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Let go of the pain

Poem By: Vampire Angel
Poetry


This is about a daughter seeing the pain that her mom's going through and trying to help her. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 12, 2008    Reads: 85    Comments: 12    Likes: 6   


You've gone through this pain for so long

I wish i could take it away so you can have a minute of being happy

Coming home and seeing you in tears makes me feel angry and sorry for you at the same time

You can't seem to understand what he's doing to you..... or me

There are somethings in the world that you can never forgive he is one of them

Try and understand it kills me seeing you like this

Are you afraid to let go?

I need you to see what he's doing he'll never stop

I can see it in your eyes that you can't take this any more

Let me help you

The Constant Yelling and screaming and pain

is like a song on the radio station that keeps going on and on

Untill you get so sick and tired of it you make it stop

The harsh words that slap against your face

and the stinging whoosh that slams past you

are almost unbareable to watch

The anger builds inside me and i wish i could make him see what he's done to you

But it would be a waste cause he would never care

Please try and see the real demon he is

Because when you take control you will finally be free.


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Comments:

WOW.
That is really powerful.
Keep it up
xxxxxx

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Really? Thanks i guss i'm kind of on a role here i will post 2 other poems soon. Thamks again for reading and commenting.:)

WOW! that was
AMAZING emotion! Great job on this one girl! That was simply amazing , thats all i can say. : D
WOW!

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much.And thanks again for reading and commenting i apppreciate it.:)

The Constant Yelling and screaming and pain

is like a song on the radio station that keeps going on and on.

I am entirely speechless. You've been telling me for a while about your parents fighting and the sh!t thats been going on between them. But in this poem you truly express the feelings that you try to hide every day, and I'm proud of you for letting them out like this. For a second, as I read this poem, I really felt in your place. You should show this to your mom Joanna. This was a great poem, fabulous writing and wording. Great job:)

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you i feel proud ha ha. Oh i'm sorry.NO NO NO i am definetly not showing this to her well at leaset not now it's rough. Thanks i really appreciate your comment and thanks again for reading this.:)

fantastic
bravo

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks i appreciate you reading and commenting.:)

Look's like you can't write a bad poem, eh?
:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

ha ha Thanks but you never know i might. Thanks again for reading and commentiing.:)

its good a little to emo coming from a girl that sounds like a prep, just kidding. its really good and deep and now i know what zoe was talking about when she said u have good poems on booksie.

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw thank you and thanks for finally reading it.:)

Wow! i don't know how else to say it... WOW. very powerful, and i can feel the strength of the poem build up throughout it.

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Really? Thanks i'm so glad you like this one. thanks for reading this.

This is really emotional.It's never good to be in a abusive relationship.It's way better to break it off before it gets to the point that's it's too late.Great job.

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks and i'm glad you like it.

Wow.this is amazing!! its very sad and I can somehwat relate to it!! But awesome job...Its very well written and very good job at expressing the emotion!!

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

Author Comment:

haha thanks i'm glad you think it's amazing and you can relate to it. Thanks again for reading.

This is really sad.Remindes me on smtn,but nvm....Great poem.
:)

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading and commenting it means alot.:)

Hey Angel :) I agree that this is very powerful. Every single word is bleeding with emotion and you really describe some great imagery here. It is sad but very very good. Take care!

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. I'm so glad got out all the emotion in the words cause i had so much emotion when i was writing this. Thanks again for reading and commenting i appreciate it.:)

Deep.

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading and commenting.:)



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