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Did a bit of studying on various types of poetry, this was my attempt on writing a Villanelle. The research I did on it wasn’t much, but I kinda liked the message I managed to put througH. This piece was inspired by a pretty heated and abusive argument going on in one of the Facebook Kenyan groups on gays and lesbians. It just felt appropriate to write it. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 14, 2008    Reads: 42    Comments: 6    Likes: 2   


ONLY ONE JUDGE
 
Do not point a finger of judgment to your brethren,
The sins of man will forever be present for as long as he lives,
There is only but one Judge, and you ain’t him
 
The calling for the righteous is to do what is right;
Give clothes to the naked and water to the thirsty,
Do not point a finger of judgment to your brethren
 
The churchgoer sings to the hymns of King David,
Yet with the spirit of Ceasar point out to all the sinners
There is only but one Judge, and you ain’t him.
 
The rules of man forever blinding us from His rules,
His vigorous knocks always goes unheard from our dirt filled ears,
Do not point a finger of judgment to your brethren
 
He sent his only begotten son to show us the way,
Yet his teachers put the real way under lock and key, to show us theirs
There is only but one judge, and you ain’t him
 
And you, my brethren, there on your high seat
Insult me, judge me, do all that He would never have done, but
Do not point a finger of judgment to your brethren,
There is only one Judge, and you ain’t him.
 


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This translates to me as a case of People Whoi Live in Glass Houses Shouldn't Throw Stones.

I like the way you gave it a more modern twist, but have to admit that I haven't the first clue what Villanelle is.

That's what becomes of being a poetry Philistine......

Nice work.
Phil

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Phil. A Villanele is a type of poem that is 19 lines long, but only uses two rhymes, while also repeating two lines throughout the poem...didn't actually follow most of the rules though! Glad the message still managed to get across

runereader
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Dee..post this as a response..you know what I am
saying!..Then leave it for them to workout for themselves..brilliant!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Posted it in the Virtual poetry thread....so twill be read either way. Thanks btw...

this just makes me curious as hell as to what was being said back and forth on facebook...

But your response is peppy and spunky. Too many times believers are forced to be meek and mild and this says quite clearly - you aint him!

I liked this!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Somebody had asked what others thought of Gays since one of her old friends had just opened up to her and told her he was gay....then all the 'christians' started their name calling n cursing, saying how evil gay people are...and when I wrote in with a different view, the tongue lashing n name calling turned to me...it's all pretty silly really, they just don't seem to listen to what they are saying. Bottom line is, the whole approach they take is wrong...especially when they try to cover it up by quoting bible verses....you know, whoever has not sinned should cast the first stone n all that..anyway...wanted to post the link to facebook but my facebook isn't going through, bummer...

Thanks for the comment though, and glad you liked it

hi! deb. with this poem u've achieved two goals - tell us about villanelle through a moralistic approach and lead us to facebook. i like the first. to read a new format enhances my view of life and also knowledge. keep rolling. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot mate, glad to have passed not one, but two messages...lol

This is not a villanelle, just because it is a 19-line poem. There are no tercets and no quatrain. If you write a 14 line poem, will that be a sonnet.

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Good point, I did say though that I didn't follow most of its rule...i just got most of my layout from it. I was more interested in the message that I was passing across....
Thanks for noticing though.

Hiya DEB, i think u did achieve the desired aim of getting the poem written PERFECTLY and very very honestly...

To be honest, i really loved it....for me as a person this is nothing but PERFECT AND FLAWLESS....

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Praibha,glad you liked it!



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