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Song: Sickest Love

By: Me Against The World
Romance


First song I wrote, If you don't like it don't bitch!!! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 24, 2008    Reads: 70    Comments: 5    Likes: 2   


Sickest Love

(Verse One)

Watching the moon

I know you are too

We're wrapped in this anger

and the stars are fading

Has the book closed

cus my hopes are deteriorating

This book is so full

but has no ending

Can we write a new begining

(Chorus)

I just wanna scream:

You

Hate

I

Love

You

Kill

I

Trust

You

Youch

I Die

You. Live. In. Me

(Verse Two)

Things have gone so unheard

Only Masequers have spoken

There's oceans inbetween your heart and mine

I'm miles away from you

Decades from your eyes

Those eyes are entrancing

(chorus)

I just wanna scream:

You

Hate

I

Love

You

kill

I

Trust

You

Youch

I

Die

You. Live. In. Me

(Verse Three)

Yet you hold the key

Sealing my lips

I no longer feel the need for someone else

I want you

You soften the blow

with your cold touch

I ache for that touch

(chorus)

You're just screaming:

You. Kill. Our. Love

I. Trust. Your. Touch

You die in my arms

cus you live within me

You hold my key


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Comments:

Howdy :D I like it, but thought I'd let you know it says you hate I in the chorus, and also youch, which I'm guessing was meant to be touch. LOL. I think the chorus is a little confusing, but other than that it's really good! Awesome work!! (P.S. Chapter 11 is out. I think you can guess which novel. I'm putting them all out really fast.) I like the pic at the top too.

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Author Comment:

they're seprate words, they're pared off in 2's, now that u know that go back and read the chorus. I love the pic too. I commented the chapter before you could even tell me, I'm addicted. heheehh!


xxxsomeone

MMK! i luv it. at the chorus part i can imagine a screamo part. people r screaming it. i screamed it to my slef and it was pretty tight. kinda liked it. maybe i can make sumthin up wit my piano.

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, cool. don't you hate ur piano? I thought you got pissed at it or sumthin? heheh! thnx for the comment though Eric.


xxxsomeone

Hey that song is pretty cool. I'm working on writing one myself with my keyboard. It's harder than I thought, since I'm shy and can't sing XD

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, I can't sing either. *shrugs* thnx for the comment.

I luvvveeeddd it :) excellent work and yes like BloodyBlade said i imagined the chorus part being screamed lol luv your use of words

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe! thank you verrrryyyy much!

Yeah i agree with Eric and i love this

it's really good lydia

nice work

xxx

dominique

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe, thank yous dominique. :) I love all your comments.



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