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Strange Happenings

Poem By: viper
Poetry


I thought I'd try to write a poem about a haunting just to try something a little different.I hope you like it.Let me know. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 27, 2008    Reads: 52    Comments: 14    Likes: 4   


     Strange Happenings
 
 
It was a dark and stormy night
There was no one else in sight
 
 
I was home all alone
I wasn’t even talking on phone
 
 
I thought I’d lye down to rest my head
All of a sudden something made me jump out of bed
 
 
I went to the living room and saw a tipped over chair
I looked around but there was nothing and no one there
 
 
I thought to myself this couldn’t be real
But I couldn’t change the way I feel
 
 
All of a sudden I heard another noise
I listened carefully and it sounded like a voice
 
 
I went to my room to see if it was the tv
It was off and I thought this can’t be happening to me
 
 
As I was thinking this I heard footsteps on the floor
Next thing I know I heard a loud bang hit the door
 
 
I jumped and shouted and thought “What am I gonna do?”
I had to do something but I couldn’t move
 
 
I slowly walked over and open the door and there was nothing and no one there
I said to myself “Ok now I’m scared.”
 
 
I said “Ok if want me gone knock three times.”
I heard the knocking and that was my sign.
 
 
I finally knew what was going on
I packed my stuff and I was gone


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I looked and I saw him step in on the mat, I looked and I saw him the Cat in The Hat and I said to him...etc etc....the meter reminded me of the very cool Dr Suess.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I appreciate that.Glad you enjoyed it.

:)

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.

Hey viper sorry about the long delay in me responding to your excellent poem full marks i loved it really imaginative and tense to the end you are a real star BD
10/10

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Buffer.I greatly appreciate that.Take your time.There's no hurry.They're always there.I'm glad you enjoyed it.Thanks for your comment.

another creepy one. yay! you're pretty good at doing creepy. :P

I really like the ending.

=D

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I'm pretty new at the creepy poems.I've never really done them.I'm glad you enjoy them.I was worried they wouldn't go over so well.I'm glad you liked them.Thanks for the great comment.

:) You CAN write creepy poems! It good ones... YAY! It was really good...It sort of felt like spiders were crawling up my spine....*Shudders* Great ryming and imagery. Double thumbs up. :)
Thanks for the heads up viper. Best of luck!

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I really appreciate that.I like the idea of being scared by the paranormal.I'm so glad you enjoyed it.I really appreciate your kind words and comment.

Wow! It is really haunting... The new font suits this poem very well. You are experimenting with new themes these days and it is wonderful to see you excelling each time.

CREEPY... So what was that??? Really, i feel such things too, as if somebody is coughing in the other room, a stranger's voice calling me by name, a torch beaming at me in the dead of night etc...( i am a self confessed schizo though doctors may not agree ha ha)... I mean your poem is great with unlimited potential... Oh I wish it were longer.

I like it, like it, like it.
Alas! I have only one vote to give:(

=)

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much.I really appreciate that very much.I'm always trying to come up with new ideas.I thought I would try some supernatural things to see how well they worked out.I so greatly appreciate your kind words and great comment.Thanks again so much.I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Love it viper! Sure is a new on of yours, I don't see many of yours that are creepy. I loved this poem, good rhythm to it =)

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I appreciate it.I thought I'd try something new.It's not the normal but I thought I'd give it a try.Thanks for the kind words and comment.

I really liked this Viper! The end was awesome! Keep up the good work dude. :) .........>LaughingRain

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I'm glad you enjoyed it.I appreciate the great commment and kind words.I'll try to keep it up.

This is lovely....100/100....really creepy and scary and at the same time, engaged the reader with 'what next , what next?'''
is this based on true events ???

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I appreciate that.I'm trying to write about different things.No it wasn't based on actual events.It's a fictional poem.I'm trying to broaden my ideas.I'm glad you enjoyed it.Thanks for the great comment and your kind words.

Great.

Did you read "Ghost Encounters:The Laments" written by me?

Posted: Aug 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much.I honestly can't remember.I'll check it out and see.Thanks for your comment.

This is the stuff I like. Glad I got to reading it! (Sorry for not reading it sooner, though)

Posted: Aug 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.It's fine.I understand.Take your time.Thanks for the kind words and comment.

awesomenezzzXD this kind of poem gives me the chilling fun!! love every bit of it:) great one, Viper

Posted: Aug 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Indie.I appreciate it.I was hoping for it to be creepy.I'm glad you liked it so much.Thanks for your kind words and comment.

I liked it, I thought it was an excellent piece of work.

Posted: Sep 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot.I was a little worried about this one.

Wow... you did great! Seems just like a short story, only shorter. I'm still not sure what was in the house but that's what makes it interesting!
Don't tell!
*cassiroll411*

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol.Thanks I appreciate that.It was my first supernatural poem.I was hoping I'd get good comments on it.I was a little worried about it.I'm glad you enjoyed it.



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