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Just something I thought of when I was walking to the further train station to get in to work today. It's the first poem I've written in at least a year. View table of contents...
Submitted: Nov 7, 2008 Reads: 126 Comments: 13 Likes: 6
leaves scatter
as I walk
in clouds of red and gold
the cold is gone
for now, at least
with jackets left at home
I hadn’t planned
to walk so far
but things worked out
just so
this is why
I’m going in
when I could have stayed home
I would have missed
the blessing
that was planned for me today
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Is this about your after life? Dying sounds fun.
Posted: Nov 7, 2008
Isn't it amazing how the little, simple things in life can mean so much to us! You have taken us on a wonderful walk.
My only suggestion would be the line: "that is why I'm going in"... I think it's too vague. Maybe something like... "that is why I'm traveling to work today" as going to work is not mentioned in the poem anywhere, only in your prefacing comments.
A lovely morning autumn walk you have taken me on this morning.
share the love.....Jerry
Posted: Nov 8, 2008
You really captured the essence of Autumn here, to me it seems to be a poem about the peace and finality (death), but that's just how I view things. I love it, thanks for letting me know it was up. =^.^=
Posted: Nov 8, 2008
Poetry is art, art is interpretable. However you see it, it is. No one is right or wrong, no answer is better than any other, it is simply art.
Posted: Nov 8, 2008
very expressive and nicely put together. well done.
Posted: Nov 8, 2008
perfectly Fall.
Posted: Nov 10, 2008
I love this beautiful imagery it reminds me of a walk up the street that I took recently. Where I had just felt so perfect. So in touch with nature. I was walking to go vote and the mountains and valleys cat tails and swamps trees all were gorgeous. It was windy as well which I love. I love fall no jackets perfect whether it is my favorite season. I believe I wrote about fall recently not sure though. Now I'm rambling cheers.
Posted: Nov 12, 2008
i looooooove fall too! you should check out some of my poems, i have a few regarding fall, particularly, "i came to watch the trees die". check it out! and write on! i really enjoyed this one.
Posted: Nov 14, 2008
The theme is interpreted well, the color adds so much flavor to the poetry.
Lids♥
Posted: Dec 4, 2008
An interesting little poem. I love it
Posted: Jan 21, 2009
This he;d a real sense of autumn. I enjoyed reading it. Beautifully penned.
xox
Cherri
Posted: May 1, 2009
I read your poem and then read it to my wife and we both enjoyed it a lot. She like one of two others saw the death theme in it, but I felt much like you did. A simple walk among nature's bounty. Loved it.
Posted: Dec 15, 2009
yes, nice simple observation, well done, often these ones stick in the mind for long time after wards, well done.
Paul.
Posted: Dec 28, 2009
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