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Submitted: Jun 13, 2008 Reads: 91 Comments: 22 Likes: 13
SAVIOUR
I walked in darkness
You shone a light
I did you wrong
You made me right
I lost the plot
You had a plan
I doubted you
You were my fan
I left your side
You called me back
I ran for cover
You took the flack
I was a prisoner
You said “go free!”
I lived for self
You died for me
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Nicely expressed Ricky
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Excellent, it just fit's my faith too. I sometimes wonder if ad why, but I always end up thinking "there but for the grace of GOD"
Nice one Ricky I like it.
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Wonderful Ricky! very nicely done :)
good to see you, been a few weeks, there are some poetry challenges going around if you care to try.
have a very nice night ~katie
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Wow, absolutely brilliant Ricky! The ending was unexpected, and worked perfectly. ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Very, very nice, Ricky! A heartfelt poem filled with a believer's truth!!
Wishing you peace, love and happiness.....Jerry
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
hi! ricky. u bring alive the sacrifice of jesus. a poetic truth. ;-)
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
HI Ricky great poem loved it.....so simple with alot of meaning.....enjoy your day Juliet
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Hello,
there is only one way to describe ur poem........ready........IT WAS BRILLIANT! two thumbs up, if i had more i'd probably raise those up too LOL.
Just one thing, you have to work on the end a bit it was just too abrubt. otherwise the poem was gr8, the simplicity of ur verse not to mention the rhyming and flow gave it depth and character.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
This was beautiful Ricky! It was simple, poignant and sincere. Very nice job!
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Disagree with Azmat, the abruptness of the ending works because it highlights the difference between the human who sins and is selfish and the goodness of God who died for us and loves us in spite of our weaknesses. He forgives all and that is the wonderful message conveyed simply, powerfully and without unneeded embellishment. Good poem Ricky.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
This is beautiful..it really makes me stop and think about my own faith, and I think you nailed it. This is simple, and yet explains it the best that can be done, I think. Keep up the good work. :)
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
I really liked it. Really shows the flaws in us and the love the God shows inspite of those flaws. Very good piece.
Posted: Jun 15, 2008
this was really good and i liked the smooth flow of the words the ending was also GR8!
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Great piece of work Ricky
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Faith is the opposite of fear. So glad you've chosen faith.
MA
Posted: Jun 18, 2008
Wow, that was touching. I don't say that it was "deep" because that word is used to describe a lot of writers, and anyone can be deep, so I'm going to say that it painted a picture in my head. I don't read God's word as much as I probably should, but I know that we all have sinned and fallen short of the glory of God. And again, That poem was great.
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
I loved the poem. It is so true of His nature, so loving and so kind. I loved the ending also. When He said before He died, "It is finished.". I feel like praising Him right now for all He has done for us.
Posted: Jul 11, 2008
JESUS SAVES
Posted: Aug 14, 2008
Interestingly, I read this without linking the title to religion at all (didn't check out the tags!) and so the last line came as a powerful blow! Hope you don't mind an agnostic's interpretation, Ricky - perhaps there's a potential 'saviour' in us all. Excellent poem.
Posted: Aug 27, 2008
Very inspiring.I liked it .
Your very good at christian poetry,
you should write more.I dont read
a whole lot of anything else, Im
a christian.I think your work is
quite good. Keep it up.
Bless you, angellynn.
Posted: Oct 26, 2008
This is great.
Posted: Oct 27, 2008
Hi Ricky
I'm going throught a horrible time and my faith has suffered immensely. This poem reminded me what He did for me. And the greatest thing of all? Even if I were the only person on Earth, He would have done it all over again.
Take a look at my poem "Breeze". I think you'll enjoy it.
Thank you for posting this.
Love Lien
Posted: Nov 25, 2008
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