A pin drop will make the pyramid fall.
A break of a blade of grass would crush my ears.
One word will snap the thread of life.
Weak of will,
subtle heart,
emotional wreck.
Let it work.
Let it go.
don't let go of me.
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Submitted: Feb 8, 2008 Reads: 44 Comments: 4 Likes: 2
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Interesting one. The wording in the second 2 line of the first stanza is mildly incoherent, but it could be made into a really good piece, I think.
Posted: Feb 9, 2008
Beautiful adaptation of the chaos theory, if i interpret it correctly, the last stanza is to leave the reader wondering as to what would happen if they were to let go of you in regards of the chaos theory
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
Hmm... What would happen if they let go of you in regards to the chaos theory....
Since chaos theory is the slow build up of an event until it is on a catastrophic scale, the immediate effect would be a broken heart which would build up (just like the butterfly flapping its wing will cause a hurricane on the other-side of the world) and in the end would leave you broken entirely... heart...body... and soul
Posted: Jun 23, 2008
A nice slice of emotional expression.
In other words, I like this poem.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
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