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Submitted: Apr 1, 2008 Reads: 81 Comments: 9 Likes: 7
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Hi Urja,After reading this I remembered how true this is in the Instituition I did my PG.Needless to say, all words stirred my soul. Will try to make little kriish understand the importance of LIFE and this poem will be a great help to me.
Do compile all of them
waiting eagerly for your new entries.
Posted: Apr 1, 2008
You are right. Even I am scared to ask "Why"? And why should i wait for the world to change? I myself can make a huge difference.Right? And it starts in training the Gen-NEXT right at home.I don't want to die with so many WHYs unanswered? At least I will try to figure out with your help and guidance
Posted: Apr 1, 2008
Urja:
Well written. Certainly explores the topic. At length. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.
Thank you for becoming a fan.
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
Posted: Apr 1, 2008
Powerful poem. I love the message, and I try to release the knots of my mind often. It can be tough not to get swept up in the race, tougher still to take the plunge and go against the tide or to drift a few feet away while you try to decide what path in life is best for YOU.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
I forgot to add this poem makes me think of a Smashing Pumpkins song...the lyrics "despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." I used to hear this song a lot when I waitressed midnights at a busy restaurant in a college town. It mirrored my state of mind then as I tended to a sea of rats who took me for granted.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Wow. This is hauntingly wonderful, and you have made me into a new person just by posting this. I am so, so, SO freaked out that you would want to be my fan, too!
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
Great poem. It flows so nice. I love the concept and the message. It is a little too small for my bad eyes, but I endevoured to read it all and really, really liked it. Thanks for sharing, Ted :)
Posted: Aug 13, 2008
I gave you an "I like it" vote. But, I more than just liked it. I loved it! It flowed with the fluidity of a slow moving stream ambling it's way through some gentle rolling landscape. It made many references that we sometimes are so caught up and may be in too much of a hurry in our daily lives to take the effort and the time to slow down enough to smell the roses and put an answer to some of life's questions, the "Whys?" I grew up being and was always the "Why" kid but, just because I wanted to know the answer.
This does not and is not intened to take anything away from your superbly written poem. Just sharing a little bit of humor. I once read somewhere that the trouble with winning the rat-race is that if you win, you are still a rat!
Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading some of your other pieces!
Posted: Aug 26, 2008
Feral little pests on this Earth aren't we?
I pity those that spend their lives between towers of concrete and glass. Some can go through their entire life with their 'success' and not enjoy what lies beyond the parking lot.
My race is not to become anything in this life, because I find it hard to conform to the societies that value six years into an easily ripped certificate.
My race is with my own mind. Peace will never be achieved, but I hold onto those moments for as long as I can. But like you said, whether I live how I want or not I am going to die anyway.
Never want to spend years of my life for unnecessary monetary value nor for political correctness.
My mind is my priceless asset, I feed it with those solitary moments in nature. I want to know how a rainbow forms an arch, and so I will continue to ask why.
Even now it is me, me, me...
Forgive me if I am confusing you in my clutter of words.
What a flow of words... you are something else. My thought process explodes with your writing, a true drive of energy and intellect.
Posted: Oct 11, 2008
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