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With every ray of light, comes a shadow
With every death, there is a birth
With every hardship, there is a clearing
And with every rose there is a thorn
I may get beaten by today's thorns
But I should never give up hope for tomorrows roses.

^ ^ ^
That last stanza was like amazing. I totally loved it!! xD Like wow. Perfection. ;D

Great work!!! ^-^ Definitely my fav poem by you so far.

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

My fav is also the last stanza

With every ray of light, comes a shadow

With every death, there is a birth

With every hardship, there is a clearing

And with every rose there is a thorn

I may get beaten by today's thorns

But I should never give up hope for tomorrows roses.

LOVED IT FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY SOUL.....

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Yes... I too loved the last stanza. :)

It is so fulll of hope. Hope is somthing we all need. :) excellent work. I loved it :)

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Its sooooooooooo......... beautiful!!

Really amazing and inspiring..............it gives you hope to live!!

Great work

^^

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

This is beautiful and so true. I love it. Amazing job. The last stanza is my favorite, too. :) I needed to hear this tonight, thank you for sharing it with me.

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

OMG this is prolly the most beautiful poem i have ever read!!! I LOVE IT!!! i too agree the last stanza is my fav as well this poem is perfection from begining to end i love the fact that you started it all like dark and hopeless and then you end it with hope and a sense of power that comes from within :) EXCELLENT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

i love the 4th stanza. it flows verry well. this is a reallly good poem Wandy! keep goin!
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

oh my goodness this was lovely! wonderful wandiola! i absolutely loved it ^^ it has my vote for sure :)

btw - i'm soooo sorry i haven't read more of your novel yet!! i promise you i will read it - like i said in the beginning though, you'll need patience with me lol
i'll be sure to get to is asap. i've been doing a lot of editing lately so my mind is kind of recharging XD

but back to the poem
that last stanza was breathtaking. absolutely positively beautiful!!
keep up the marvelous writing ^^

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Yes, yes, there's hope in everything, my friend :)
Check your spelling though.

Other than that, it is a wonderful read :)

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

This is really wonderful! I love the message. It a good reminder to keep looking ahead, because even if your circumstance seem bleak there are always better times waiting. Hope thise means Texas is treating you kinder?

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Aw this is lovely! The last stanza was my favourite, it has a such truth in it, and just reading it gives me a little hope for tomorrow. Thank for sharing this Wandiola. ~ Nixie

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

check spelling but this was good. i liked the last stanza. =]

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

isn't that life. great job.

Lydia_xxxx

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

I love the last stanza! This is such a good poem. Great job!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

That last stanza was like amazing. I totally loved it!! xD Like wow. Perfection. :D this is a reallly good poem
it gives you hope to live!!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

I'll add to this. As they say across the country on the west coast... *cough*

...


GNARLY!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Omg. That was amazing! I loved every word of it! Especially the last stanza. :D Wow. Awesome. Great job! :D

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

BEAUTIFUL! i think this is my favorite out of all of your poems that ive read. and ill go with everyone in saying that the last stanza was AMAZING! great job! =D

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

hi! wandiola. take the rough with the smooth, that's life. good work. ;-)

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

That was awesome!

Where do you awesome-poem-writers get these amazing ideas!

I wish I was a good poem writer!

Oh well at least I have good poems to read!

Bye the way

was the "book that you knew was right" in your poem

was it the bible?

Just asking

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

the loneliness. that's what i too feel. thank for your beautiful poem i like it. because it speaks my mind.

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

The last stanza is excellently written, it speaks with power, and great awakening! This is silly of me, but the following made me think of the musical Annie, when she sings "The sun will come tomorrow.." and I burst into song.

" I may get beaten by today's thorns
But I should never give up hope for tomorrows roses."

These lines strengthen my determination to take life as it comes and always keep my head up and never letting go of hope.

Excellent poem!

--
Rose

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

hey! this was any amazing poem! a real tear-jerker! I loved the last lines, they were my favourite!

~Brad

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Wow, you get a lot of compliments. Here's another one: I really enjoyed the poems, and the sparing use of rhyme was particularly effective since if you used it more it would have sounded cheesy. The lines that you did have it made it sound super good and super special.

