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Bound In Darkness

Poem By: XBrokenHeartedX
Poetry


I'm bound in the darkness, and I can't get up. I'm dying, slowly. Someone please help me. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 8, 2008    Reads: 103    Comments: 14    Likes: 8   


Drowning in these endless waters,

Suffocating in this space with no air.

Crying the tears of never ending pain,

Suffering from this unrequited love.

 

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These lungs collapse,

And I fall like a broken doll.

Gasping for oxygen that isn’t there,

The darkness closes in.

 

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Locking gazes with the monster inside of me,

Its touch burns away my skin.

The scream I release is unheard,

For I no longer have a voice.

 

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Fire encases this area I lie in,

Putting the flames in my eyes.

I am nothing anymore,

But a dying mutant.

 

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Ropes of poison lash out around me,

Grabbing my arms, my legs, and my waist.

They drag me down below,

Further than hell.

 

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Tearing me apart,

Cutting holes in my skin.

Blood rushing from my wounds,

A pay for every sin.

 

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Make them let go,

Please somebody, anybody, save me from this nightmare.

Untie these ropes that feast on my body,

And that take away my life like emptied souls.

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But I can’t get up,

Nobody will lend a helping hand.

I’m dying down here,

But nobody seems to care.

 

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I am going blind from this everlasting darkness,

Being disintegrated by the heat of the fire.

And right now,

To die is my biggest desire.

 

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Everyday I am on this cold surface,

Trying to break through the top.

But without love and without air,

My life will soon come to a stop.

 

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Can anybody hear me………

 


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Comments:

wow... that was dark... and creepy... and gave me chills. the last line "can anybody hear me...." - holy cow that made me shudder. its like... i heard it as an echo in my mind. and it just.. wow.
you have some AMAZING imagery in this. it was wicked dark - dark poems are always fun to read b/c usually you can get a good reaction out of me.
but like with every line i was leaning in further to the screen XD hahaha i just got so caught up in it and WOW - once again, you amaze me with your poetry!!

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww Alice you're such a sweetie! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad it was creepy; it was part of the point haha. I know! I love to read them, plus they keep me hooked. Thanks again Alice, I appreciate it:)

HAHAHAHA...Guess what? I AGREE WITH ALICE!!! HAHA. The last line made me shudder too. By the way, should I still get money if 'I'M' the one agreeing?

Anywayz, the image you set up for us was... (analyzing brain for words)... was vivid, creepy, dark, cool, sometimes burning, and just AWESOME! I like the contrast between the cold feeling I imagined when you said water, and the hot feeling when you mentioned fire. This was astonishing and amazing, and just WOW.

By the way I'd just like to let you know that I have no idea what I'm going to write for your challenge. Grr. I already started a few drafts yesterday, but I didn't really like them, so I think I'm going to start a fresh one.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL, Alice was yelling at me because you got poison which was easy, while she got lamp post. Your smart, I know you'll come up with something absolutely brilliant that will blow my mind away:) I'm glad you liked the contrast between hot and cold, and that it was a shivering feeling too. Thanks so much Angela, I'm really glad you liked it:D

Wooh zoe this is a favorite. ^^

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

YAY! Ha Ha another favorite. Thanks so much Punishment:D

This was totaly great!Its sad.Everyday im on this cold surface trying to get trough,AND tHE LAST LINE Can anyone hear me?So sad.Poem is beautifull.:)

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm really happy that you liked it; it means a lot that you read it and commented. I also really liked the last line, haha:)

Woahhh..-speechless-
I question your age. How can someone so young be so talented?! It's...wow. I can't explain it but dang, woman you are not only talented...but you use that talent..and amaze everyone..
Uhm. If that makes sense o.o
I loved the ropes of poison part...I just liked the concept and how you used it (:
Plus, the ending was brilliant :D

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww thanks hiralarious! You make me feel so good about myself:) I'm glad you think I have talent. But I have so much to work on. I'm really glad you liked this poem too. Ha HA I thought the ropes of poison was pretty awesome also! Thanks so much again Hiralarious:D

I loved it, awesome words choice, dark but lovely poem.
=^.^=

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it. I appreciate you reading and commenting:D

Hey this was..... i'm spechless.......................
.............. When i read this poem it gave me imagery,chills and no hope it was so weird you made me have a feeling like i was actually feeling that or there. This was really good your a true writer. My favorite part is... Is that line "Ropes of poison lash out around me" and the sixth stanza "Tearing me apart, cutting holes in my skin. Blood rushng from my wounds a pay for every sin." That was so good i liked the emotion,imagry,power in it and just how much it meant it was great.All your writing encourags me to do better try harder and write more i thank you for that but this was a really ...Magnificent! poem!:)

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww J you are so nice:) I'm glad it made you feel like you were down there, and that the imagery was good. Those lines are a couple of my favorite too:) HaHa. Thanks so much Joanna again, I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it:D

Wow 2 words... LOVE IT!!!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha Ha awww thanks!

..........
*speechless and tearful*
i loves it......

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww ha ha thank you so much keepers river! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it:)

Amazing...I LOVED IT! So deep and full of agony...I expirience mine all the more. I can relate so much....I love love love this poem!!

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it, and even more that you could relate to it. Thanks again:D

I really like this-it's so perfectly written-I feel this way sometimes(like every other day)...but I didn't get the in between lines-what do they mean =}...the ending whispering 'can anybody hear me?'=perfect closure

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm confuzzled, lol, by you saying you didn't get in between the lines. (it's early and my brain is totally not functioning yet). But I'm glad you enjoyed it! Oh YAY! I'm so glad you guys liked the closing, I thought it was a nice touch:) Ha Ha thanks so much for your comments, I appreciate them a lot. :D

That is so passionate and dark...I love it.
You've got the talent to transfer the reader in the dark Hell...

0_0....I Feel inspired.
I saw it like a slideshow of amazing pictures.

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks so much! Ha Ha I don't think I've ever been able to inspire someone before:) I'm glad that you liked it!

Wow... dark. Scary! that last line.. creepy. i got the chills... sounds like shes in a dark dungeon being held prisoner. thats really good poetry. Keep writing!

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Ooo good imagery! Ha Ha that's what I was imaging too:D Yeah I thought the last line might add kind of a darker touch to the poem, so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks!

Totally explain what goes on with emos

Posted: Nov 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm glad that it did.



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