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Submitted: May 12, 2007 Reads: 160 Comments: 12 Likes: 4
He saw her now
By the window staring out
At the stubborn sea.
Her hair drawn back
In that style she had,
Her eyes cool blue
Like a summer‘s day;
Her hands by her side
Clutching soft cloth of dress
In idle thought or dream-like state.
He spoke, but she never heard,
His words wasted on the ghostly sight,
His eyes seeing the unseen
Since death had claimed.
He stood beside her shadowed self,
Put out his hand,
And touched the vacant air.
Gone now, just his vacant stare.
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You've proved that a poem doesn't have to rhyme to be brilliant. Your style of writing just flows and falls off the tongue easily.Such a sad subject yet beautiful in the way that she,the memory, is remembered.Well Done.5/5 and deservedly so.
Posted: May 12, 2007
Love this, different from most poems you've written, but excellent...loved your flow of words....very, very good!
Posted: May 12, 2007
I really enjoyed this one. Definitely another 5 stars.
Posted: May 16, 2007
I loved this poem. Your voice was so lyrical and bittersweet. I loved the way you described the girl and shivered when he put out his hand, only grasping vacant air. Great writing.
Posted: Jun 1, 2007
i love this poem. it gave me chills as i read it, it was that beautiful. thanks for sharing this with the world, i appreciate it.
Posted: Jun 2, 2007
Awesome! Powerful work of art. Made the hair on the back of my neck stand up....loved it!
Posted: Jun 17, 2007
This is lovely and provided me with beautiful imagery. Well done!
Posted: Jul 11, 2007
Agree with outhers on the loveliness of this piece aas well the imagery. What can I say of my own thoughts on it? Well what I would say has been saidpreviously by others. 5/5
Posted: Jul 25, 2007
In view of the previous comments mine seems redundant, never-the-less, as with all your writing this one has a touch of magic - your own style of telling. Look forward to more.
Posted: Oct 29, 2007
Lovely - I echo all the other comments - you have a unique style of writing using few words to portray so much!
Posted: Nov 30, 2007
what amazing imagery. i could see the woman by the window.
snowbelle
Posted: Dec 31, 2007
Hello,
again a nice poem. It was both subtle and meaningful. As always right on the money.
Posted: May 16, 2008
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