I may get beaten by today's thorns/But I should never give up hope for tomorrows roses.

those were absolute favourite lones of mine.

But I should never give up hope for tomorrows roses.

It seems lately that I'm bent on making people hate me by posting horrendously long criticisms...that I will do it here. Haha no, just a few pointers. Okay...imma add that to my bio...if I comment on a poem I should give my input on how to improve it as well right? How else is a writer supposed to excel? Ehehe anyway

The phrase "bleak with darkness" was repeated twice so it sounds a little weird the second time, like you've run out of things to say or something, lol.

Also, the very last stanza bugged me a little because the things were not in right order (You maybe have done that on purpose? Well this is just my opinion anyways :P)

With every ray of light, comes a shadow
With every death, there is a birth
With every hardship, there is a clearing
And with every rose there is a thorn

The orders of good to bad and bad to good is all mixed up so the reader can get confused. Since your poem is about the bad going into the good, those things should all be in that order, so it could be like this

With every shadow, there is light
With every death, there is a birth
With every hardship, there is a clearing
And at the end of each thorn, there is a rose

This way it is much more accurate to the meaning of the poem and it will definitely be reflected on the reader.

Please join the controverse hate club! In the next ten minutes you will receive a FREE pair of bronze knuckles and a stainless steel knife for the CLEAN way of killing controverse!

Uh, anyways, it was a very good poem. Keep up the good work!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

This is so amazing and inspiring. A nice read for an early morning....am sure to have a great day today.Thanks

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

I loved the sentiments, that is what makes it a wonderful poem. The comments by Controverse will help you make the great sentiments come even more to life for the reader.

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

This poem is so inspiring and motivating. Everything that is said is true. A lot of thought has been put into this and it shows in this masterpeice! Love the last bit. Megzbo-x

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

as a poet it is your job to question what's the point of pain and alone-ness. You've done a good job here. You had a good build up from feeling adrift to feeling abandoned to finding enlightenment. I like how you didnt find a magic cure at the end but that your appreciation for the waiting had changed from torment to hope...your spirituality is captured beautifully in this poem.

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Wow...that was truly amazing! I love poetry sooo much...especially religious poetry and that just made my heart melt! My thoughts are so similar to yours in writing and about God! Thank you so much for writing this...it is truly wonderful...ahh i got shivers just reading it! Awesome...love zia

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Diz iz one EXCELLENT poem. Diz NEEDZ 2 go on FEATURED WRITING; on Booksie's HOMEpage.

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

wow man!! touches the soul!!
you write deep!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Wow. I'm not entirely big on poetry but I will admit it is growing on me. This poem is bound to be one of the "Greats" on Booksie. Really good job, keep writing.
Be sure to check out my first poetry attempt "So Empty".
Cheers

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

i like it:] keep up the good work

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Ditto everybody who loved it!!!! I also agree with everybody who said the last stanza was their favorite. 'Twas beautiful, Wandiola my friend! clicked the Like it button, and I wish a could press it about a zillion more times! (sorry, I sound kind of little. I'm a bouncy person) Mucho amor,
-Rosalie :P

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

I started reading it and I was thinking, O.o How depressing! (THogh I really can't talk) ANd then the conclusion was a good one. The last few stanzas were great :)

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

it's a good poem regardless of spelling.

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

so pretty! i liked the last stanza :] good job

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

wow, and so sorry i was late.
Very passionate and touching poem!!
The last stanza was my favorite!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

hmmmm intersting truly you could leave the lst stanza by its self The rest was good but the last stanza made it

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

very smooth with the words. good job.

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

What else can I say that hasn't been said already. Well done.

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

oops i meant last but i guess it doesnt matter cause ou just say thanks to everyone :)

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Beautiful!! Thank you for sharing :) - Cherise

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I absolutely love this poem. It's really uplifting and a great reminder that if things don't go well today, there's always tomorrow and working hard today will lead to eventual happiness. This poem sort of reminds me of my poem 'Tomorrow is Today is Yesterday'. My poem leaves the persona with the belief that there is no hope for tomorrow as 'tomorrow never comes', whereas this poem sort of contradicts that. You are a truly talented and gifted individual!

