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If I Spoke Softly

Poem By: air
Religion and Spirituality


Tags: joy, ecsasy, pleasure

this is in memory of a place* View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jan 24, 2008    Reads: 179    Comments: 26    Likes: 12   


 

 

If I spoke softly of a land

would you feel the words

as flutters inside a swirl

of momentous

Freedom;

Carrying throughout the body

an Ecstasy Of

JOY?

If I told of the streams

and ever ending

Beams

of light floating from the sky

would you ask WHY?

How can it possibly so lovely?

If I explored and sent to you

the message of love

that surmounts and sinks

with the setting of the sun

and boundless peace,

would you feel it too?

Sometimes at night

fading from dream to dream

you can hear someone calling your name

and you get the sense

that there is so much more

than meets the eye!

And it is then inside the land

that the messenger is found,

as delivered from the sky

is mystical pleasure beaming into

the light of your soul

and you CAN NOT let go!

As you leave this land

you prepare to take with you

a small amount of hope and

promise.

Though as you go along your journey

you may have to reach deeper and

deeper at times to reconnect,

it is ever worth the while.

*

 


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Comments:

This is so satisfying and well written...I would suggest only one little "edit"...

"As you leave this land
you prepare to take with you
a small amount of hope and
promise"...

After reading such a heart warming piece, I would want to...
"leave this land and take with me a bountiful amount of hope and promise"...

Why the suggested change?....well, after the caring and beautiful description painted by your words...who would, in their right mind, wish to take a "small" amount ?....

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

HAHAHAHA LOL! well ya I guess your right LOL! all that goodness and only take a little?; well, maybe I can go back and get more lol! Thank You Evelyn...means alot! ;-)

PROFOUND

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

(smile) Thank You Poewhit!*

as lovely as the pancake parlour!

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

(smile) Thank You Norah ;-)

It's so rich with emotion and so deep with thought. You really are a fantastic poet.

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

As are you and it's been a while, I will have to check out your page....How is the music going? ;-)

Reminds me of the psychedelic period in the late 60's, has a real innocence and longing for night time about it. I hope it inspires a night of lucid dreams for me.

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL! oh-no don't remind me (smile) Yes I love lucid dreaming, I hope it does that for you as well* Thank You Phillip :-)

Nothing I can seem to find to say that hasn't already been said, Katie!! And for me to not be able to find much to say is really saying a lot!!!

Just lovely and pretty as a daydream to read.

Peace and love.....Jerry

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Jerry, Jerry, are you sure your not just tired? LOL! ;-)
(you know I'm just teasing) well honestly it's the truth, sometimes after reading all the comments on something I can't even remember what I was going to say, much less come up with something original you know? LOL! 'Pretty as a day dream' is a wonderful thing to say (smile)-- and all I ever wish is too bring a smile* :-) Take care Jerry-have a super duper fantastical day*

Jerry took what I had planned to say!! This piece gives you the daydream affect!! It was really great! I really liked it! It seemed to give you a calming feeling and seems to allow you to daydream!! Great piece!

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Good!!! That's nice* I am very glad for that. every time I picture myself back in this place I am in distant dream land myself :) the land was and still is to me what few words can not express. Thank You Brown Skin ;-) I* hope you have a wonderful night...katie

Awesome.
Momentary heaven; bliss.

Posted: Jan 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou Devilrod, It was a momentary heaven to me; I'm not so far from this place that I can't go back there providing I get a ride. In the meantime I'll have to visit in dreams (smile)*

marty
(not registered user)

Hey Air
Another awsome read. thank you for the comments.
Did you find my songs on you tube?
God bless
Marty

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes Marty I did but with dial up I can't veiw them so I'm going to try and get them at work today. I found your page and saw how you had some trouble posting, hope you can get that cleared up soon :) I also read two of your posts which were remarkable!!!!! hope you can read the comments I left, also I filled a request to become a fan*
Hoping you have a wonderful~ God Bless....katie

Hi Katie...This is such a gloriously dream inducing read. Brilliant! Your poems always seem to hypnotise me!

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

(smile) Thank you lilypad* that makes me feel good! ;-)

Nicely written. I agree it is profound.

Peace Love and Understanding :)
Matt

Posted: Feb 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou Matt :-) I hope all is well with you~katie

Deeply moving poem. Good images.

