Tomorrow is Today is Yesterday

I'm sitting here alone with Today.

Yesterday has just left me.

Tomorrow's right around the corner.

I'm in deep comtemplation about where I'm heading:

Why has Yesterday left me so heartbroken?

I'm promised that someone will come along

And all this hurt and pain'll be gone.

But no one ever comes

And I'm left with you, Today,

As Yesterday slips away,

Forgetting all the promises she'd made.

Today you reassure me

That everything will be okay.

So I'm fill with optimism twined with doubt,

"There's always Tomorrow but will I ever get my turn?"

Tomorrow comes.

"Why d'you fell just like Today?"

You've arrived with the same old promises

That Today promised me Yesterday.

Then I realise;

Tomorrow has come disguised as Today.

I'm stuck within this cycle of promises and lies.

"All I ask for is love or have you forgotten why I cry?"

But I've had enough of these games.

Tomorrow never comes.

Yesterday has left me with vows that's turned into lies.

And Today arrives with the same old question:

"Will I ever get the chance to stare love in the eyes?"

Comments:

stephhlebreton

hehe, I got confused with the whole tomorrow is today, yesterday, and all that, lol. it was fantastic and still so sad. You have a talent dearie, keep it up!
Steph(:

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot Steph. I wanted it to be confusing therefore it would make the reader concentrate more on what the poem is actually saying. Thanks again. Olola.

Pratibha

This one is my FAVOURITE FOR SURE.....

I loved it from the core of my heart......

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Pratibha. Your comments mean an awful lot to me. Olola.

bubbly

hi! olola. u've taken me to the tenses. if its a game, forget it. if its love, embrace it - for it'll ever be TODAY and TODAY alone. keep going. ;-)

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much bubbly. The poem's pretty ambigious and that's what I love about it. I must say I wrote this with love in mind and partly about the game that life plays. I'm glad you liked it. Olola.

Eric JHRB Egan
(not registered user)

Very well written Olola, my beautiful, talented friend. Your theme is deep and your expression thoughtful and heartfelt. You know they shut down my account here and all my writing is lost.

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Eric...that's terrible. How come?
Anyway, thanks for your comment. I really appreciate it. Even though they shut down your account you still managed to read my work...that means a lot. Thanks. Olola.

Wandiola

Wow, now this is a true poem, I very much liked this, olola!! you know, you are a very talented writer.
Happy days!
x

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot Wandy! I'm really glad you enjoyed. Your comments mean a lot to me. Olola.

Those

I loved it! At first, I was like what the heck? But, as I continued to read, I understood it. Very well done!

Yours Truly,
Liz

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Thanks a lot Liz. I'm glad you 'loved it'. I really appreciate your comment. Olola.

controverse

Ah very nice poem! I really get exactly what you're saying and I wasn't confused at all :) The biggest thing I enjoyed about this poem was the fact that the days Today, Yesterday, and Tomorrow were not seen as dates but actually personalities, and this really enhances the poem because then emotions can be attached to those three entities, making the reader understand the poem much better. It is a very great read!

As you know I always try to give suggestions and the only ones I can make here about about the syntax. Like "I'm sat here alone with Today." should be "I'm sitting here alone with Today" if that's what you meant?

I saw the special-ness of the following two lines

I'm promised that someone will come along
And all this hurt and pain will be gone.

because their structures are similar and there is rhyme, so I will make a suggestion to contract the "will" in the second line to the "pain" so they stay rhythmically identical as well:

I'm promised that someone will come along
And all this hurt and pain'll be gone.

It won't stand out since you use a few more contractions further down the poem :)

I hope you find my suggestions helpful and keep up the good work!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

I honestly found your suggestions helpful and I'll read through the poem again to see whether I can add them in. Thanks a lot for the comment controverse, I really appreciate it! Olola.

Pratibha

this is my fav of all ....no matter how many i read this, it has the same spell of positivity on me...lovely inspiration...no matter how my yesterday was, my today and tomorrow would surely be mine...

Thanks honey

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Pratihba, you seriously spoil me with your comments. I'm glad this really inspires you. Olola.

jerkulez

tomorrow came disguised as today....that spells out a lot of the days we encounter

brilliant piece. really enjoyed it
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Posted: Sep 26, 2008

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