Keep up the great work, Wandy!

Olola.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

wow...very inspirational..the message is very clear... i love to read more of your works...just keep me posted..i like it

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I very much like the sense of hope this poem brings. Hope is needed through everything. The determination shines throughout the bottom half.
Good job.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

loved the poem you have a real nak for poetry.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

that was awsome!
i really enjoyed reading it!
good job! keep up the good work!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

A very good read , Loved the message at the end , There is hope out there , Keep up the good work , I'll look in again with your permission .
terry

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I loved it! I've read it before, and I could've swore I commented it, but I guess not. It's so beautiful and so true! I love poetry that has truth in it. This does. =) And I'm a religious person, so this poem appealed even more to me. Wonderful job! =) Mandy

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Amazing. I could find only one thing to point out. In the first paragraph, you spelled deceive wrong, you only forgot the second "e". Just though I'd point that out.
This kind of reminds me of Ecclesiastes 3. Where it explains that everything has a time and a place when it is necessary.

Great job. I really like it.
~Kaori

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

i luved it im soooo glad u asked me to read it i luved the message, so true keep writing and keep updating me when u write i luv ur writings

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

pretty good. well done.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Great poem..the poems I liked the best were: My dreams crushed by reality/ My hope has withered away.
Please tell me when you have new stuff up, and I'll try reading it ASAP. (:
I get distracted by..well, everything :P

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I LOVE IT! please post on my work when you get time :D

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Kool. :D

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

i loved it! that was great, i know what it feels like to have hardly any hope! just keep going, god will pull you through!

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

wow it took me a while to get to the bottom of th whole page...
but I loved loved loved this poem

:]

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

I didn't mean it was too long,
I meant there was so many comments
:]

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

I like how it ends up being so hopeful, instead of just depressing. I also really like the idea of religion being like the light at the end of the tunnel or something. Inspiring in a way...

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

There is emotion in every syllable of this poem, that is incredible skill. And the eventual turning point is such a smooth transition from bleak to wary optimism...Simply inspiring.


Xx

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

I no that feeling is there all the time for me. I really liked this poem. Really really liked the last stanza. My comments may not be as good as others but this poem is very inspiraional and I like the message and visual images that it holds. The power here is great and I would very much like to be a fan. Chek me out tooo....

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

so good :D

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Awesome:) I wonder what the book was...Bible?
YAY BIBLE!
The answers to all our problems are in there you know...

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

I loved this peom!! Not only did it sound amazing and i could connect with it really fast.... but it wasnt one of those emo peoms when life just sucks and all people do is whine. There was actually HOPE!!
and what more than a hope in GOD. This poem is purely amazing. With God, anything is possible. The Bible is an amazing book that offers so much hope. I probably don't read it enough as it is...

I think i would agree with that controverse dude about maybe switching around the last stanza so that it goes from negatives to positives and stays consistent.
Though, that is just my opinion... It is YOUR poem, so you keep it as you see fit! It's still amazing how it is! : )

I'm going to print this one out and take it with me to my summer job--Summber Bible Camp!! I know people there will love it! : )

Keep writing the amazing poems! You have a wonderful way of putting things into words! YAY YOU!! : )

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

BAVO BAVO!!!!! WOW WOW!!! Thata all I can say is wow. I loved it and your work is amazing!!!

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Thanks for inviting me to read this and comment. It is a lovely poem of discovery and hope. I am no expert, but it seems that your faithful praying was finally answered in His time from His book. Great message!

I find it difficult to disregard the typographical errors (scilence - line 2, decived line 5). Coming, as they do, at the beginning; they do spoil the poem a little, for me. Please edit them for the sake of future readers.

Those who commented on the order of bad to good things in the lines of the last stanza have a point. But every thorn does not have a rose; or does it?

I really love your use of symbolism -- the rose, the thorn, your torn hands. This poem is not just about hope, it gives it.

craaig

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

wow, i thought it was really good. im kinda speachless. keep up the good work.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

I am too late to express my exclaimations wandiola.. Everybody has given their comments ... I too say the same.. Its awesome, wonderful.. I liked it a lot.. So moving and motivating!

Posted: Jul 9, 2008