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This is a poem about a homeless man who is killed for the meager amount he has collected in his tin can.
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Submitted: Jul 6, 2008    Reads: 24    Comments: 3    Likes: 1   


Welcome rays of sunshine
Rows of daisies, so similar
Happy harmony of birds
The Sabbath route, too

Familiar face;
The man with no home
Through sunlight and dark
Sitting always

Alone a penny lies as
A silent beg. He waves.
Before i gesture my shoulder tugs
As mum drags me

Away in the distance
The holy house sings
Calling our presence
Luring us

Inside, angels from above
Come to protect and guide
the fragile soul within,
the mind and body

Outside, foreseeing misery to befall
Clouds gather in Gods hand
All eyes telling the story
Of where once sat the homeless

Man on the floor
A crimson puddle surrounds
So still, so surreal
Making no

Sounds behind grow frantic
As God himself appears to weep
Why did He sanction such suffering
Destined to eternal

Sleep tight.
The angel, the dignity
of the man who did no wrong,
His silent beg,
Gone.


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Comments:

Aww sad! It's still really good though. However, it does look like there should be a word on the last line of the 7th stanza. It just says "Making no". Other than that it's really good. As with the others, I love it! Wow i'm starting to sound really redundant with that. Heehee.
Paws

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Its meant to be like that because each stanza ends with the same word as the next begins. In that case, 'sounds' would end the line, but is written at the beginning of the next.
But thanks :)

Very sad, for me it was so vivid. I pictured it all unfolding. A young one walking to church, seeing the nice things along the way, then seeing the homeless man, she's seen him before, wanting to help, she is pulled away, no one helps and he dies.

The youth see more innocently and clearly, they are naive, the rest of us are clouded by fear and pessimism and apathy.

Although one person at a time we can changed the world, with Random Act of Kindness. Wow, I guess it made me think. Thanks, Ted

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, you really get it!

So sad and tragic. Beautifully written.

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Much appreciated, thats so sweet. Thanks :)



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