awww. thats sad. i liked it though. i tend to be a fan of the dark and depressing stuff. it was well written. i've never cut, but my sister used to. and reading this made me think of her. its a great writing technique if u can get your reader thinking. and you've done so! wonderful job. =)

Posted: Mar 2, 2008

Aw, it's hard to know who's feeling what when you're in the centre of it. Bless ya! Good job! ~ KB

Posted: Mar 3, 2008

The emotions poured smoothly out of it . Very dar k , and ytes , veryy long , but I liked it. -rawwwrrr

Posted: Mar 7, 2008

This is so touching, it really is. I thought it was beautiful and wonderfully written. I love this kind of poetry, and I think you put a lot of emotion into it. Amazing job.

Posted: Mar 12, 2008

That was very nicely written. I loved it. Depressing poems such as this really seem to have a strong meaning to them. But that is just my opinion. Well yes it was beautiful and dark, it was different than most things I've read. Nice job! :D

Posted: Mar 20, 2008

Nice, I really like it. Partially because I know what you're coming from because I went through it too. I'm glad you had the courage to tell your parents you were/are sorry.
~Kaori

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

You...are an undeniable GENIUS.
I swear, when we are older and I don't see any books or poetry by you..I will CRY. Because your poetry is truly something that makes people cry, makes them smile, it makes them feel whatever the person in the poem is feeling. You are just to good for words, really. And this poem proves it.
But if you didn't get this already from the above...this poem was...really good. (:

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

it brought tears in my eyes and i lost all words...i have no words...can i borrow some from u?

Posted: May 6, 2008

So sad...I have been through my own hell too and I know how it was. But I haven't thought of the worst thing as my last resort. I just couldn't and besides, I fear physical pain. ^^ But Like Alice, I love dark and depressing ones. Your work gives justice to that kind of stuff. Keep it up! :-)

Posted: May 7, 2008

I read up your poem and you reminded me when I was depressed too. You're really good at expressing your feelings. I feel like I can connect to this poem. Really nicely done. Keep up the good work.

Posted: May 8, 2008

This is really heart-warming. So sad. I'm almost crying. It was really well written.

Posted: May 9, 2008

This is so well written and so sad.
I almost felt like crying.
Keep up the awesome work
=]

Posted: May 16, 2008

at least you could tell your parents. a teacher told my student consiler who told my mom. i got in so much trouble, then i had to go to therpy. which sucked.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 19, 2008

you know what came to my mind? NUMB by Linkin Park.
i thought it was real. and it expressed both the people who were derectly and indirectly affected by your actions.
good peice. all the best... lexie

Posted: May 20, 2008

That got me very emotional, really well written. It was long, but I never got bored of reading it.

I would be honored if you would read some of my poetry in return

Posted: May 27, 2008

Absolutely remarkable poem. Thanks so much for sharing it with us. I loved the length and it seemed to have an undefined flow the whole way through. Beautifully written - missed a few spelling errors, otherwise lovely poem!!!

Posted: May 30, 2008

hi! zoe. at least u r sorry. most don't even feel it, neither say the simple word. good work. ;-)

Posted: May 31, 2008

I still cut but I try not too. It was a great poem I wrote one like it. But your a great writer good job.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

AWWWWWWW T____T
*huggles and cries* DONT BE SO SSSSAAAAADDDD!!!!!
You are awesome! remember! you were the first person to talk to me on this site, and to make me experience the beauty of pride and prejudice [i finished the book by the way. and i bought it O_O]
GAAAAAARARHFGRIEGFNDKLKL! if you need talk to me! for realz! i know you're probably like "oh god, i am not even sure you this is, i forgot about her... blablbalbla i am not gonna answer so she'll leave me alone" but you are my friiiiend *sad puppy eyes*
so so so, if you have another urge to do bad things send me an email or write on my wall, i am pretty much always online!
also i am on facebook, so if you're like in DESPERATE need for someone to talk to. someone who doesnt have anything better to do than help out someone DO IT!
[ally v. = facebook]
Also, cute poem, but there is a bunch of typos in it. NOT A BIG DEAL but if you want to correct them you can ^^
have a nice day

