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Trying to capture the wonder of light in water. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Feb 15, 2008    Reads: 36    Comments: 3    Likes: 3   


 Shallow is the brook which

hosts the dancing light beams

Twisted shards of aurora

lambent pink pebbles

 

Pale green splashes

of wet lucent water

Excitedly bend

each sun sent ray

 

A silver tray of

dispersed and dizzy crystals

Floats, sinks and resurfaces

tired yet youthful

 

Animated patterns

that stretch then collapse

Snaps of light

held then lost

 

For as long as the

solar invitation is valid

This scene of nature

holds the gaze of God

 

The author of creation

the absolute grand designer

Still left in awe

as he rereads his work


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Comments:

Irwin
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very well constructed poem some clever stuff creating wonderful imagery. I like the simple 'Each sun sent ray' a less experienced person would have settled for 'each sunray sent' - not the same thing!

Posted: Feb 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I'm not too sure if it's a little too adjective heavy. But I like the picture it creates.

Great piece of work!

Posted: Feb 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, it's one of those images no poetry can really truly capture, you have to witness it.

I have to say that this is right up there with my
favourite Booksie reads. Outstanding. Love the rhythm of lines 1 & 2. Also, the notion that God marvels at His own work, as if suprised by it! Absolute 'like it'
Ricky.

Posted: Feb 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thank you glad you enjoyed.



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