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Poem By: WhatIsInAName
Poetry

Tags: love, poem, hate

Kind of Random
my poems dont really have any structure xD

tell me what you think anyway :P View table of contents...

Submitted: May 10, 2008 Reads: 75 Comments: 6 Likes: 3

Am I a fool?
oh what a pretty mind for such a fool.
Oh what a pretty mind.
To waste on such a fool.

Love, what makes me who I am?

Incapable of holding on, when we link hands.
Your taste is a great improvement, on my roughend self hatred.
Your lips were a soft engager, and yet I still find you stranger.

I am incapable to hold on... and wait for calming seas.

I make such wrong decisions. I dont know who to please.
Shallow, Shallow, daughter.
Wrapped up in innocence?
Over approving ignorance.
Cold shoulder happiness.

Cold, closed shell.

Colours, they fall...
Thought, I had something.

I did not.

Belief? is crippling.
Love? its gone.
Hate? My new best friend

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Comments:

thanks a bunch :D

Ive never been sure about my poems cuz Ive been told alot that they are lacking.. or whatever cuz they have no real structure or whatever.. ( I dont know big words xD never passed higher english)

but Im really glad you like my writing :)
thank you :D

Posted: May 10, 2008

Bibliophile

I love writing that has no structure. It gives it a unique style. I say that if it flows its good and this flows. I loved it.
Your Book Loving Friend
bibliophile

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thank you :D
cant say how much that means :)

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StrictlyVee

Meaningful in every word. I enjoyed your poem.

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Im glad you liked it :D
thank you for commenting :)

xxx

dubl

i really liked it my favorite lines were Love is what makes me who i am? incapable of holding on when we link hands. brilliant :]

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you :)

xxxxxx

glad you liked it

DomXD

this is good
who cares that it has no freaking structure
i don't it makes it unique and awesome
good job i like this poem
=]

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!
xxx

bubbly

hi! w. all poems r an extension of the poet, be they rhyming or in blank verse. what is important is the thought. u've expressed urself very well and that is what count with the reader (here, me). carry on. its awesome. lol. ;-)

Posted: Sep 29, 2008