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Novel By: xXBioChemXx
Romance


Raiden, a thousand+ year vampire, thinks he will never love again. Then he meets the first vampire, Sam, who was also traumatized at the loss of her love. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Feb 19, 2008    Reads: 30    Comments: 2    Likes: 0   


I hopped into my black ferrari and drove to my club. As I got out I could smell something that didn't belong, faint but there. Werewolf, fallen angel, and surprisingly, dragon . Used to supers underestimating me because of my young age, I walked in as if I was unaware . I could hear them trying to sneak up on me in their human forms . When they were directly behind me I said, "If you wanted to talk, you could have just asked."

 

"How the fuck did you know we were here?!" the were yelled.

The angel exclaimed, "Yeah, dude! What the hell!?"

 

The dragon stood calmly to the side, waiting silently.

 

"I told you dumb-shits that he would know you were there. But no, you fucktards 'ad to do it. Tryin' to be badasses. Even with 'im only being ten he still could've 'eard you. You should have 'ad me pick someone younger, maybe two or three centuries." the dragon repremanded in an Irish accent while walking toward me. "I'm terribly sorry for the disturbance. I'm Mick McAmmer."

 

"And your a dragon," I said nonchalantly.

 

" 'Ow did you know that?" Mick asked.

 

"A couple reasons. I could smell it and I felt it in your minds."

 

"Oh shit, your Raiden Ansebald!! You fucked-up peices of shit!!! You 'ad me feel 'is age but didn't tell me who 'e was!! You 'ad to pick the strongest vamp this side of the universe, maybe the whole universe!!!!! Do you realise the things 'e could 'ave done to us!? 'E could 'ave killed all of us in the second it took 'im to get out of the car and we still would've 'ad time to wonder why we 'ad stopped breathing for some odd reason!! Shit! Shit! Shit! Shit! Shit! Please don't kill me!! I'll do wha'ever you want."

 

"It's okay, I'm not gonna kill you. Do you all need jobs? 'Cuz I could use some new people in my club here. I need some new blood in there and a responsible older super to watch for stuff that might happen with undesirables. A security position, you could say."

 

"You would trust us that much?"

 

"As you said, I can kill you in less than a second so why would you do anything wrong?"


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I really like this. Keep on going, because it's a great start. I'd like to know when you put up another chapter, so leave me a message on my page, or you dont have to. I just really like this idea. Thanks for posting on Booksie!

Posted: Feb 28, 2008

Author Comment:

It takes me a little while to get the chapters done but I do so dont worry

wow. language, language. 'McAmmer'? 'Ansebald'? What the hell?! no fense but those names do not sound right. and you should know that. but it's good so far. keep writing.:)

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

The first name is Irish and the second is derived from German last names. I did some research and those were the best from what I saw. Criticism is all well and good when constructive and polite, but it is rude to assume that everyones opinions are the same as yours. I happen to like the names and so do numerous others that have read my work. I thank you for reading and hope you heed my advise.



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