Posted: Feb 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou Terry, we all have special places* this one is mine :) take care, katie*

Katie, loved it!... the words were so smooth and fit perfectly together while creating a clear vision for the reader... good work as always!... write on my friend!

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

^SMILES^ Thankyou ddrandall
very nice to hear from you.
you sound in good spirits! :-D
stay well and enjoy the day ~katie

I did not like this.....
I love this.....And I am gad that u r there with right words for people who r depressed and then these words revive their faith on GOD.
That's why I love ur writings....
they just reach soul and tap gently.....

Posted: May 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Wow, Pratibha 'reach soul and tap gently' WOW
I so love that! I think that is the most wonderful compliment. it is BEAUTIFUL! Thankyou so, so very much!
(BIG GRINS AND SMILES) :-)

I love this piece xxx

Posted: May 2, 2008

Author Comment:

HI Kate :-D
Thankyou very much ^^smiles^^

I LOVED THIS!!! I loved the layout, the words. Wonderful!!!

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

^^^Big Smile^^^
Thankyou Jen.

Beautiful! In the poem where you ask the question: If I explored and sent to you the message of love that surmounts and sinks with the setting of the sun and boundless peace, would you feel it too? The answer is yes.. I felt every bit of it. Thank you for the beauty in this poem.

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Vee, after reading your bio and some of your work, I know you too have had this same experience, where there was once emotional dinamics and mental confusion, a release or passageway opened into a reahlm of peace. insurmountable peace entered in somehow and it became a realization that nothing from the past mattered anymore. How could that be??? LOL I searched the past four and a half years for the answers LOL! it's awesome! Where did all my issues go? needless to say that I ahve found new identifications for the old ego but they are not destructive. I have a ways to go yet, and don't we all....shall we do it together ^_^

thankyou so much for becoming a fan Vee, it will be most inspiring for me to read your work, love and peace; ~katie

rellylike this such a butiful poem

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou shiningstar ^_^ Thankyou very much!
~katie

Simply magical. A very special, joyful read.

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey Thankx Anna, I thought you'd seen this one before.
I am very glad that you like it.
sure is busy around here with lots of new people huh?
seems like we kinda get a little lost when floods of folks occur LOL!!!
so good to hear from you, seems like home ^_^

"Though as you go along your journey, you may have to reach deeper and deeper at times to reconnect, it is ever worth the while" I loved these last lines. You have a beautiful talent Katie!

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Rose ^_^
to me it seems as though unless I reach deep inside I lose track of who I really am through life situations you know?
it's as though your eyes see one aspect and the inner vision sees another yet deeper aspect you know?
Thankyou for taking the time Rose, and thankyou so much for the wonderful compliment ^_^
I am glad to meet you ^_^
~katie

That was absolutely beautiful.

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou Susan ^_^
Thankyou very much! ^_^
~katie

Wrapped in magic .As the gift of the words unfurl and land neatly in my heart .All I can say, is, it's just what I always wanted .

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

OHHHH ^_^ Thankx hun.
you have alot of catching up to do. ^_^
you been gone too long.
I got to your poems but never heard back from ya, see how ya are LOL!!!!!!! just teasing, you know*
so I hope all is well with you and you are having great experiences. see ya soon......~katie

I love it. It makes me wish I could go there :]

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ I am sure you will find your paradise one day ^_^
Thankyou very much dubl
~ katie

wow, this is really fantastic! you have had so many comments, but i thought i'd give you another one!

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha yeah I know maybe I should switch the poems up there in featured writing. So many comments, what's left to say LOLOLOLOL! ya, but thankx though Mae, hope your doing well :D

Stunning write here!! speaks to me of nature of peace and of serenity!! as does all your poetry!! your word usage is sublime and i love the atmosphere that was created here, i really wanted to find this place as i floated by each well written line, you have exacted your feelings and the longings of others perfectly!!

well done!!

keep it up!!

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh wow! thanks so much!!! ^_^
that makes me feel real good to think that the inner senses of beingness goes through to the reader :D
I love your comment* thankyou very much zenith :D
~katie

yippy....i read this again to soothe my soul

Though as you go along your journey

you may have to reach deeper and

deeper at times to reconnect,

it is ever worth the while.



Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

ya, it's a soothing effect ^_^



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