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On The Other Side

Poem By: XBrokenHeartedX
Poetry


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Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 101    Comments: 18    Likes: 5   


    On the other side I see your face.

    You perfect features my fingers trace.

    My eyes follow yours wherever they may go.

    Your cheeks and lips with the brightest glow.

   

    I whisper your name until I can no longer speak.

    Your gaze so loving it makes me weak.

    Hands are grasped and fingers entwined.

    But there is something inside you I cannot find.

   

    Close your eyes and dream of love.

    And something magnificent opens above.

    A word a gesture or ever a look.

    All I know is that I stuck out my hand and that you took.

    Memories have darkened as the space grows.

    I gave you my love and that you chose.

    But no more words or looks can compare.

    To the sorrowful lonley frightened stare.

   

    Breathe until all oxygen is gone.

    And I'll run away and promise to take you along.

    Take my hand like you did once before.

    And in the future we'll see whats in store.

   

    I adore you much more with every passing minute.

    With love and the happiness of pursuit.

    We'll get by I promise we will.

    Our bodies will never be lifeless and still.

    But still that space grows and your hand slips from mine.

    What is this excuse, what is this sign?

    I wish only for you to care for me like I do for you.

    And tell me that everything that happened was still true.

   

    But now I see you on the other side.

    On the side I can't reach you do hide.

    I wish that all that bad time would pass.

    And I reach out to touch you but all I feel is hard cold glass.

   

   

   

   

   

   


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Comments:

brokenhearted, that was beautiful. i loved it. its so sad... because correct me if i'm wrong, but i believe its basically watching a realtionship, a love, fall apart and no matter how hard you try, you can't seem to pick up the pieces. at least, thats how i interpreted it.

keep up the amazing work. you always amaze me. =)

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks so much Alice! I am so glad you liked it. Yes, that is what it's about, ha ha -claps-. But also that even when all love is gone, you still try to reach. Thanks for reading:D

Wow... three letters-- one BIG word. This is a masterpiece! At first when I read this poem... I thought that she was seeing herself in the past... and when she reaches out all she sees is herself in the present. But when I read it a second time I saw that it was about a relationship that is slowly fading away... and it's almost as if she's imagining her reflection to be him... and it seems real... but when she reaches out all she meets is reality... or something. Anyway I really like the big picture-- it's really awesome!!!!!

Lot's of special special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha Ha thanks! It is about a relationship breaking apart. And the picture is illustrating that they're trying to reach out towards each other but they can't grasp one another, because theirs "glass" there, or a border. Thanks so much for your comments, they mean so much. And I'm glad you liked it! :D

wow, this is so amazing!! So wonderful! you wrote this so well!!! i don't know what else to say, but great job! :)

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha Ha thanks seesawmae. I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the wonderful comment! :D

Wow...that was...spectacular. For years I've been trying to write a song like that for years, and then in a few days you come up with something like that.

So jealous :-P

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL. It's not a song, but I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the wonderful comment, and I'm glad you read it! :DDD

This was so awesome and I think one of my favorite poems ever! Oh...on the last stanza, second line that goes like this "On the side I can't reach you do hide." maybe change it too "On the side I can't reach is where you hide" just a suggestion and all ^_^

Anyway, now I can go back to saying how totally AWESOME that poem is. You are an awesome poet and I'm glad your on booksie so I can read your poems!

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww your so nice Hugs and Kisses. I'm really glad you like my stuff. Thanks so much for your advice and honest opinion. I wanted to say "On the other side I can't reach you you do hide," but that sounded weird. But thanks once again for the suggestion. It shows you care:) Thanks for the wonderful comment:DDDDD

Once again, the ending left my mouth wide open. You have a great talent of concludoing a poem in the most admirable way. I loved the poemn very much! A sad read... Great job once again. =)

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Punishment:) I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks for the wonderful comment, and for reading. It means a lot!

eek! idk what to say other than it was uhmayzin! look, i even had to spell amazin a special way! [:

bahhh i loved it! [:

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL, you make me laugh cris x:) Thanks so much for the most wonderful comment, and I'm glad you liked it!

Well brokenhearted, youve done it again lol. Uve written something i think most ppl aspire to write. it is beautiful......cant say much more just very beautiful. well done. kelly xx

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much=) I appreciate the wonderful comment, and I'm glad you liked it.

That poem was awesome!! great rhyming! it's very beautiful. is it written from a memory of a past experience?

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thank you! I appreciate your comment, I'm glad you liked it. No, it was not from a memory of a past experience. It's just something I thought about and wrote about.

Lionheart
(not registered user)

WHY DO YOU HAVE TO BE SO DAMN AMAZINGLY TALENTED?!?!
T_T

It was unbelievable... i seriously have NO words to say how amazed i was after reading this. It had an intention and yet it can be interpreted in SOOO many ways! My heart was pounding as i read this... it was strong because its so sad... you made it rhyme too which just adds to your glory. It was so beautiful.... i hate the word 'beautiful' because we used it too much and now it doesnt mean as much. Just know if i was there in person i would kiss your hand that you write with.

And that last line..... it was perfect.....
You are so young....... and this was so beautiful..... i look up to you :)

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww Lionheart you're such a sweetie! I'm so glad that you liked it! I'm so glad that your heart was pounding as you read it, it tells me that it made a reaction to my readers. I appreciate all your wonderful comments, they mean so much. LOL, kiss my writing hand? Ha Ha:] I'm also glad you liked the last line; it's also a personal favorite of mine. And thanks once again!

yonaika
(not registered user)

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Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks so much for the wonderful comment:)

I liked it. I don't really know how much to say about it. I think it speaks for itself and the ending was beautiful.

Posted: Apr 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Well then I'm glad you liked it! Ha Ha. That's cool that you say it speaks for itself; that's always a good trait to have in a poem. Thanks for the wonderful comment and for reading:D

That is beautiful!

Posted: Apr 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks! I'm so glad you liked it and thanks for reading:D

excellent writing! loved the imagery.. though sad, it is such a solid piece; it was a magnificent read =)

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks:D

i know its been said a lot, but i love this poem. it reminds me of a strange friendship i have with someone. im always reaching out to him, not in a romantic way, but theres always kind of a wall between us, just like the glass in the poem. good job on this!

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it, and that you could relate it to a problem you have. Thanks for the comment again, and for reading:D

the last line seriously made me want to cry. how well i know the feeling of lost love. your poems are all great. you are exceptionally talented. every word keeps me entranced and the voice in your literature makes me feel for what ever you must have been feeling when you written. this is one of my favorites by you. never stop writing, i love your work too much.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww thank you Lydia! I'm so glad that all of the words keep you entranced, and that you recognize that voice in my poetry. You make me smile:D And you don't EVER have to worry about me stopping writing. Thanks so much again!

Oh my gosh, this poem was so beautiful! I know just how this feels, too. It's really hard to have the one you love taken away from you. So sad...but I really liked it. Great poem!

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm really glad that you liked it:)

This poem was really good. The last line concluded it very well. The poem leads me to believe the person she's talking about is either dead or really closed and personal... It was a really interesting read :)

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Well they were in love but then she was gone from him and so when he reached out to touch her it was like touching glass, cuz she was on the other side...ha ha hard to explain:) But thanks so much! I'm glad that you enjoyed it!



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