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Submitted: Jun 7, 2008 Reads: 1046 Comments: 69 Likes: 25
"I love you"
The words echo around my head
My heart squeezes tight
No not again
"Whats wrong?"
Abuse, hatred, neglect
It all comes back
No not again
"Don't cry"
But the tears fall freely
free fall
And a wall erects
Divided
No not again.
Behind the wall of tears.
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Diz got emotion. Like it...
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
awww sooo sad :[
but such a lovely poem! you wrote it well. i saw it as the guy trying to comfort his girl, but she just can't open her heart completely to him b/c of this wall. so sad :[ but such a good poem :]
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
I saw it the exact same way Alice did. I also liked it. :) Nice Work!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
Aww, so sweet. I like it a lot! Good job!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
aww, that's so sad!
Why is person crying by the, i'm curious.
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
Awesome poem! A graet poem like this deserves to be liked more!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
thats really sad. i feel like crying now. but thats what makes it a good poem. great job! =)
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
that's sad...i dont know what to say to this one...but, it is good
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
Liked it, for some ppl this is sadly true. everyone should just be happy and never cry! lol but life's not perfect obviously. well written, write more, liked the pics that went along with it too. =]
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
The girl must have suffered a lot in her life as u said....poor thing is not able to
'trust'anyone again for the fear of being hurt again....
great read buddy....stirred the soul....
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
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I loved it.. :) Its so sad though... Just awe.
Amazing how poetry can make something so sad, seem beautiful at the same time, isn't it?
Great job.. ^-^
~!~Megan~!~
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
NIce,please post on my pomes aswel :D
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
i understand her feelings... not being able to open up...Great poem:)
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
Nicely written.. in deep blue... I liked it...
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
wow, you've written this so uniquely. I absolutely love it! Brilliant work!
Steph(:
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
good job. i liked it. keep it up!
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
this poem grabs your attention i think. Your descriptions are very clear, too. And i think that the mystery in it makes it just that much better. Loved it! :)
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
This was a very sad, yet sweet poem. It created a grea visual, and I could picture it all in my mind so clearly. Great poem. I liked it. ^^
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
I love your poem,its quite simple but effective even though its not that short.xxx love it xx
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
So sad, yet beautiful. I can relate to it really well. Great job =]
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
Wandi, oh, it is so touching. you really went deep with this one. very nice *******
~katie
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
aww thats a sad one! it was good though!
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
Hey, very nice. I like it, its simple but hits hard. Great job! ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
This is such an amazing capturing of an imprisoning love. Truly amazing, love it :D
x
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
great job
in just a few lines you captured attention, told a bit about this girl who can't open up, and completely blew us away
congrats!
^^-
comment me when more is up :]
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
hi jerry, really liked this one.... this person has been hurt and it's hard for her to believe that someone can actualy mean it when they say that they love her. the emotions come through very strong.... suppose everyone can relate to this. nice work
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
what do i say.....its beautiful yet sad at the same time.......a must read for all who think they alone are suffering these things.....
:)
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
boy, this one is a head turner!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
I'm gone a few days and look what you go and do? You slip in a wonderful little poem! It was really beautiful and for some reason this morning it feels like you wrote it for me. :) I love it!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Very, very good.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Your poem very beautifully captures the helplessness of a guy who desperately loves this woman and is unable to find a way to make her trust him (bad childhood? past betrayals? I like to keep wondering!). I can't help thinking that the wall will shatter some day..... but that's the romantic in me!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Oh, such a sad poem! I can only hope that one day she lets the walls fall away, because she might surprised at what's waiting on the other side :) To me this poem speaks of true love: a girl who's been hurt in the past and the man who patiently waits for her to heal so he can show her something better. Beautiful! Thanks for bringing this lovely poem to my attention, Wandiola, I thought it was incredibly emotional and touching.
Stephanee
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
i like that. it's well discribed and very sad. each line just stabs a whole right through your heart. take care.
