Nativity

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Poem By: DarkFairy8907
Religion and Spirituality

Tags: christmas, jesus, nativity, christian, religious

Okay I've re-edited this piece, now I like it better than the original. This poem is about how in modern times we view the simple yet beautiful nativity scene as nothing special. But it is more sophisticated that it actually appears, there is a special message that goes along with this simple lawn ornament. View table of contents...

Submitted: Nov 23, 2007 Reads: 81 Comments: 9 Likes: 7

Nativity

What do you see before thee

Nothing more than a nativity?

A man and a woman with

Some sheep and some goats

They surround a manger

That contains humanity's hope.

To you a mere nativity

To me a message of serenity.

God's promised Lamb, the perfect sacrifice

A savior is born to save Adam's lost race.

This child is more than just plastic and paint

He will grow up to be a righteous saint.

Loved and despised by men and women alike

He will be crucified to save your life.

Do you still see before thee

Nothing more than a nativity?

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Comments:

Speshlk

I like the simplicity of this piece. You say a lot and inspire deep thought about the spiritual meaning of the nativity with few words. Nice! ~ :-) ~ K

Posted: Nov 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Really, you think it's fine the way it is? Cool I'm also considering a word poem, but haven't thought of anything yet. By brain has taken the weekend off without informing me. Thanks for the comment.

~DarkFairy~

Liathano

i too like the way you have written it, the simplicity is key to making this poem effective, at least that's what i think. it was beautiful have you got me and every reader to picture not just the standard nativity sceens that they sell in the stores but the true picture behind all the plastic and lights. Nice job.

Posted: Nov 25, 2007

Author Comment:

Yep that's what my mother said too. She agrees that I have a good concept going here, but I need to rework still. Thanks Sam.

~DarkFairy~

princess onika auguste

this is a great poemand so true

Posted: Jan 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. When I finally read it to my church, everyone was like wow. Dani wrote that. My sister is the poet in the family, since she comes by it more naturally. You can read what I mean, she is Worker of God. Thanks again for the comment.

~DarkFairy~

SynHawk

Powerful, well written and simple... mostly everyone has covered what I would have said >.>
well done and can't wait to see more ^^ nicely done Dark

Hawk ^^

Posted: Jan 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Hawk. Yep everyone probably has said just about everything imaginable. But thanks again.

~DarkFairy~

gothiktinkerbella

Very very good! I liked the way it flowed and really made you think.=D

**mandy[massacre]**

Posted: Jan 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I tried really hard not to rythm on this one, but I couldn't help it, my message just came out better that way instead of fighting it.

~DarkFairy~

rickyengland

Hi Darkfairy8907. This is an effective piece and thought provoking.There IS a significance to the Nativity scene that tends to get washed over, and I think you conveyed that well.'Like it' You may like to read one I wrote called 'If I were' Ricky.

Posted: Feb 8, 2008