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"We're fools whether we dance or not, so we might as well dance."
Japanes proverb.
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Submitted: Jul 15, 2008 Reads: 100 Comments: 38 Likes: 11
Music tingles the souls of my feet,
The pulse of my heart adjusts to a new beat,
Time and pain wither away
Helping me see light in a brand new day,
The chains of pride have since been broken
Setting free so many words unspoken
So now I'm free to dance
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For i'll never be outspoken.
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ouuu, I love it. so beautiful. the title immediately reminded me of the song "i am free" by the newsboys. have you ever heard it? it's jenuis, you should check it out, lol. anyway back to the poem, ahhh, i don't even know what to say. it's beautiful, lovely, it makes me feel like...ugh, it's hard to explain. so clearly you've left me speachless and that is very hard to do. lol. Brilliant poem!!!
Steph(:
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
That was so beautiful!! ^-^ It made me wanna get up and dance.. Fantastic poem!!
~Megan
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Lovely :)
xx
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
brilliant. makes me wanna dance too...=)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
I think dance is a great way to express oneself without saying much. Personally, I enjoy dancing, it's great for stress-relief!!! Like you said 'Time and pain wither away' as our hearts adjust to a new beat!
Keep up the great work!
Olola.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
wow this is really good i really like this poem
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
that was great. Simply beautiful.
S
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
From a dancers point of view that was simply perfect! Dance, for me, is a way for everyone to become equal, to become one. That is the purpose after all, to look like one dancer. Awesome job! =) Mandy
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Every line was amazing =] I could feel the emotion :D Great job!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
awesome! :) i absolutely loved it! :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
This poem defintely made me want to DANCE!! Lol. I loved it! :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
i love it. keep up the good work
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
very encouraging! me like!!
i loved the rhyme words and the message!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Aww, that is so beautiful! I love the words you chose to describe your emotion and the flow in this poem. Dancing really does set you free. This piece is absolutely flawless. Well done :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
i am going for aerobics lately to lose weight and this poem is apt for my mood...lovely...my vote for u honey
will check the novel later...
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
i really liked this one :) i agree that dance is a way to speak volumes without ever saying a word :) dance is prolly the oldest form of expression :) i really liked the rhyme scheme and i really like order of the lines in this poem :) GREAT JOB!!!! :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
I like it a lot.
I bet there was a new freedom from where this came inspired from.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
o wow, simply amazing.
L ♥
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
thanks for the invite ,
i'm so pleased i accepted , lovely poem , lifts a heart , i'm ready to face a brand new day ,
thanks.
terry
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
A.M.A.Z.I.N.G!!!
*jaw drops open*
its a really really good poem!
i love the words you used---"The pulse of my heart adjusts to a new beat,"
one of my favourite lines =]=]
i love it
great job. keep it up and take care
^^
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
This is really cool...luv it...could be a song too ;)
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Aw, wow! I just love this one. I am all for the shorter poems but that's just my style and music too is a passion of mine and always lifts my heart up. This really is pretty, I love it! ~ Nixie
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
i like it alot cause i think we all get the urge to dance sometimes
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
hi, very well written, i lyk it
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
I usually dislike poems that rhyme so blatantly, but that was good. It was seamless and direct with a great message. Great job!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
aha! it's great:) i love it!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
who i really liked it it was short and simple yet perfect
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
That was a good poem! Great job!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
wow!!!!
i really love this peom it truly is well true haha
btw what camp did you go to?
i went to hume lake this year just wondering if that's where you went to
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
that was really good :] i loved the ending,
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
love it very catchy :)
♥ Always & Forever ♥
~Ciara~
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
Great poem and it hits home for me this morning. There are things I'd like to express, maybe I should dance too? Wonderful job on the poem. It is so easy and flowing. Good work!
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
Great poem. It flowed nicely and a great topic.
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
that was a great poem wandy.....
Posted: Jul 19, 2008
My honest opinion?
I love it; from the beginning which had my feet tingling. The varied rhythm of your lines gives this the feel of a dance. My favourite line is: "The chains of pride have since been broken". That, in itself, speaks volumes. With that, and the dance, and your gift of expression, who needs to be outspoken?
Well done, Wandiola.
Thanks.
craaig
Posted: Jul 21, 2008
AWESOME!!
You did a great job in this one!
LOVED it! a jaw dropping poem!
Take care!
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
I really like this one. But I really don't like dancing. Simple topic but great choice of words you used makes it cool.
Posted: Aug 23, 2008
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