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The Forbidden Love

Novel By: prepPRINCESS
Romance


Forbidden Love describes the forbidden love between a vampire and a human. Fourteen-year-old Jasmine has everything a teenage girl wants: a perfect family, lots of friends, and awesome grades. There's only one thing missing: a boyfriend. But when she meets the mysterious and cute Jordan, everything changes. She gets adventure, excitement, and a boyfriend, but Jordan has a dark secret to hide. Jasmine is determined to find out what it is, but will his secret cost her her life? Forbidden Love is filled with action, excitement, and romance that will keep you reading until the last page. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Jul 16, 2008    Reads: 574    Comments: 16    Likes: 7   


Chapter 2

POV: Jasmine

Two weeks had passed and still no notice from Jordan. I guess he probably already has a girlfriend by now. I would try to talk to him, but lose my courage right when he came to his locker. I could never bring myself to do it. Will he ever notice me? But on Tuesday of the 3rd week of school, everything changed. I was at my locker getting my books for 4th period when all of sudden, Jordan, of all people, appears right next to me, out of nowhere.

“Hey, I’m Jordan,” he said, surprising me. Blushing, I said,

“I’m Jasmine.” He didn’t say anything else for a minute as if pondering over what he should say next, then said charmingly,

“Can I walk you to your next class?”

“Sure”, I said, and he did. He was so sweet! He was super strong, he carried my books along with his own. He even opened the door for me. We took our seats as the bell rang, and I smiled at him as he took the closest available seat to mine. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

At lunch, my friends were buzzing over my conversation and walk to class with Jordan.

"We saw you talking to that new guy, ummm… what’s his name?” Natalie asked. I blushed and said shyly,

“It’s Jordan.”

“So, are you guys gonna go out?” Maria, the curious and sometimes really nosy girl in our group, asked. Sarah, the girl in our group who never really said much but when she did talk was awesome, began to take interest in our conversation.

“I don’t know, maybe,” I said as I still blushed and started eating. Just then, Amy, the sporty and athletic girl in our group, said,

“What do you mean, you ’don’t know’? You need to stop waiting around and go after him!” I blushed and just continued to eat. When I was almost done, Jordan walked by on his way to dump his tray.

“Hi, Jasmine.”

“Hi.”
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The rest of the day dragged on, and Jordan appeared out of nowhere again as I put my books up in my locker, getting ready to go home.

“Can I walk you home?” he asked sweetly.

“Sure”, I said, the only words I could think of because I was so shy. He walked me home, and then I went up to my room, daydreaming about him for the rest of the day and thinking that I had found my perfect guy already.
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After 2 whole weeks of procrastination of talking to her, I finally went for it. On Tuesday, I thought it over 1st, knowing that being near me could put her in harm’s way. I liked her, though, so, being blinded by love, I walked over to her before 4th period and introduced myself. I even walked her to class, looking at her neck the whole way, feeling my fangs come out, closing my mouth so she wouldn’t notice. I decided quickly in my head that I would get to know her, become friends, maybe even her boyfriend, and then, when we were alone, I’d feed off of her, but then I realized that I might kill her, and life would be unbearable if I did. I wondered how she would react if I told her about what I really was as I opened the door for her to our next class and smiled, keeping my mouth shut still. Taking a seat in the last row in the back of the room, I decided while the teacher was droning on with today’s lesson that I would tell her what I was when we became closer friends. After that, I couldn’t help but look at her neck, hungry, wanting to sink my teeth into that beautiful, flawless skin and taste the delicious blood. Poor thing, she was sitting right next to me, so it probably was a good thing that she never looked at me or I would’ve scared her because my mouth was open and my fangs were out, and I was licking my lips as my eyes turned a dark, almost black shade. I had to get out of there soon or I’d lose control of my self and bite her. Thankfully, right when I was about to lose it, the bell rang. Saved by the bell, how cliché, I thought to myself as I ran out the door as fast as possible, using some of my vampire abilities. I realized that it wasn’t good for us to be near each other, but yet I couldn’t help but really like her. I couldn’t even help but like her, even though the smell of her blood tempted me. I was so blinded by love, even though it was dangerous. I even walked her home after school, and we talked and got to know each other. After I left her at her house, I used my super fast vampire speed to race home, telling Danny that I was walking home. I thought about her the rest of the night, and decided that tomorrow, I’d ask her out on a date, then eventually ask her to be my girlfriend. I made up my mind. Tomorrow, after our date, I’d tell her the truth about what I am.

