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The Cross Between Us

Poem By: XBrokenHeartedX
Poetry


It's going back and forth between the girl who loves and the boy, and the boy who hates the girl. The boy hates her, but the girl loves him. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 63    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


    I love how you have to have the same thing for lunch everyday.

    I love how you need to have everyone repeat what they say.

    I love how you smile at someone who is seething mad.

    I love how you comfort someone when they are sad.

    I hate how you put on more lipgloss even though you already have too much on.

    I hate how you think your so cool when people just wish you were gone.

    I hate how you always stare at me in class.

    I hate how you think this ignorance will pass.

    I love how you look when you walk down the hall.

    I love how when I give you my number you never call.

    I love how I have to wait to end this pain.

    I love how you like to walk in the rain.

    I hate how you always write my name on your paper.

    I hate how when you breathe out it turns to vapor.

    I hate how you twirl your hair till it begins to hurt.

    I hate how you always try to flirt.

    I love how you roll your eyes when you see me looking at you.

    I love how you believe that everything I say isn't true.

    I love how you think I'm way over that fact.

    I love how you think this thing is one big act.

    I hate how you pray to God at every lunch time.

    I hate how you believe that someday you'll be mine.

    I hate that you don't realize I don't hate you.

    I hate that you won't ever believe it's the truth.

    But no matter who hates and no matter who loves.

    Both arms will always open like a doves.

    And let in the one they will always cover.

    And that they both have always loved each other.


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Comments:

hm, not your strongest. but it has a very interesting concept. how you can love and hate a person all at the same time. haha that drives me up the wall when i find myself hating/loving all at once. the ending was great though. the last 4 lines tied it together and closed the poem perfectly. keep up the writing. =)

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for your honest opinion:) I'm still glad that you liked it, and thought the concept was interesting. Thanks for your comments!

aww, i thought it was good, good ideas, hard to grasp when you kept changing from love to hate, and sometimes i would forget which one i was on, but it's still really good! :)

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm sorry! I didn't mean to make it confusing. Thanks for your honesty though! I'm glad you liked it still, and thanks for your comment:D

cant make up my mind if u actually love or hate this person in the end, but thats just females i suppose! nice idea tho, u certainly open yourself up to all your love/hates

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha Ha I tried to put what it was about in the summery but...the girl is saying everything she loves about the boy, and the boy is saying everything he hates about the girl. I'm really really sorry that it was confusing, but I'm still glad you liked it! Thanks for the comment and for reading:)

wow, this is really beautiful. keep on writing, this is great. :)

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! Most of the others said it wasn't my best, but I'm glad you still liked it. I hope you read more of my stuff! Thanks again:)

yonaika
(not registered user)

i actually thought it was hilarious xD
I was laughing so hard, and i am siding the boy xP

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL. I'm glad you thought it was funny! It was intended to be, but at least it made a reaction. Ha Ha glad you liked it, and thanks for the comment:)



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