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Submitted: May 14, 2008 Reads: 57 Comments: 4 Likes: 3
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hi! orange. the story is good. correct some spellings and sentences and it'll be more readable. ;-)
Posted: May 15, 2008
Hello. This is pretty good. I hope you write more.
There are a few misspelled words in there and some of the words are wrong(If that makes any sense) that you need to rephrase.
But, other than that its really good.
Very interesting.
If you are going to make this in a novel, there is a thing in your portfolio where you may do so. And you can just add chapters as you put them up. It would be much easier. =)
Can't wait to read more.
~mandy
Posted: May 15, 2008
haha, idk y i laughed when i read it, but it was good. GL makin the rest XD Determination is best. And though Mandy up there is correctin your errors (if u asked her or not XD) i really dont mind, i understand cuz i use 2 live in South America. Anyways, cant wait 2 read the rest, and the ending of this chapter was uh...idk if to say funny? but good overall. I got some questions on it, but i guess i have 2 read to answer them, and you have to keep writing so i can find out XD. Catcha later
Posted: May 15, 2008
nice read....going for next one...
Posted: May 15, 2008
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