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Submitted: May 17, 2008 Reads: 558 Comments: 27 Likes: 10
You promised me,
I remember, that very night,
You promised me,
You'd always be with me.
Do you remeber that now?
Do you remember those comely words
You spoke to me that very calm cool night,
I thought not.
Those were false words.
'Cos now your gone,
You left me, with nothing.
You left me bitter
My heart has grown cold.
My mind has become blank.
My body has grown stiff
Betrayal has spoiled me,
And so now I've decided
No more promises.
No more forgotten promises
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I could feel the emotion you put into this. It's so sad when promises are broken. Great job =D
Posted: May 17, 2008
this is a really good poem, full of hurt. be strong. people let you down unfortunately and its a hundred times worse if you love them but time will ease.
take care snow x
Posted: May 17, 2008
this poem has really good emotion. you can feel the anger at the end. good job! =)
Posted: May 17, 2008
wow, words so honest and beautiful, that's the best way I could describe it! This poem really reached out to me. Brilliantly written my dear!
Steph:)
Posted: May 17, 2008
hi, this is really good. full of emotion and wonderfully put into words..great stuff
Posted: May 17, 2008
This is real good!!! It has a lot of emotion written on it! ^_^
Posted: May 17, 2008
I agree with everyone else, the poem really does have a lot of emotion and it really did reach out to me. As I read through it, I could feel the anger of the poetry gradually building up. You have so much talent.
Keep up the great work!
Olola.
Posted: May 17, 2008
you show wisdom beyond your years in this one.
Posted: May 17, 2008
Emotional... Promises are easily made, but not all of them are fulfilled. Nice job.
Posted: May 17, 2008
Very emotional and breathtaking.
I loved it so much
=]
-Ally
Posted: May 17, 2008
So sad wandiola..
Good poem.^^
Posted: May 18, 2008
Aw, bless you. If there's anything I've learned it's that promises get broken, actions speak louder than words at the end of the day. This is a stunning poem, I loved it! ~ Gypsy
Posted: May 18, 2008
oh this poem is so original :)
Posted: May 18, 2008
Great poem! Sorry for your sorrows, unfortunately when promises are forgotten the heart never forgets.
Posted: May 18, 2008
i like it :]
Posted: May 18, 2008
Good job, Wandiola. Your poem is charged with emotion that touches my heart. And very true. Promises are often made to be broken later.
Posted: May 19, 2008
There was a little bit of every emotion--pain, anger and bitterness. The tone was soft though. The poem was something like a river too quiet yet mysterious. It was carefully written...
Posted: May 19, 2008
This poem has great flow, I loved how you stressed the right parts in italics. Hmmm, a little left to be desired as far as spelling and correct words are concerned, but hey, no big, that is a worry for when you get in the mindset to get published. ;) Al things considered, very powerful.
Take care,
T.
Posted: May 20, 2008
i can definitely relate
Posted: May 20, 2008
The emotion leapt right off the screen...it was amazing... good job!
Posted: May 24, 2008
Maybe i should get you to teach my sister to write poems. because she's always writing poems like this, but somehow she never really got the feel.
Yours truly have great affection to it!!
Posted: May 28, 2008
enjoyable. I liked the strong narrative in this poem. keep up the good effort.
Posted: May 29, 2008
i liked it, it was sad but fantastic!
Posted: May 29, 2008
This really good. That's the hard thing about promises like that. People always think they cankeep it, but it doesn't always turnout that way. Your poems always have a nice flow to them. :)
Posted: May 30, 2008
One of the worst things in life is believe in someone and in the end they turn thier backs on you. A promise is a comfort to a fool my mom always say.
good job. all the best... lexie
Posted: May 30, 2008
Sad how he left her...I like the poem, give it 9.6 out of 10. Question: Did u have a boyfriend and he left or something?
Posted: Jun 4, 2008
promises are cracked and broken so easily. friends leave you, parents abandon you. they always say "i will always be there for you" or "i will watch you grow up safely" promises are almost never kept around me, i hope no one breaks theirs to you
Posted: Jun 6, 2008
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