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Words and Ideas

Poem By: Urja
Poetry


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Submitted: Apr 1, 2008    Reads: 67    Comments: 6    Likes: 5   


Words and Ideas
Sometime so hard to express,
The mind feels like a vast building,
Countless corridors, myriad passages with
Numberless rooms,
All locked, keys tossed into a bottomless pit,
Yet seemingly just within my grasp.
Is that the language of the aphasics -
A clueless life spent groping,
Always groping
For words which would not be found?
Then there are other times, like now,
When words seem to flow out,
Abundantly, torrentially, purposefully,
Wresting out ideas half-conceived,
Half-expressed, half-imagined still,
Springing unbidden,
Focusing aim with extravagant clarity,
While ideas burn out
And new ones form,
Even when the seeds run out,
The forms condense to assume
Germinative power,
Running their relentless race.
How to pace the words such that
Ideas and words,
Words and ideas
Always perform in tandem?
Control and precision – these are
The keywords.
The willingness and the ability
To dig deeper
And deeper still,
Even beyond the deepest depth –
Once the obstacles are struck,
They can be overcome;
And then when I dig deeper still,
An ecstatic access
To undiscovered treasures,
All mine, all mine,
More mine than this mortal self
For they are stamped, irreversibly,
With that which makes them possible,
The passion, possession,
The spirit of creativity,
All discoveries,
More waiting still, waiting for me.
Words, though, sometimes
Outrun the thoughts,
The single seed whence they sprung;
But outcomes vary.
While there are some times they reach
Unexpected luminance
When pursuing purposeless path,
The other times they fade and die,
Twisting and turning at dead ends.
Which is stronger,
Ideas or words?
For one may exist
Independent of the other
But unless coupled, they lose
All meaning, all purpose,
Their fruitless existence a burden,
Nothing but a waste of time.
Words assail at times,
Seemingly purposeless,
Then condense fast to form a core,
A brand new idea born, Minerva-like,
Fully armed, fully clothed
With words ready to take it far.
Sometime when an idea strikes,
Result, undoubted, of subconscious thought,
Dazzling the mind with its focus,
The naked brilliance,
Pausing at that is vital then,
And look into its face,
And look,
Then slowly, deliberately
Proceed to clothe it right,
Layer by layer
Till words envelope it
And shape it in a recognizable form.
Giving form to substance,
Or giving soul to a structure,
Who can say what matters more?
Ultimately as I have
A strong new idea thriving,
Nurtured by words that matter,
Relevant, focused and vectored,
I can look the creator in the eye
And share
The wonder and pride of creation.


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Comments:

Urja:

Saw this as having a pro-life message. So! I liked it. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Recommend reading my posting of "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3". Most expecially what is in the "comments" section. This is where you'll find my explanation of what comprises both rhyme and rhythm in poetry. Your work is a little too wordy. This means, in some lines, fewer words and syllables would improve the flow and presentation. Without a loss of meaning.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Apr 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Ed, for the feedback. I had a nagging feeling too that something was not quite right, but I was not able to put my finger on it. Thanks for pointing it out - it IS rather too wordy. It is comments like these that matter when it comes to improvement in the style, and I appreciate it.

Will certainly read the 'Love Intended' triad and your explanation reg rhyme and rhythm. As for myself, I have found that my use of rhyme and rhythm correlates closely with the phase of life I have been passing through while writing any particular piece. For eg, when I started writing as a teenager, I was very particular about the use of both, probably due to the idealism associated with youth, and a stronger (and what I now feel, out of proportion) value system. It mattered that what I wrote should 'sound' right. Now, having settled with a good career and the rest, I have paradoxically become somewhat of a cynic; and I certainly do not have as strong a sense of direction as I used to have, probably because I evaluate everything too deeply. Hence my thoughts wander in too many directons, ramify with eachother, and there is altogether too much to be expressed. I have a feeling that this phase of life would end too, maybe with me finally finding my niche. Maybe then I would again feel comfortable about the use of rhyme and rhythm.

Yes, I agree with Ed. The message behind the poems are great, simply superb but if only they could be little bit more simpler for audience like me.Then it will appeal to a larger mass.
The poem "Rats in a Race" and The above one are both brilliant.They convey the message that you have experienced it all by urself and are not faking it at any point of time.The truth behind the words is obvious and so it touches heart.

I liked it. But I loved "Rats in a Race"

Posted: Apr 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha..ha... I know why you like 'Rats in a Race', Praibha!!! But seriously, Ed is right - I need to cut down on the wordiness, as he aptly puts it.

Honestly, with each read , i feel as if I am getting closer and closer to it's true meaning.
Beautiful poem.

I am so so so............jealous .....

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

You are just too sweet. Thank you so much.

Wow Urja, this is a brilliant read.
Which is stronger,
Ideas or words?
For one may exist
Independent of the other
But unless coupled, they lose
All meaning, all purpose
I love this, ideas are nothing unless expressed in some way.
I enjoy your writing. It flows from one thought to another in a seemingly effortless style. It is thought provoking but no way intangible.

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Anna, thank you so much for appreciating this poem. I really thought that I had rambled on in an intangible fashion, because none of the previous comments had talked about the thoughts expressed here. But I think I need to edit it a bit (as correctly pointed out by Ed). Wish I wasn't lazy!

Dwelling too much on the conflict will eventually cancel each other out; reverting all sense of writing to absolute zero. Well... that is how I try to see it.

And that is why I value raw writing. Not everything can be a masterpiece, but small amounts at a time and I find my way again (not to say I have ever created a masterpiece).

Maybe create some space between some lines, so I can breathe. That was my attempt at humor in case you felt a sting.

I am currently in a dry spell, but I wait for the shape of my creation...

Posted: Oct 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello Knight, I can see what you mean about raw writing. Personally, I believe in keeping a balance - I too believe in keeping the writing essentially raw, but I also like to edit jarring things - stuff which either sounds stilted, or is technically incorrect (of course, for not worrying about the latter we can always claim poetic licence!). But then, again, I don't like to edit so much that the intensity of the original thought get stifled and does not come through.

Your comments are most thought-provoking and I value receiving them. Thank you so much.

Good poem, but i must admit i should have read this first.....ur intensity was max in "The Anguish...." nd that will still be my fav of ur writings

Posted: Nov 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha ha ha .... as of now it is my favorite too! This one was more introspective, and I feel it gets a bit tiresome some times. I'm so happy you liked it, though. Thank you for dropping in.



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