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A Prayer by the River

Poem By: Carnation
Religion and Spirituality


Tags: prayer, love, hope

A prayer written in a bout of fever... Inaudible not unheard... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 12, 2008    Reads: 157    Comments: 21    Likes: 10   


A Prayer by the River

From the inaccessible heights,
Defying the tight embrace
Of rugged-majestic Great Himalyas,
She curves through the untouched groves
Of sprawling wide Sandal woods
And gracefully descends,
Carving her path of freedom.

Mesmerized I kneel down, with tears I implore,
Dear Mother Ganges! O glistening miracle,
In this rare auspicious full moon night
Will you carry my prayers to Great Powers of Universe,
For I am ignorant, resourceless and sinful
And you are known as beloved of gods
Mother, please be my priestess for tonight.

Kindly place this fragrant garland,
This modest string of wild flowers
At the feet of our loving Father.
But don't disturb His inward gaze
The gaze that holds and nourishes the Universe.
Take my love's warmth to this Great Unseen Power
Who empowers us to see His boundless beauty.

And present this Lotus with nine petals
And this lamp with nine flames
To the eternal spring of life
To the Great Benevolent Mother Goddess
And request Her to pardon my sins,
My sins -- some moments of weakness
And let me be a proud inheritor
Of this great tradition of womanhood
Some self-abnegation for life's affirmation
Like love's hard crucible, both fluid and the fire
The fluid that cleanses, the fire that purges.

And give this frail sprig of Jasmine
With half-bloomed angelic buds
To the heartless God of love
And tell him that I need his grace
In holy, small, dicreet measures
Not a feverish, promiscuous bounty
And if he doesn't crush the flower
Think he has accepted my prayer
Or otherwise tonight, the scent of my purity 
Will stick to his hands and won't let him sleep.

Thus I pour down my heart in Her deep sacred waters
And see my prayers afloat Her gentle moon-lit ripples
I gaze with throbbing faith till they go out of sight.
By middle of the night... May they reach the shores divine!


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Comments:

wonderful, wonderful, beautiful prayer

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much!!!

This has a mesmerizing quality, some beautiful phrases. "..give this frail sprig of Jasmine
With half-bloomed angelic buds" "this fragrant garland,
This modest string of wild flowers" "I pour down my heart in Her deep sacred waters
And see my prayers afloat Her gentle moon-lit ripples"
Very gentle and exceedingly lovely.

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Anna!!!

Very good work, I especially like the tibetian themes.
Andras

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, i like tibetian and Buddhist themes... hope to share more thoughts soon.

hii absolutely love this the river ganga which carries every ones soul ,flowing down from the heart of himalaya
it has always been special but i hope it retains her flow for centuries to come and our prayer reaches the almighty or else once the trouble thats showing her face that she is drying never holds to be true i hope we can always pray the prayer of your heart

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for your beautiful thoughts Shreeram... hope to share more ideas soon.

hey.

I do not want to tell anything as i have recently visited
*CHAR DHAM* (during may month) .simply amazing different form of ganga.

thanks yaar.

ASTU...

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

CHAR DHAM.. Great. Hmmm now i know the secret of your phenomenal creativity. Thanks for reading :)

I love it. Very beautiful.

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

I am so glad... you liked it.

Some beautiful imagery and phrasing. A prayer poem to be read again and again.....Jerry

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! THANKS!!!

beautiful and strong with personal feeling.

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :)

A prayer, A poem, it has it all...great imagery, I could picture myself in the mountains, down the river...great job, Take Care, Ted

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

What a beautiful comment!... Thanks!!!

Carnation:

Well written! Most devotional. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Thank you for becoming a fan.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

haha wow and you said mine really speaks out to people, this is amazing its sounds like something you would read out of an old literature book that your entire class would have to tear apart and research for like three weeks, it really is amazing, and just the words really show the reader such strong emotions!

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha ha thanks :D

It was such a beautiful poem. I loved the emotions and the strong pull in it. Awesome job! =)Mandy

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Mandy... Need i tell you... you have got enormous talent.

kewl..

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

It sounds cute!!!

Wow carnation, this is really something. Your style has such a fluidity to it and yet, you do it with ease. The word pictures (I might as well say portraits) that you paint here are breathtakingly beautiful and detailed. Plus, the Tibetan and Buddhist themes give it that fresh feeling that is unmistakable. This is a true work of art my friend. Take care, Regan

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks... thanks... please look below. I am silly or perhaps too happy :)

Thank you so much Regan. Your comments really warmed my heart :)

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

This poem is really emotional, the flow was superb. The Tibetan and the fact of the whole prayer being as a forgiving tone and compliments to the Great Benevolent Mother Goddess. Superb. If there was a rating for this, I'd give it a 100 out of 10. Maybe even more! Great job!!!

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much for these kind words... you are very right, i had written in a sad but forgiving mood and i ask for forgiveness as the greatest blessing.

Thanks again.

Very Touching And Very Well Written.I Really Enjoyed This Alot.You Have A Great Talent.Don't Lose It And Don't Ever Give It Up.

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much... just like your poetry your comment is also full of inspiration :)

I agrre with Anna. This has a mesmerizing quality. Like a feverish lullaby. It's beautiful with an organic spiritual feel. Great stuff.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! Thanks, it is a beautiful comment.

Oh My Gosh!
Breath taking, beautiful, I'm simply spell bound.

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, Dear Peach.

beautiful

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Princess.

Oh lovely! Keep it up! c",)

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)



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