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My Ghost (chapter 2)

Novel By: Orange Fay
Romance


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Submitted: May 14, 2008    Reads: 57    Comments: 4    Likes: 3   


“Tell me that you’re joking, young lady and please find something to cover yourself.” He said and groaned. The woman picks the coverlet from the bed and wraps herself with it.
“I am not joking, sir. I’ve been death and you reincarnated me.”
“How did it happen?” he stepped in to the bedroom.
“I died with vengeance and the heaven or hell doesn’t receive my spirit. When I was wandering somewhere, my spirit had been sucked back into my old body-like reincarnated.” She explained and sat on the bed.
“Just like that and pooofff…You’re here?” Ken still shocked from the moment he saw her. She nodded.
“Oh no-What have I done?” he whispered. The woman came closer to him and looking at his eyes.
“Thank you again; you just do not know how much did you have help me.” She said. This girl in front of him; he thought; was a beautiful and looks young. Then, he asked,
“How old are you?”
“You mean now or when I died?” she asked bluntly.
“Of course, when you died or else you won’t look like this now.” He answered and smile.
“I am eighteen.”
“What? That young-Gosh…” he cursed slowly.
“Where do you live then, since you’re reincarnated; of course I want to know about you and send you back to your family.”
“I live here”
“Here? You mean-my apartment?” The girl nodded. He was speechless.
“You can’t send me back to my family, sir. I live with my father here, four years ago-of course. My father has passed away before me.” She looked sad and her eyes are teary when she explained. Possessed by the sympathize feeling, Ken holds her shoulders.
 
“What happen to you?”
“I’ve been murdered.”
“You hate because the murder killed you and that why both heaven and hell does not take you?” he hate himself for asking that question but words cannot be reverse. The girl shook.
“I’ve been raped to death…” she stopped and tears are glowing on her cheeks. Ken tightens his grip on her shoulders.
 
Good God, this girl is suffered and that why she does not been received.


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Comments:

hi! orange. the story is good. correct some spellings and sentences and it'll be more readable. ;-)

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx...I need to pay more attention on that spelling things because i'm so clumsy....n_n

Hello. This is pretty good. I hope you write more.
There are a few misspelled words in there and some of the words are wrong(If that makes any sense) that you need to rephrase.
But, other than that its really good.
Very interesting.
If you are going to make this in a novel, there is a thing in your portfolio where you may do so. And you can just add chapters as you put them up. It would be much easier. =)
Can't wait to read more.
~mandy

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank u...n_n

haha, idk y i laughed when i read it, but it was good. GL makin the rest XD Determination is best. And though Mandy up there is correctin your errors (if u asked her or not XD) i really dont mind, i understand cuz i use 2 live in South America. Anyways, cant wait 2 read the rest, and the ending of this chapter was uh...idk if to say funny? but good overall. I got some questions on it, but i guess i have 2 read to answer them, and you have to keep writing so i can find out XD. Catcha later

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx...n_n

nice read....going for next one...

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx..n_n



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