Submitted: May 16, 2008
Reads: 53
Comments: 4
Likes: 3
Newly dewed. Loving eyes.
Is he looking at me?
I think he’s looking at me.
What does he see?
In this vast quiet body.
A body that blends in so well.
A body that doesn’t stand out.
Shall I look again?
Is he smiling?
I think he is smiling at me.
I feel my heart beating faster.
What could make him want to smile at me?
So unusual. So strange.
I can see his lips moving.. And he’s looking in my direction!
Is he talking to me?
I’m sure he’s talking to me.
Then I hear the lips behind me respond.
Another girl I know well.
Oh. I sigh. It was her he was talking to.
Silly me.
Why would he be looking at me?
Why would be smiling at me?
Why would he be talking to me?
Of course he would see something in this other girls skinny frame.
In her sparkling eyes.
In her excited laughter
She stands outs so well.
She does everything so well - as always.
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Comments:
Awwww.... Then he's not meant for her ! Grr.... I hate when there's this kind of moment in life...It's annoying !*murders
Posted: May 22, 2008
wow. Powerfull. I don't know why there isn't much comments!! this is a really good poem! and its totallly true!! well done!!
Posted: Jun 3, 2008
A very well written poem (as for the reads and comments see my latest challenge - you cannot believe how many beautiful, worthy pieces of writing slide on by - legacy of a very popular site I expect - it is not that they are not deserving)
This says so much about self esteem (which is further shattered in this poem because the person has looked "beyond" to someone else.) Excellent.
Posted: Jul 10, 2008
hi! w. i loved this. u were asking for his eye balls but he was targeting someone else. awesome. this does no good for self-esteem, eh! oh gawd! u ve highlighted the invisibility factor. keep rolling. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
