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Long Cold Night

By: Isabeau
Romance


Losing you, is like losing life... lyrics to a song...i'm not very good. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Sep 17, 2008    Reads: 82    Comments: 8    Likes: 3   


Cold Night…
 
 
Well, it’s a cold night,
When I found out you don’t need me anymore.
It’s a dark night,
When you said that I’m not who you wanted anymore,
Yeah, it’s a long night,
When I reach out and find out that your not there.
It’s a cold night,
When my heart has fallen into pieces,
 
I tried to reason with you,
But you just pushed me away,
I tried to love you,
But you decided not to stay, yeah,
 
My heart is cold,
And I’m alone,
With nothing left of you,
 
Well, it’s a cold night,
When I found out you don’t need me anymore.
It’s a dark night,
When you said that I’m not who you wanted anymore,
Yeah, it’s a long night,
When I reach out and find out that your not there.
It’s a cold night,
When my heart has fallen into pieces,
 
 
Please, please, don’t leave me,
I just need some time to change,
Tell me,
Tell me what I need to do,
To still be there, by your side,
With you, I need you, I want you, I love you
 
But you’re gone,
You’re not coming back,
I’m stuck here in this heartache that just wont leave,
So, I’ll just lie here in this cold, dark night.
 
 
It’s a cold, cold night,
Well, it’s a long, dark night,
And I have fallen and just can’t make my way up,
Cause it a long, cold, night.


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Comments:

Definitely a good flow. But the repetition of stanza wasn't good: made it more like a song than a poem due to it. One of your good things is that you right in a perfect manner. No spelling mistakes. No punctuation mistakes. :p And you are probably the only one here I've seen so far. The whole poem was good, except these two lines "I tried to love you,But you decided not to stay, yeah," I am not asking you to change it, but I'll definitely advise you to consider it again. You are a good writer; keep it up!

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks. Actually this is a song. I meant it as lyrics and thank you so much for your imput!

I been there many of times. Just give other fish in the sea a chance. We just never know when the right one will come. Hope you feel better. Let the fish get the feel for the bait.

Posted: Sep 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks...

I like it, like everyone else has said, it has a nice flow, now if I could get a friends band to play it...

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

cool, thanks Sam, I really appreciate it.

love it!! brilliant this was actually good being that u said you werent good at this kind of this!! nice job molly you and your boot!! heehee

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Marlie. I have mad skills with my boot thank you. Anyway, it just kinda came to me.

hi! molly.

1. MOLLY: Although the name Molly creates the urge to be reliable and responsible, it causes a restless intensity that defies relaxation. The name of Molly creates a restless, creative nature that takes you into many ventures, but does not allow you to see things through to a satisfactory completion. Yours is a versatile, musical, artistic, but independent nature and you must have the freedom to express your creative ideas and abilities to be happy. An urge for independence causes dissatisfaction and frustration in close relationships and you find the "ties that bind" restricting. The qualities of this name would find a more constructive outlet in work that involves high-pressure selling or promotional activities, possibly in community affairs, for it contains a positive, driving power.


2. MOLLY FRANKLIN: There are 13 letters in your name.
Those 13 letters total to 63. There are 3 vowels and 10 consonants in your name.

What your first name means: Hebrew Female Diminutive of Mary: Wished-for child; rebellion; bitter.
English Female From the Gaelic Maili which is a pet form of Mary, meaning bitter. Famous bearer: actress Molly Ringwald.

Your number is: 9
The characteristics of #9 are: Humanitarian, giving nature, selflessness, obligations, creative expression.

The expression or destiny for #9: The expression that you exhibit is represented bythe number 9. Your talents center in humanistic interests and approaches. You like to help others as you were intended to be the 'big brother or big sister' type. You operate best when you follow your feelings and sense of compassion, and allow yourself to be sensitive to the needs of others. You work well with people, and have the potential to inspire. This suggests that you could successfully teach or counsel. Creative ability, imagination and artistic talent (often latent) of the highest order are present in this expression. It's possible that you're not using or developing all of these capabilities at this time. Some of your talents may have been used at an earlier time in your life, and some may still be latent. Be aware of your capabilities, so that you can make use of them at appropriate times.

If you are able to achieve the potential of your natural expression in this life, you are capable of much human understanding and have a lot to give to others. Your personal ambitions are likely to be maintained in a very positive perspective, never losing sight of an interest in people, and a sympathetic, tolerant, broad-minded and compassionate point of view. You are quite idealistic, and disappointed at the lack of perfection in the world. You have a strong awareness of your own feeling as well as those of others. Friendships, affection, and love are extremely important.

Undeveloped or ignored, the negative side of the 9 expression can be very selfish and self-centered. If you do not actively involve yourself with work that benefits others, you may tend to express just the opposite characteristics. It is your role to be very involved with other people and their needs, but it may be difficult for you achieve this role. Aloofness, lack of involvement, and a lack of sensitivity mark the low road of this expression.

Your Soul Urge number is: 7
A Soul Urge number of 7 means: With a number 7 Soul Urge you are very fond of reading, and retreating to periods of being alone and away from the disruptions of the outer world. You like to dream and develop you idealistic understandings, to study and analyze, to gain knowledge and wisdom. You may be too laid back and withdrawn to really succeed in the business world, and you will be much more comfortable in circumstances that are tolerant of your reserve, your analytical approach, and your desire to use your mind rather than your physical being.

You are very timid around people that you don't know very well, so much so at times that casual conversation and social situations can be strained. You tend to repress your emotions to the extend that some people have a good bit of difficult understanding you. You tend to be very selective with friends and you don't easily adapt to new environments or to new people very quickly.

The negative traits of the 7 include becoming too much the introvert and isolated from others.

Your Inner Dream number is: 11
An Inner Dream number of 11 means: You dream of casting the light of illumination; of being the true idealist. You secretly believe there is more to life than we can know or prove, and you would like to be provider of the 'word' from on high.

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the update, bubbly.

I really liked this and would love to hear it placed to music.

Posted: Oct 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Please, please, don’t leave me,
I just need some time to change,
Tell me,
Tell me what I need to do,
To still be there, by your side,
With you, I need you, I want you, I love you


This is something I repeat quite often in my heart for my loved one. I love him crazy. You spoke my heart here.

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for looking at my words and looking into my heart.

OMG ...... speaks to the heart of the heart dunnit? I really liked it.

hugs
Vee

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks you so much...I wish that you guys could listen to it to music! Thanks again. Beau



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