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I LOST ME

Poem By: xXMomentsLikeThisXx
Poetry

MY DREAMS YOU HAVE TAKEN, NOW MY PRIDE I HAVE LOST View table of contents...

Submitted: Feb 14, 2009 Reads: 59 Comments: 6 Likes: 3

I am at your mercy,
Down on one knee,
I give up.. I can't anymore,
This sad reality.

My dreams you have taken,
Now my pride.. I have lost,
What else can you take from me,
That I have not already.. paid the cost.

You don't even notice me,
As I arrive or when I leave,
I just blend in,
Doesn't matter if I laugh or if I grieve.

Are you even alive,
How can you not see,
You left me colorless.. in a black hole,
Now deep down inside of me.

I meant nothing to you,
You never even walked in,
Don't bother explaining,
For you... it's a for sure win.

I couldn't have lost you,
I'm sure you would agree,
Never even had you,
Who truly I lost... was me.

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Comments:

Midnight Rose

Wow! Deep, truly deep! Love it! :)

Posted: Feb 15, 2009

Author Comment:

Thank you so much.

Atanacio
(not registered user)

strong and deep well done though

Posted: Feb 15, 2009

Author Comment:

Thank you as always!

angellynn

This is a very good write. I liked it. actually I like alot of your work. It`s down to earth, and very meaningful. Only one nit though.. I could be wrong. I`m pretty dumb when it comes to some words. The word pried. Is that correct?

Angellynn

Posted: Feb 15, 2009

Author Comment:

lol, your absolutely right... I will fix that.. thank you.

Night Write

VERY POWERFUL! YOU GO GIRL. I LOVED IT!

Posted: Feb 16, 2009

Author Comment:

Thank you.

viper

So sad and depressing.It hurts to not be noticed or rejected.I think I could handle the rejection better though.At least I'm noticed.I could feel the pain in this.

Posted: Mar 8, 2009

Author Comment:

Thank you for sharing =)

Steve Sites

Very nicely written. Reminds me of myself - my ex-wife decided she wanted out of our marriage in 2005. We had been together 20 years and I went through alot of the thoughts you mention in this poem for a long time but finally realized that it was me only making myself more and more miserable over it. It was then I was able to move forward. Maybe your poems intent was different than my situation but still struck me that way for my situation. Good job.

Posted: Mar 22, 2009

Author Comment:

Thank you for sharing your experience and your right the feeling behind all you went through I can imagine is expressed in this poem. Thank you for your words.