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Poem By: Vehement Emotions
Poetry

Tags: philosophy, thinking, reality, perception

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Submitted: Jun 30, 2008 Reads: 49 Comments: 7 Likes: 3

rolling

strolling

our intellects grow wings

and take flight from this brain dead earth

"truth is subjective"

we philosophize

hypothesize

we imagine

bath in

cognizance

words cascade over the ridge of our lips

to create an ocean of possibility

for reality

because each set of eyes percieves a variant reality

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Comments:

Classy Peach

and this is a true story.
very well done.

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

devilrod

yes, yes
you are right about truth
so it is true about truth
keep up the work...do work son..haha

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Hychydig Afon

Beautifully penned. And of course, nothing but the truth.

The only part I don't really agree with [[strictly writing, now]] is at the end, where you repeated the words "reality" in such close proximity of each other. Idk. Maybe it works. I just have a slight issue with repetition in writing. lol

~Jess~

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

LaughingRain

I really dig this one, it's totally a mentality I think on literally every minute of every day. And it's funny because I imagine this exact scene with my cousin and I when go walking and discussing things that would blow the generic mind. I really love how this poem really feels alive, it can connect to people.

I do agree about the repetition of reality, it seems like the first usage could be changed to something else, the word "technicality" flows into my mind there but the second usage definately fits and should stay if you were ever to change one.

But it doesn't really need to be changed, it's a work on its own whatever our opinions. Excellent piece of work. :)

Posted: Jul 10, 2008