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The Forbidden Love

Novel By: prepPRINCESS
Romance


Forbidden Love describes the forbidden love between a vampire and a human. Fourteen-year-old Jasmine has everything a teenage girl wants: a perfect family, lots of friends, and awesome grades. There's only one thing missing: a boyfriend. But when she meets the mysterious and cute Jordan, everything changes. She gets adventure, excitement, and a boyfriend, but Jordan has a dark secret to hide. Jasmine is determined to find out what it is, but will his secret cost her her life? Forbidden Love is filled with action, excitement, and romance that will keep you reading until the last page. View table of contents...

Chapters:

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30

Submitted: Aug 8, 2008    Reads: 209    Comments: 10    Likes: 5   


 

Chapter 8

POV: Jasmine

Wow, Jordan lives in a mansion???!!!!! I thought to myself as I followed the Corvette into the humongous driveway of a four-story mansion. I couldn’t believe that he never told me! But then I realized that he probably didn’t want me to like him for his money. But nobody around here is rich, so there must be something special about Jordan, otherwise he wouldn’t have this humongous house. As soon as the Corvette came to a stop at the end of the driveway, I hid in some bushes so I wouldn’t get caught. I watched as Jordan and Danny walked up to the door, rang the doorbell, and walked in as a servant answered it. I decided that the only way I would get in undetected was by sneaking in, so I sneaked around back. There was a backdoor which probably led to the kitchen, since I could smell all kinds of good food as I walked towards the door. I quickly made a plan: when one of the servants comes out, I’ll sneak in. About 10 minutes later, a young servant girl walked out, dumping the scraps out. I ran to the door and gently opened it. I was in a vast kitchen, but everyone in it had their backs turned tending to food. So I sneaked by and slipped through the door that led out to the inside of the house. It was beautiful, but since I was on a mission I didn’t take time to take in the scenery. I saw a staircase and raced up it. When I reached the top, I saw Jordan walking down the hall, his back turned. I followed him down the long hall past many doors until he finally stopped at one. He opened it, revealing a vast library and a man in a chair who looked a lot like Jordan, presumably his father. They started talking, so I got closer to the door to listen in.

“Son, a lot of eligible women are coming tomorrow for you to choose one to be your queen,” I heard a voice, probably his father, say.

“Dad, I don’t want to marry anybody!” Jordan shouted.

“Son, you will choose one, because you have to, you’re going to take the throne of the vampire kingdom soon and need to have a vampire queen!” his dad shouted back. I gasped really loud. Jordan’s a vampire prince???!!!!!! I thought to myself, horrified that he would lie to me. Then I realized since they’re vampires, they probably heard me, so I became silent. The voices had stopped, obviously trying to figure out where the noise had come from.

“Did you hear that?” Jordan whispered, and then he flung open the door to the library, revealing me!

POV: Jordan

I gasped with horror when I opened the door, revealing Jasmine. She started to run down the hallway and I called to my dad,

“I’ll be right back, Dad!” I used my super fast vampire abilities to catch up with her immediately, grabbing her by the wrist. She started to cry, throwing her arms around my waist. She cried,

“Oh, Jordan, I’m so sorry, but I just wanted to know why you had acted so strangely, so I followed you home, and then I followed you and listened in to your conversation. Why didn’t you tell me you were a prince?” At this point her tears stopped as she looked up in my eyes.

“Because you’re a human, and I wanted to keep you safe from danger, and being the prince of vampires means you have enemies and I didn’t want them to hurt you, so I thought it was best if we stayed apart,” I said.

“But now you’re going to marry some vampire girl and leave me behind!” she cried out.

“No, I wasn’t,” I responded quickly.

“But you have to, so, if you want to be with me, then turn me, and I’ll be your vampire queen, I really want to-” She stopped talking and looked down the hall in horror. I saw my father standing 5 feet away, looking at us, especially at Jasmine, with an evil glare in his eyes.


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Comments:

i love this its so kool, and intense i just LOVE it!

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! I'm glad you ♥ it, though I already knew that you would.♥

this one is good!

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!♥

YAY!!! I ♥ed it! When ever I post...I'm going to use the ♥! Yay!
I would love it if u checked out my stuff sometime! Thanks!
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JFM98

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll check out your stuff whenever I can. Awesome! YAY! Special ♥s everytime you comment! LOL! I'm glad you ♥ed it!

O.o OOOOOooohhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! DRAMA!!!!!! =D MORE PLEASE! +Hecate+

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

I will post ASAP. I'm glad you really like it!♥

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Lol
Update Soon

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

Author Comment:

I will most likely update tomorrow, and I'm glad you're so excited about it! ♥

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Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Keep on reading! Hope you enjoy!

ok. i created an account just so i could comment on this story cos i feel so strongly about it. I am a massive fan of twilight and reading this it made me really mad, you have basically written a shortened version of twilight and changed a few names! i mean come on i know all about inspiration and stuff but u've just completely lifted the story. i dont know if ur claiming it as ur own 'creation' if ur not then ok thts great but if u r then i feel very sorry for u. stephenie meyer should get the credit for this story. it may be written in a different context but (i would say outline but the whole body of the story is more appropriate) is exactly the same.
u may think im some kind of pompous idiot but i can assure u im not. I can understand writing stories based on twilight for ur own pleasure, but these are read in the comfort of ur Twilight poster covered bedroom not posted on the internet!!!
Personally i think its an insult to even put this story under ur own name.
im sorry if you've taken offence to anything ive said.

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

I haven't even read Twilight for Pete's sake! I just wrote this story for fun and if it sounds like Twilight, well maybe it does, but since I've never read it, I guess that means something else. You need to ask before you start accusing people of stuff that they didn't do. Yeah, I do know some things about twilight, but my plot is different if you read on, and I'm thinking about writing a sequel, and the plot has nothing to do with Twilight whatsoever. You seriously need to think before you start shootin off your mouth at other people when you don't even know the back story. If you're gonna insult me, at least do it with some grounds of not destroying everything I worked on. You can critique but outright calling my story an insult, well, I personally take that as a very vicious and mean comment. You seriously need to learn the saying: Think before you act!

i have to say im very sorry, i probably should hav done more backgraound research before i reacted so rashly. if you can see things from my point of view u might understand a little bit but tht doesnt make wht i said and less uncalled for. ur story seemed so unrealisticly like twilight i just went bezerk, i happen to be an obbsessive and as u can imagine get very protective over it :S.
but if, as u say, u have not read twilight then i must commend u on ur story because it is really good.
now i feel like a right prat if tht makes you feel any better lol.
but u and i can learn something from this: me, tht i need to control my mouth. and i think maybe the beginning of ur story sounds alot like twilight, which is not necessarily a bad thing but people can take it the wrong way.
so yh i hope you accept my apology and gd luck with ur writing :)

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, and I forgive you. I honestly have never read the book, but am probably going to. Thank you for the support, I'll do my best with my writing.♥

:) the twilight saga are THE best books ever!!!!!!!
they're so brilliant, the film is coming out soon too. and if you ever want a role model i would use stephenie meyer because ur style is quite alike and cos shes just amazing lol!

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, that's what lots of my friends have told me, so I've just started to read the 1st book(btw: my book was written b4 started reading it). It's pretty awesome so far~I'm on Chapter 12. I know about the film, and can't wait to see it! LOL! Yeah, she is pretty amazing!

omg!!! lol, here i go again.

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL!♥



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