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The Angel Turned Her Back

Poem By: tin2twinkling
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Submitted: Jul 9, 2008    Reads: 45    Comments: 8    Likes: 4   



I knew who to turn to…

Through the years, my pain was numbed
Whenever she would smile and hold my hand;
Through it all, our conversations kept me sane
When my tears refused to stop.

Her calm eyes were my salvation,
Her touch, my peace;
As I walked in the night with her right beside me,
There was nothing I could not face.

In times of hopelessness, she called me,
When I fell in despair, she was there
Whispering words and urging me to stand up,
To look ahead and hold on to tomorrow.

Her wings carried me through timeless dreams,
Her arms embraced me through the broken promises,
And I remained; I wished her presence to forever stay
So that beside me, I can always have someone.

Alas, this day is different, I notice…
I have long been suffering since before the sun dawned,
And I can not find her; not at my side,
I wonder where she has gone?

Confused and scared, I look around me
And there I see far away… her luminescent wings;
As she walks further from me, my heart cries out
A silent choking noise she refuses to hear.

I wonder why, I wonder how she could leave me
At my time of suffering, when I need her warmth,
When I want her sympathy, when I long for her?
Ah, Tears, my angel turns her back at me…

Now I do not know what to do…


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Comments:

beautiful. Simple complexity and sheer sadness. The deprivation one feels along with the main character is heart-wrenching. Such a beautiful sadness.......

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

good to know that the emotions are present in the poem and coming across to the reader.. thank you so much for reading =)

I love the way the tone transforms throughout the poem and how the beginning and ending lines really echo each other. I also really like your punctuation, believe it or not. It really emphasizes each stanza (my favorite is the end of the first one: "when my tears refused to stop." - the word 'stop' is at the end of the line, the end of the sentence, and the end of the stanza: perfect!) And I especially love the aside to the Tears at the end of the poem. That is particularly beautiful, since it's like the speaker has no one to talk to now except their own tears. Truly a glorious poem. ^_^

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hahahaha i have a thing about punctuations too! good thing you noticed the end of the first stanza, it was really meant to go how you described it. and as for the 'Tears', it only made sense that the speaker would have to rely on an imaginary or personified companion since the angel left him high and dry.. now i feel bad for portraying an angel as someone who abandons people lol.. nvm that, just some random ramblings..

thank you for reading!!

very beautifully written. you've captured that abandoned feelings, yearning for the old good times...:)

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

ahh the good ole times are really something precious. we must learn to treasure them but never rely on them to survive. being abandoned is hard to deal with and we suffer alone, but are we really left alone or do we let ourselves remain alone?

thank you so much for reading! =)

Very dark poem. I loved the tone and how it carried such a feeling of emptiness and despair at the departure of the angel. I could really relate to this one, having lost a close friend, someone I depended on and who left me "high and dry." Abandonment is such a hard thing to recover from...

Stephanee

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

yes, that feeling of being abandoned by the person you trust is really really hard to overcome.. thank you for the awesome comment! =)

I wish I had an angel in my life too...Mom was once upon a time...but now even she is far away...lol...such a sad theme...

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

yes, it it a sad theme.. i'm sure you have angels in your life, pratibha; you're so kind and gentle. thank you for reading!! =)

that is beautiful, i really liked your poem. i like the line 'carried me through timeless dreams', wow great job!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

hey, i thought that line is very special as well.. thank you so much! i'm so glad you liked it =)

Again the final line was brilliant, and the way you put it in italics like the first line, I thought that was a great effect because it could be read directly after the first line.
This poem was really nice to read, and so sad, it really makes you think how grateful you are for those that are there for you!

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

Author Comment:

yeah this poem was written the day someone i've always relied on just wasn't there for me.. and it seems selfish but i wanted the person to be there for me always.. lol what does that tell you about me? anyway, it really makes you think about how grateful we should be for those who stick beside us through the good and the bad.. and of course, to never take them for granted. =)

Hiya honey, i came back again to read this...ur response above brought tears in my eyes...thanks

This indeed is a soulful poem...

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks pratibha! i really can't help expressing my emotions through my poems sometimes.. it makes one feel a whole lot better to just put it out there.. this one was kinda sad, eh? again, thank you so much! =)



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