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What You've Done to Me

Poem By: UncommonCold
Poetry


Tags: poetry, love

I wrote this one just last night, while I lay missing my Christopher. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 17, 2008    Reads: 48    Comments: 3    Likes: 1   


I was lifeless until you breathed into me,
Before that moment, I never imagined all that life could be.
 
The first time I saw you,
The universe held still,
And suddenly my world revolved around you-
My purpose fulfilled.
 
A supernova of emotion
Sparked my light, fuelled devotion-
Set afire the ice in my veins.
The pain was gone, but yearning remained.
 
I needed you to speak, to laugh
To touch me in a way that no one could before;
To unleash the passions, which lay untapped,
And to teach me that life could hold so much more.
 
You helped erase all my monsters,
Each time you wiped away my tears-
Took away my darkling paradigm, whispers;
Tenderly warmed me, and washed away all the fears.
 
You taught me grace,
Gave me strength I never knew,
Until across a room I saw your face
And perceived my purpose within you.
 
It was like gravity,
Not even calamity
Could stop me falling
Just for you, darling.
 
I’m not very smooth
When sharing my feelings, it’s true,
But I had to be sure you knew
That I love you, though that line’s been used
But it’s the simple truth, and I used
To be afraid,
But now I know it’s okay.
 
This is my one, last shot
And I’ll gladly give you all I’ve got.
 
It’s irreversible and unbelievable,
Needing someone this much used to be inconceivable.
I never knew what this life could be worth
Until you showed me you’d walk to the ends of the earth.
You’d never believe
The beautiful dreams that I weave
Around you and me,
Baby, you’re all that I need.
 
Please accept my humble gift-
The greatest gift I can give of my words.
You smile, my heart and soul lift-
I trust you; love you, by now I’m sure you’ve heard.
 
I wanted to be sure you know
For you, I’d throw
Away the greatest power
Just to cherish a single hour
With you, my love.
No King or Prince could rank above
You in my heart,
And it’s been so from the start.


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Bree
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wow. i mean, there are no words. at least none that could compare to what you just wrote.
this is beautiful, my love.
and he doesn't deserve you.
C:

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Awwwwwwwww! Thanks, hon!
-snifflehugs-
I was just up late missing him, and this is what happened. Lol. I'm still trying to get all the rest of my stuff uploaded.
-nodnod-
I'm about to edit chapter II of The Hidden Kiss and put it up on here, again. Lol. Three cheers for Breanna VanBuren, the most inspired character I've ever had the pleasure of writing. You make my day, hon.
-supersnugs-
You are the BEST cousin...EVER! I love you.

deep. very deep. that's all I can say...oh, and, WOW. very good. geez, I'm almost speechless--almost. I don't think that will ever happen, but, with this poem, you've brought me pretty close.
Great job:)

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

AIIIIIIII!
-superhug-
-dances-
Thank you soooo much!
^_^
I'm almost done editing chapter two of The Hidden Kiss.
-secretive smile-
I'm so glad you're onliiiiine!
Eeeeeee!

wow,that's just. wow.... wow

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww...thank you!



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