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Love Lost At Sunrise

Poem By: UnspokenSoul22
Poetry


This is the lullaby of two persons-obviously; one is male, the other, female- as true love strikes in the midst of a night.
Though as we know, love lost is better than no love at all, but sometimes parting is such a sweet sorrow, that it will burn and burn till no end.
(( If you notice throughout the poem, the night grows old, and then morning breaks. Surely, you must know what happens then =) ))
Enjoy my friends~~
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Submitted: Aug 20, 2008    Reads: 129    Comments: 28    Likes: 9   


Love Lost At Sunrise

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~~Love hurts.Though, a life without love is a hollow, unfeeling, existence~~

~UnspokenSoul22

Saddest sorrow of all the sweetest demises:

The rhythm drew me in,

Caressing the planes of my face and soul,

As the music whisked me off my feet,

Slight fantasies breaking forth like the dawn in the cold, frosty darkness.

Halo of gold curl,

Crown of grapevine,

The curve of her hips,

Snared in a cascade of silk.

Irresistible is the passion,

Bleeding into the thick air as a sweet perfume,

A craving awaken,

Growling now, for more.

Something pulling,

A force pushing,

Suddenly,

There's no space to breathe.

Just her and I in the moonlight,

Moorings of the twilight twining us as one,

Swaying about and around,

Whilst as long as till the sunlight burns down,

Savoring each touch and taste,

Ever minute together in that trance,

Blinded by the beauty afoot.

Awed by the flame of the moment,

Stunned by the soft radiance of the other,

Thrilled by the feeling of oneness,

Saddened at the thought of leaving,

As the sun twinkled high in the morn' sky.

'Twas the time of my life, my darling,

Though, now 'tis be the dawning of our goodbye.


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Comments:

Awesome!!! Very Nice Job!!

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Cool. Love is either so sweetly good, or so sweetly painful, but always so fleeting and always so worth it.

= :)

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Nice job it was good

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

I sorta agree with Salicgail. Love is great, but painful to say goodbye. Anyway, great job, I enjoyed it ^-^

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Wow.. Really good! Keep writing!

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Vampires kick-ass. =^.^=

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Where'd that come from? =)
Well, they do. =P

Fantastic and fanciful loved it to bits you certainly have a way with you the words just caress the tip of my tongue smoothly shimmering through the night air she abandones her lover without a care.
Nice going kido 9/10

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

wow
this is
really good
:]
tell me hen you wroite a new poem :]

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Thrilled by the feeling of oneness,

Saddened at the thought of leaving,

what a contrast...it pulled the strings of my heart...

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

It pulled the strings of your heart?
Wonderful! -Claps-
I'm glad my writing provokes that extremeness of emotion!

It was nice.

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Intense, really good piece
a bit heavy for my taste, but never the less, a wonderful composition

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

i enjoyed it =]
check out my stuff when u have time =]

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

i love the passion in your poems. The feelings of the poem always come across as powerfully as they are felt.
Perect song choice.
Loved it great work.
Your one to watch.
If you have the time would you glance over my new poem 'Baby Daniel' I'd really appricate it.

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

Author Comment:

=) Sweett..I'm ONE to WaTcH.
How special! =]
Baby Daniel? Sure, I'll read it!

That's beautiful! Such description, it's breath taking. :) Great Job!

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, once again.
I wanted the reader to understand the passion between the two individuals, so that could relate in some way.
=)

Loved it. Haven't read such a good poem in a while. It's very beautifully carved. Very well finished. Very sentimental. AWESOME!!

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Awesome? That's t0tally sweet 0f y0ush!

Wow...that is absolutely beautiful...It's almost breathtaking. Really nice job! WOW!

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Breathtaking! Whoa!!!
Thanks for the comment.
I love to hear what people think!

Dah! Nice song. And very lovely poem. Lovely to read. =]♥♥

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

=} Tehe. I luff meh Nickelback.
Thanks!!

I love them both... Great going Becca!

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Hiya Brit. =) How're you?
Thanks!

Take care, my friend!
~~Carpe Diem

beautiful, simply beautiful, what else can i say? well done.

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

I just got this image of a boy and girl head to head at a window, The first sunlight Rising over the hills, Then lean into kiss but just before their mouths meet The sun becomes visible and the girl turns to stardust. The boy looks out the windows and a single tear rolls down his face as he draws in the blind. Lonely for another day.

Posted: Sep 22, 2008

Wonderous. Again the music is really good. But the poem's better...LOL.
I must say i'm growing attached to your writting style it's brillant! Oh I'm just at a loss for words... :)

Posted: Sep 24, 2008

I loved it, it made me want to cry.

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Wow. I just read that. Sorry it took me so long to get here. Great writing =) Keep up the good work!

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Soul22, such a wonderful well written piece.. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Keep up the good work.

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

every once in a while , a poem shouts at me . ''this came from a romantic heart '' the poem i just read was such a shout , beautifully done .

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

my heart sped up at every new line...thats the first time a poem has done that to me...i don't even comment on poems...amazing poem...it made a great impression on me... thank you

Posted: Oct 3, 2008

Poetry is your calling! this made me think and you are very good with things that have something to do with love or passion

Posted: Oct 19, 2008

you kinda look choosy on the comments huh?
anyway, i like this work of yours!
your choice of words is/are impressive, as well as how you use them... so can you check my poems too?

Posted: Nov 3, 2008



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