such sadness in their depths
What secrets do they hide
Too young to know such thing
Too fragile to understand
 
Such knowledge in their depths
Too much do they see
Too many secrets do they know
Kept hidden away forever
 
Such pain in their depths
Too fragile to let them out
Oh why did you hurt me
I trusted you........
 
Why did you do those things
I did nothing to deserve that
Why won’t anyone believe me? 
I couldn’t lie about that....
 
The eyes tell the world
The mirrors to your soul
The pain and fear inside
Why does no-one see the pain?
 
It’s so much easier not to see
Not to believe a child
An adult wouldn’t lie about that
Or would they?


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Comments:

What can I say Snow?

This is brilliant ! Very moving as well for many reasons. You have excelled yourself.

Your talent continues to grow and florish.

Your forever friend

Boneman x x x

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

oh boney, this means more to me than you can know.
take care always your friend.
snow xxx

wow, you did an amazing job! i'm so impressed!!! Such a great analogy of the picture, so much depth... so great! You successfully did the challenge! Also, i'm planning on collecting all the pieces people write and posting them in a novel on my page, so that everyone can see them, but i need your permission to put your piece in, if that is okay. i don't want you to think i'm stealing it, which i am not.

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for this amazing comment. feel free to put it in your novel on your page. thaks for setting the challenge. snow xx

I'm crying! So so sad! I would think a child would be less likely to lie than an adult these days. *off to go cry some more*

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

ohhhhhhhhhhhh! i don't know what to say, i never meant to make anyone cry. =(.
children are more likely to tell the truth nowadays but it is still easier to believe an adult than believe what an adult is capable. still very much brush it under the carpet.
thank you so much for reading.
snow xx

That was very moving Snow, especially the ending. Its a terrible thing to think about the way some adults mistreat children. You did a great job with the challenge.

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thsnk you lacey. unfortunately it still goes on far too much. one child mistreated is too many. thanks for reading.
snow xx

Lydia
(not registered user)

wow. one of the very best poems you have written. very haunting. Lydia

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

lydia thank you for this lovely comment. i am very glad you think this. snow

This certainly was not an easy pic....lol

I am mesmerised...at the depth and intensity....drowned in the meaning...such an honest poem....

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Pratibha, i nearly gave up when i saw the picture. but i decided to just leave it and play my computer game for a bit. i was half way through playing when a line came to me so i stopped playing and after that the poem just flowed. not an easy subject to write about.
snow x

Hi snow ! What a beautiful and sad poem . You gave a lot of emotions to your words that always come out from the heart . Hope you are well !

Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Juliano thanks for this lovely comment. i do write from the heart. snow xx

SNOW YOU HAVE EXCELLED YOURSELF WITH THIS POEM.....SUCH EMOTION....AND TRUTH.....GREAT WRITE...TIL LATER TAKE CARE JULIET

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

juliet thank you. i am really pleased that you liked this poem. really good to hear from you,
take care
snow x

Danika
(not registered user)

Wow, you really did the picture justice. Very emotionally charged. Dani

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you for this very kind comment dani.
snow

Picture really fitted to your poem.And poem is really great,and sad.Its sometimes like that.And its so sad.You really did a great job.
:)

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for this lovely comment. i didnt have a clue what to write when i first saw the picture but the words came suddenly and there was the poem on the paper.
take care
snow =)



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