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

this is reallllyyy sad, but really good. and it was long, but in each word there was emotion. this is a job well done! =)
~Lemon

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Hey there, I have recently been through this, so I know where your coming from, to an extent, only no one told me to do it, I blame my father for most of my emotional pain, but it's up to us to control ourselves...and believe me, it really traumatizes our parents(at least my mother) when we hurt ourselves physically and intentionally...and it's good that you are saying sorry...but one thing I don't understand is that you mentioned that your friends said that you should cut, that's not friends....then later you said 'thanks to my friends, and having a heart...I stopped being the one to make a mark'...I am a bit confused-I hope they were the good friends that helped you to stop....anyway, I never had a habit, but I don't feel as ashamed to admit that I have tried it a couple of times in my life, when the physical and emotional pain seems like too much-I thought I should lighten up some of my poems, because I tend to be extremely dark and I am chronically depressed, but sometimes visiting a new environment helps you, like recently I got out of town, and forced myself to go through the motions, almost suppressing my pain inside for the sake of the people I was visiting(my bff and her family)....now I am back in town, and welcomed back to my depression, but I still came back with a bit of a newfound glory or inspiration to believe that someday things will get better....I hope I have not said too much....please feel free to talk to me anytime you wish, because I understand..:D

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

this reminds me of my sister who also used to cut herself that brought pains in the family. but through it all we have surpassed that stage and now she has starting her own family too and i know her past experience had made her strong and be a good mother someday. realization is really needed and i think it will make you mature in your decisions and help you to be a responsible being. great poem! c",)

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

I can tell the deep thought and feeling you put into your writing. AMAZING

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Oh Gosh! It's beautiful hunni! I loved it.. The emotion and pain in each word could be felt.. I so understand what you went through.. But my dad had fallen really ill and that's when I got depressed and cut myself.. Bad phase bad phase.. Now I'm over it but I still understand every word and the pain hidden in it.. Love it.. Yeah, I LOVE dark stuff so this does rock my socks =)
I'd be obliged if you checked my stuff out too.. It's of the same genre so you'd definitely find similarity..

Much love,
Srushti.
xx

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

T_T...this is pretty sad and depressing...I used to cut myself in my family's basement and once i even tried hanging myself to get rid of all the chaos that i was going through. I'm glad that you stopped because eventually you'd cut further and deeper until it would be too late to fix anything...but anyhow, I'm glad that ur ok now and would lie to give you 99 thumbs up on the emotion and feelings in here.

Keep it up!

~Fay~

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Remarkable! I like it, although sad... very emotional but well proccessed. Nice job.

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

I just have to say it: this was amazing. Don't ever feel alone or like you don't deserve to be comforted just because you hurt people by hurting yourself. Just remember that it never helps to cut no matter how much you think it will. I know that by me saying this to you as some random who is like the hundreth person to comment it means shit all probably, but just know that it takes heaps to admit how you feel and you have done that beautifuly in this moving poem. As someone who has gone through this myself I felt that you captured the feelings wonderfuly. Great write. Take care .x

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

awww I could have cried, someone very close to me (actually two of my closets people) cut themselves. this helped m ein a sense

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

my my, that was long! but very well written. your emotions really showed. well done :]

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Thats was really good, sad but good. I really liked it. :) You really know how to express your emotions. Good Job!

~angelgirl

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

I thought it was a little scary but as I read more I realised you really put your heart into it and it touched me, i do remember a time when I did feel like this and your right the emotional pain is more painful than any other pain I have ever experienced, and I have given birth to three children! I REALLY LIKED IT.

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

I actually understand exactly what you mean by this and what your going through - I went through the exact same thing. Realizing that while I felt emotional pain and burden, and used a razor to physically counter the emotional side of things.
I hope everything works out for you - this is a truely lovely poem

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

um... very catchy, normally i dont read long poems, but this one had me:) anyways, very beautifully expressed, and its like u ripped ur heart right off and placed it on paper :) but but, for the poem itself, do try to work on ur rhyming, because although half of the poem rhymes beautifully but the other part doesnt, try to practice on it, otherwise its an excelent poem... i'm sorry about this all. if u get time, do check out my poems :D

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

I like this piece very much. I can feel the pain and hurt.

