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Seeking Forgiveness

Poem By: Sweetness
Poetry


Well what can i say,i was thinking of how to say sorry to a friend,who is no longer a friend,and a poem came to mind,to me sounds like a short story.... enjoy xoxoxoxoxoxoSweetness View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 25, 2008    Reads: 76    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


I know is is going to take time.

I know I screwed around.I didn't think it would hurt you so!

It was personal,I betrayed your trust,

I hope, in time you will truly see what is inside of me, that I didn't mean it!

I hope in time you will forgive me, I didn't mean for it to come out the way it did.

I know you are angry;i'll understand if you don't talk to me ever again.

For I deserve it i deserve your bitterness and hate.

I played with fire, burned myself by burning you,by cutting deep lines into your heart.

I know you will never forgive me,I hope that in time we can still use the word friend.

They say "the wheel turns"and it just has.

I had your trust but trampled your heart, now it is bleeding like my soul.

My blade cut deep lines into my wrists, wanting, needing to feel your pain,

as i look down my soul turned crimson.

I realizeI have become tainted

I have turned my own soul black

I stayed in the dark wondering what to do,the black blood, once red,

still streaming down my hand.

I can still feel the pain,not as painful as yours.

I wondered if I should close my eyes forever, if anybody would miss me, if the world would be better off, if you would be better off.

Sitting in the corner, in the dark, pain still in my hand.

Every hour ticks by slowly.

Was it only a few moments ago,when I cut deep lines into your soul?

Now you have seen who I am,but its not who I want to be, if you still want me, you will know where to find me.

I know That it is going to take time,I know I screwed around,I didn't think it would hurt you so,I never wanted to hurt you.

Forgive me, please!


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Comments:

Whoa, incredible. I love some of the word choice and the overall feeling and power of this piece. Excellent work.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx,i relly really wanted this persons forgiveness lol needless to ay he was a asshole in the end!!

My blade cut deep lines into my wrists, wanting, needing to feel your pain,

THAT SHOULD HAVE BEEN YOUR FIRST LINE, for a dramatic entrance. I felt I skimmed until that line, but after that line it picked up nicely and interestingly.

Sucks eh, when we make mistakes? Sometimes apologies just don't cut it. Sad sigh**

Posted: Nov 23, 2008



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