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POV: Jordan


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Comments:

Omg..
Comment Me When You Post Another Chapter!

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Will do, I'll update you when I post Chapter 3, which will probably be today or tomorrow.

I like how you posted his view of the story! Interesting! (:

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked the different points of view.

I know we havent talked about this chapter yet, but another thing that you should do is decide what tense you're going to write in. Here's a little English Lesson for you:)

Presesnt: It's happening now. You use things like: I say. We walk. They laugh.

Past (the easiest in my book): Happened yesterday, or somewhere in the past. You use things like: I said. We walked. They laughed.

Future (rarely used): Happens in the future. You use things like: I would say. We will walk. They are going to laugh.

I hope that's a little clearer, and I hope it helps. Your story isnt that bad, but sometimes you use the wrong tense.

Happy writing and good luck!

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for commenting!

he's sound tormented... short but still i enjoyed this:) hope he can control himself if he's going to ask her to become his girlfriend. or he's gonna turn her??? keep me posted xD

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok, I will keep you posted.

i agree with ixluvx2xwritex2 about the tense.
but overall it was pretty good
I liked it
:]

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Wow. That's intense. I wonder how she will react! *Reads More*

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading and commenting!

Oh, this sounds interesting. cool!

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you like it!♥

Ha, loved it as always!
Now, not to be rude or anything, but have you ever read Twilight? I hate to say it, but this story reminds me somewhat strongly of it.
And when Jordan says "saved by the bell, how cliche", well, those are Edwards exact words in the first chapter of Midnight Sun.
Sorry to accuse, i'm just curious.

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

No, actually, I haven't, but I do know a good bit about it, but after the next few of chapters it's nothing like it, I promise!♥

this chapter is good! the guy seems super intense, i like how you did his point of view too!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I wanted to tell his side of the story as well, so I decided to. The whole book is a switch between their different POVs.

I just really don't understand this. If he can't resist her blood in class, why would he walk her home? You did the same thing as you did in the first chapter. You skipped through everything, when really you could put more of a story in there. If you wrote it short because you didn't have enough time to make it longer, then wait to write it. I must say, it is natural for a vampire to feel incredible blood lust around a good tasting human, but at the part where he was explaining how he felt in the classroom sounded a tad like Edward in Midnight Sun. I am not trying to judge your story or relate it in any way to Twilight, but the whole thing with "she had the best smelling blood I'd ever smelled in a human" kind of thing made it sound a lot like it. But I'm still willing to read on and see the plot, because its a good story. :D

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading!♥

This was really fast but good. You need to make the days longer and add more detail in their lives. Make your chapters longer too but i shouldn't talk cause some of my writing is short too. It also doesn't really make sense that he would walk her home i mean i get that he likes her but if he can't stand her blood he shouldn't do that. But I'm off to read the next chapter cause i love any book with vampires just try and work on those things.:)

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading and commenting!

mandy
(not registered user)

don't stop writing it's so good!

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

I won't, I promise! Keep on reading, I hope u like it!♥

twilightish...and thats y its so addicting!!! off to read more.

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you liked it!

well, i for one, dont think the rest of the story has any resemblance to twilight series XD luv ya!

Posted: Aug 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Luv ya too, girl! Thanks for commenting!♥

YAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! he's so cute! tehee, off to the next chapter I GO!!! :D

Posted: Oct 9, 2008

Author Comment:

He is cute, I wish Jordan was real and he was mine(LOL, I know I'm crazy sometimes...)! Go, go, go!!! Hope you like the next chapter!♥

ohhhhhh!!! I like it! lol.

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL, glad you do, girl!♥



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