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Stealing the Cinderella Story

Novel By: CheetahBear
Romance


Catalyn has never been noticed by guys before her sophmore year. Not only does she have a huge crush on most popular guy in school but then two new guys come, and she finds herself hopelessly in love with one, but great friends with the other, until something happens forcing her to choose which of the guys she loves more. For this Cinderella choosing a Prince Charming isn't going to be so easy! View table of contents...

Chapters:

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28

Submitted: Oct 4, 2008    Reads: 482    Comments: 18    Likes: 1   


Time seemed to slow and I could hear everyone go quiet and a few voices yelled out my name.

I was pretty sure I was in shock, even before I hit the floor because although I felt the pain it didn't hurt and then I could feel someone there by my head as they picked me up, but I couldn't see them.

"Don't worry my Catalyn" I heard them mumble.

And then my mind completly blacked out.

***

I could hear distant voices and I wanted so bad to say something but I wasn't quite sure what was going on.

"Like I was saying if he wouldn't have been there and caught her the way he did she would have broken her back and neck. You owe that young man a lot" a voice I didn't know was saying.

What happened?

Who caught who and saved them?

They saved me?

"Just remember she can hear you so don't be afraid to talk to her" the voice said once again.

"Catalyn sweetheart its your mother" I heard her saying from somewhere beside me but her voice sounded muffled.

"Yo sis, this is Riley"

"I'm here to sis" Ryan's voice said.

"Me to sweetheart" my father said.

So much worry in their voice.

What exactly was wrong with me?

Minutes went by like hours.

Hours went by like days.

And days went by like weeks.

And still my mind wouldn't wake up and no one had yet told me who it was that had saved me.

They hadn't came to see how I was doing either.

Tate had.

And that was it.

But yet he hadn't been the one that had saved me.

Or not that I knew of anyways.

Just then I heard a familiar voice.

"Catalyn. I'm sorry I haven't been here to talk to you. I just couldn't bring myself to see you hurting. I don't know what to say to defend myself. I don't blame you if you're mad at me. I just wanted to tell you that i'm ok with you picking Tate over me. I understand that i'm not your Prince Charming" I could hear Payton saying and feel him stroking my hand.

Then I could hear footsteps fading as he walked out.

I didn't want him to go.

I struggled to open my eyes and was surprised when I could see bare white walls.

I looked down at my own pale skin and struggled to sit up.


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Comments:

woa...this is getting sooo interesting!!!!XD
It must have Aiden??...or a new guy...who will be her prince charming??....I dont think Payton or Tate would the prince now!!...hehe...just my mind trying to figure out!!

UPDATE!!!

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

haha yeah well it could be...but who knows...this is me! :D haha anyways I finished it today on my computer...so you will just have to wait and see :D

I knew that Payton would save her!!! I LOVE HIM!!!!!!!! Tate...jeez...he just wasn't paying attention.

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

haha so you're sure that it is Payton that saved her? :D

OH MY GOD!!!!!
I hope it was Payton who caught her!!! And Tate isnt her prince charming! Payton is!!! I really really hope he his anyways =D

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

You will see really soon! Probably later today if i get enough comments...i'm really happy about the ending and I can't wait to see peoples reactions to it...muahaha!! :D

ahhhh!
i loved that so he did save her thank goodness and she better pick Payton. :]
loved it ♥

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

You will see soon enough if she does or not...only two chapters left to go...maybe three...but i'm pretty sure only two!

ahhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!! payton's her prince carming!!! yay i knew my final chpice was right!!-unless you go and change it on me again!!! woot, go payton!!!

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

haha you will see very soon!!!

omgggg pleaseee moreeeee!!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

haha don't worry more will be up very soon(I hope)

Kathy
(not registered user)

Please update more!
I can't wait to see what happens :p

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Will do ASAP!

OMG!! Please update!!! I HAVE GOT TO KNOW WHO FREAKIN SAVED HER!!!! TELL ME!!!!! lol =) I think it was either Aiden or Stacey. BUT GO PAYTON!!!! :D

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

haha you will find out as soon as I post more... well not really but you will find out soon enough!

OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG UPDATE NOW PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ LOL SORRY FOR THE LONG MESSAGE PLZZZZ POST NOW LOL NOT SOON NOW!

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

I would if I could but I can't...stupid computer of mine!

really short but i love it soooo much update soon plez:]

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Will do!

arghhh who is it????
i wonnna knooow!
please update soon and tell me....IMPATIENTTTTTT!!
lol...wow wonder what happened to her??
was it aiden...ooo don't get my hopes up..lol...agrb;rsdjc b>xzab

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

haha you will see soon enough...as soon as my computer is fixed! Sorry about the wait!

Great Chap .
(:

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!!!

COME ON ALREADY!!!!! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

haha I will do soon...i'm sorry my computer messed up and I can't get on it right now...and my story is on it so more will be up as soon as my computer is fixed...that should be later on today! srry!

cantlive4evr
(not registered user)

Oops! Didn't log in..don't confuse me like that! I think that Payton saved her, but then you go and ask me why I'm so sure...GRR!!!

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

haha I was just wondering why...i'm not saying that its not him but I was just wondering why you were so sure that it was him :D haha I love confusing people!

oooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh what happen to her who saved her

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

you will see as soon as I get my computer fixed...if I get to!

NOOO Paytonn! come back!!!!!!!!!!! she woke up...your her prince!!!

+Hecate+

Posted: Oct 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Well as soon as I get out the next chapter...actually the chapter after next you will finally find out if Payton really is her prince charming :D

payton!!!!! go back to catalyn!!!! waa, u belong together!! go get ur princess u fool!!! omg, it isnt really gonna be aiden, is it?! *gasp*, the horror!!

Posted: Oct 6, 2008

Author Comment:

haha you will find out very soon...i wish I could say that it would be later today but it won't unless i choose to re-write it...my computer is still broken :(

Don't you just hate computers? lol I'm definitely hating yours right about now!!!!!! >:

Posted: Oct 6, 2008

Author Comment:

haha yeah I really really really hate them...expecially mine...but I retyped the chapter anyways on this computer!!! It may not be as good as it was before but its better than nothing :D



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