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If Wings Could Fly

Poem By: XBrokenHeartedX
Poetry


Oh if wings could fly
What would I do?

Fly around the world?
Find you?

I know that it may sound a lot like If Everyone Cared but has a WAY different concept View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 15, 2008    Reads: 310    Comments: 14    Likes: 4   


    If wings could fly,

    I would sail the ocean.

    I would save those wings,

    And then when I need them most would I use them.

    If ocean's could fill,

    My heart wouldn't be so empty.

    And this would never have to end,

    And then I could see you again.

    If water could heal,

    I would breathe until my wounds were sealed.

    I would wait until I got to you,

    And then the water would be all yours.

    If maps could find,

    I would make my way to you.

    I would search until I was old and whithered,

    And even then I would not stop.

    If life were a fairytale,

    I would be a princess and you would be my long lost prince.

    We would get married and live happily ever after,

    And I would spend eternity in your arms.

    If life was everlasting,

    You would still be by my side.

    We would be holding hands,

    And your embrace would never have weakened.

    If wings could fly, if oceans could fill, if water could heal, if maps could find, if life were a fairytale, if life were everlasting,

    Nothing would ever happen.

    I wouldn't be broken into a million pieces,

    And these tears wouldn't fall from my eyes.

    Wings would fly.

    Oceans would fill.

    Water could heal.

    Maps could find.

    Life were a fairytale.

    Life was everlasting.

    You would still be here.

    And I wouldn't be lying here on the ground.

    My body trembling.

    My tears flowing.

    And my heart broken.

    Poor wings-they would just fail.

    Poor ocean-it would just be palluted.

    Poor water-it would just crash.

    Poor maps-they would just be crumpled by the rain.

    Poor fairtyale-it would never come true.

    Poor forever-it will always end.

   


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Comments:

yonaika
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I looove the last line

Posted: Apr 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I thought I did poorly, but thanks for the comment once again:D

lovely from start to finish. another great poem. and i agree with yonaika. i love that last line "poor forever - it will always end" beautiful and strong. ^^

Posted: Apr 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh so glad you liked it! I really appreciate all your lovely comments, and thanks so much:D

I really like this. It's got raw emotion that is very difficult to handle in a poem like this. You did a great job. I totally agree with yonaika and Alice, the last line is so beautiful, so real, so tangible, its almost like you could reach out and touch it. It's almost like you were describing the way the world is and how it should be. I really like it.
~Kaori

Posted: Apr 15, 2008

Author Comment:

YAY, I'm so glad that you liked it:D Thanks so much for the wonderful comment.

wow, i really liked this, you've got great emotion!! i really really liked it!! great poem!

Posted: Apr 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it and thanks for the wonderful comment and for reading:D

Is it Polluted?? in the 45th line , i think...oceans get polluted....

Hey, it's so sad...and so touching....and so true....
ask me....
my fairy tale ended after my marriage...

i feel so foolish now...

but like you, i will never disbelieve in LOVE...

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww I'm sorry! Oh yeah, oceans get palluted BIG TIME like all the time. It's really sad....But thanks! I'm glad that you liked it, and thanks for the wonderful comment:D

that was really really really good

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

So glad you liked it! It would be so much better if you told me what you liked or disliked about it though. But thanks for reading and for the wonderful comment:D

i could not go to sleep before reading this once again...

this one is my favourite...

I am going to read all ur poems soon....
FOR SURE.....

where do u get the inspiration, sweetheart??

Posted: Apr 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww thanks! That makes me feel so good. I'm so glad that you liked it and thanks for the wonderful comment. Um...I dunno. I just get my inspiration from a lot of things. Music, feelings inside myself...definitely the rain. If I go walking in the rain I get so many good ideas.

I really like your summation at the end there. Last line especially. Just one spelling error (polluted) but other then that really quite good! Kudos

Posted: Apr 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks! Really glad that you liked it. Thanks for the comment, and sorry about the spelling error. Ha Ha that's what I get for typing so fast. Thanks again! :D

wow excellent poetry!!

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it.

That was...beutiful. I'm a big fan of your writings. keep up the good work

Posted: May 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it! :D

ruxeen
(not registered user)

gr8 flow of emotions

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

Woooow.That was awesome!Sooo nice.Beautifull!You write such a good poems.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww thank you! I'm so glad you liked it and thanks:)

You must love somebody very much because you write like you miss them more than past joys.

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha Ha yeah, I really did. Thanks so much!

in our life we wish for many things but all can't come true.

Posted: Sep 26, 2008

Author Comment:

True, very much true. Thanks for the comment.



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