~XjustanaveragefailureX~

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

tha was a AMAZING poem!

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Truly an epic piece of work well done i know the dark side well and have been there with the self harm stuff.

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

This is really good. It reminded me of myself when i cut. I liked it, long but really really good. you showed your emotions and your sincere. good job

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

the bit about the card being the last one in the deck was a very good line.

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Wow,i'm sorry you had to go through all that.But your poem is truly amazing.I hope you're doing better now

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

As you can see, i delete my booksie account. That was due to a depressed moment. [Even the best of those fall down sometimes]. My AIM is littlemouselily. but you can Email me at rubberband08@gmail.com! I will go and check those out! And dont think i forgot about you! I am still here checking out your work! so you better keep writing xP
and tell me how your novel goes ^^

Posted: Aug 5, 2008

oh no! This is Yonaika! Remembeeer!?!?!
You turned me into a pride and prejudice fan!?

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Emo moment. I was going through a hard time, and i actually stopped writing so i was like "This is pointless" and i asked booksie guy to delete it. I will re-create another later. I feel too stupid to recreate one now -_-

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

You and I were in the same club. You are courageous...the poem is stunning!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Wow, I loved it. I could really relate to your pain. I'm hoping that you've stayed away from Cutting now, because I agree that it's so much easier being free. Never having to hide your cuts and I'll always regret the scars on my arm. I hope everything is going better in your life now! *hugs*

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

descriptive but very sad , to turn such misery into something so well written takes a special talent .

terry

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

oh wow... And i thought my life was hard. that's really touching. u should keep writing from your heart.

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

...**snifs**...waaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh! Sooooooo good....:)
That's so sad. :(

Anyways, umm...yes, very good job!!
I was wondering if you could go to my page www.booksie.com/dannika and read perhaps Hugs, Kisses and Pain and/or For His Glory and/or Even Breathing Hurts Without You.

Even if you're not christian - I think you'd like For His Glory - because it relates to younger people, and it's not all - "You must go to church! You must read the bible every night!" It explains a lot, andI think it would help some people.

Thank you so much - - you definitely don't have to read my stories if you don't want - but i'd appreciate it. :)

Anyways, good job again, it brought tears to my eyes.

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

i used to do what you did so i know where you are coming from

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

I really liked your poem and unfortunately i know where you are coming from. i have done it in the past and still get urges now mainly because of the way my father treated me but even though it takes a really long time and a lot of tears, it is something that you can learn from. i know i did because you can see how much you hurt the people around you when really, it has nothing to do with your relationships with them. my mom found out from a teacher and she and my step dad have tried to support me ever since. it still gets hard but at the end of the day, even though its a bad experience to go through, yu really do lern something at the end of it. i learnt that confidence in yourself really is a part of everything. you need to love yourself in order to be happy. well, that's how i see it now anyway and my scars are stuck which is sort of a reminder i think, of how bad it actually got for me. now though i try to be myself and be happy. i never went to therapy even though i was told to. i felt like it was me who got me into this and i had to try and get myself out of which i am proud to say i sort f have so if you need someone i am here :)
again, great poem and will be watching out for more. please check out mine if you get a chance

-Michaela

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

aww. I almost cried. So sad... well, yes at least you are sorry, because some dont even bother to do this. Hope you'll get the apology you deserve. =]

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

I like to say I'm sorry - nice work

Posted: Aug 29, 2008

Very good recovery and therapy. You have much to live for!

Posted: Aug 30, 2008

I really like this poem. The part about the deck and the card - loved it!

Posted: Aug 31, 2008

awww.its sweet.and sad.nice work.sounds a bit like me but i never cut.i probably just carve a heart below my thumb, but thats all.when i look back, i really wished i didnt hurt my parents so much.but youre recovering well.GOOD LUCK! god bless!:]

Posted: Sep 4, 2008