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Submitted: Jul 2, 2008    Reads: 21    Comments: 4    Likes: 1   


Go ahead

Walk on by

You don't know,

I'm alive

Push me down

Dont say a word

I wont get off the ground

Thats the last time I'll get hurt

Do it again

Walk right through me

It never ends,

You don't see me

You don't know im still breathing

You dont even look at me

You don't know my heart's still beating

You see right through me

Do you know im here

When you brush on by

Isn't it clear

You can't see me cry

I see you

And your visable friends

What did I do?

For the talking to end?

Can you see me?

Am I there?

You just walked right through me

Do you even care?


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Comments:

This poem is touching I know what it is like to feel like a ghost to someone I can really relate to this piece. The way you have written it I presume that is more on a level of friendship and the recognition of a past friend you had that lost to this fake world of popularity. I could be off it could be from a love perspective that is the way I interpreted that you meant it. I am making no sense anymore so Good work keep it up I liked the poem.

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

lol
well thank you
and idk really what perspective it was from, i just started writeing and thats what i ended up with. thanks so much. read my other poems too will ya?

wow i know how this feels really great poem!!

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks
tell your friends about me?
and read my other poem?

nice. really good.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Wow.
That's deep i love this one!
Wayyy good job.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks
read the other ones, they're better



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