Lydia_xxxx
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
very sad. I liked it though. Take care.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Wow in so little words it's very emotional! I loved it! Keep writing and try to read my work! Thanks KK
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
i love how there's dialogue (sort of) in the poem. it makes it come alive more. i liked it!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
succinct, emotional and nicely written for mine.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
simply great!!!
TC
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
So good. ^^
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
takes the breath away
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
^^Great writing,and of coursre,great snap that you embeded alongside it.Well tears sometime washout bad hard feelings and sometime filup,its depand on your tears way.Good work,simply light.keep it in future.
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Posted: Jun 10, 2008
amazing
yet sad.
but still was so beautiful
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Posted: Jun 10, 2008
All I can say is WOW!!! I loved it!!!
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
wow..rich in emotion..a sad poem but its a very good and great poem..hehe adanda danda ahhhhhhhhhhhh..... hehe keep it up...i hope i am a good writer like you..hehe
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
Wow, this is really good. So sad, but it's really good! You've got talent... ;) Keep it up, Melissa♥
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
Awesome!
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
Superb...captured the emotions so well......and many of us guard our love behind walls once bitten so deep in love......The picture enhances it all....great writing....Take care Juliet
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
I like the repetition thing you've got there. And I'm not a big poetry person but I like this one. The emotions are just laid out there, and even then there's still room for interpretation. :D
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
This was very sad but good. A character that is afraid to love again because of his/her history... he/her is afraid of getting hurt again. The way you set it up is gorgeous^_^, I like the italics signalling the person's voice and then his/her thoughts are the rest of the words. At least that's what I thought it meant... I think that poems can have all kind's of scenarios, and this is the one I thought up. I liked this^_^!
I will be back to read some more of your stuff-- sorry about this comment coming late-- I've been busy.
Lot's of special chocolate to you,
Ghiradelli Girl.
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
Absolutely beautiful. I reckon I could relate to this poem in the future, I have so much pain in my life that when someone finally comes along and wants to be with me I'm going to be hiding 'behind the wall of tears' saying to myself 'No not again'.
The is my favourite of your work so far. I absolutely love this poem so much that you have actually inspired me to want to write a response to it...I'll tell you when I've posted it up.
Keep up the great work.
Olola.
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
WOW! this pierces the heart!
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
wow...its a beautifully sad poem
full of emotion, waaaa i luv it!!^^
great work =]=] keep it up
xxxx
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
great poem. there was emotion and i could put myself into the girls position. it truly was a great piece of work.
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
It;s so sad but I liked it. I hope I get to read more of yuor work. Keep it up;)
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
It's pretty intelligent and i liked it very much.
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
Awwwwwww, this was so touching. I love it. Very well done on this piece, it's sad but beautiful. :) Keep it up!
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
Wow... I'm not a poetry kind of person, but this is really great. I love it!
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
well done, i personaly dont think the picture oes well, but thats just me. Well written i'l giveing at i like it vote!
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
i really like this. it is really good.
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
i like this one it is very good and so very sadly true when love bites it bites hard and it so hard to overcome it and trust and love again :( but ur writing style and choice of words are awesome great job :)
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
WOW this is really really really sad but even better than it is sad!!!!!!
Great work!
Keep it up!
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
those words capture that emotion perfectly!!
awseome job!! ^.^
Posted: Jun 23, 2008
Really beautiful poem.
Catches the essence of what if feels like when someone you love hurts you.
xxx
Posted: Jul 10, 2008
i just had to come back here when i finished reading Olola's response for this poem.
Ah, wonderful indeed!
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
The poem is great. its a fabulous poem i love it you should carry on writting
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
YEA - but you have to answer the call of love.
Posted: Aug 14, 2008
Short and sweet. I LOVE IT, Wandiola, for its very clear and pure message to me.
craaig
Posted: Sep 27, 2008
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