I hate it when we’re stuck
In the tunnel, so long.
It always seems like
Theres no light all.
***
But this time babe,
I wont let go.
I’ll fight for us,
We wont be trapped anymore.
***
The misty fog
And shadows dark,
Wont help to
Set us appart.
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Submitted: Aug 15, 2008 Reads: 111 Comments: 22 Likes: 8
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I think this is one of your bests too. Did you write it with someone in mind? Keep fighting the darkness. =)
~Mandy
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
DAMN! one of ur best yet! also thanks for ur comment on my letter. xD seriously great poem!
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
wow...
its really sweet...
and really cute too
hahahhahahah
i loved it ....
how you come up with something like that if you dont have anyone in mind???
lol
i like this part the most..
"But this time babe,
I wont let go.
I’ll fight for us,"
cheers..
.x
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
man this is a really good poem:] i love it. did you think of the person you where in love with or have a crush on when you wrote this?? keep up the good work
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
Seriously, I know everyone has already said this is one of your best yet, and that's why it's my turn to scream, "Alek, THIS IS ONE OF YOUR BEST!" Wonderful job, it was beautiful and very sweet. I love the peacful emotion that you filled this poem with, very visualizing. Great work! =)
~Maple
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
So how bout i chime right on on with the rest of them and tell you; THIS IS YOUR BEST WORK! lol this really is good. Its nice to know there are some guys out there willing to fight for something thats not food. :D Awesome job.
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
Did I mention its metaphoric? lol
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
Hmm. I think you did. (Mention it's metaphoric) LOL.
Awesome job. Yeah you've alrady heard that's your best....Whatever. I'm SAYING something ELSE. I hate following anyone.
It's the bestest poem in your profilo. (Ha take that! Bestest!) I am aware that that's not a word.....
BESTEST!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
Awesome!!! It sounds really great man!
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
awesomness =]
sweet and cute =D
"The misty fog
And shadows dark,
Wont help to
Set us appart."
the best stanza :D
great work keep 'em coming ^^
Posted: Aug 17, 2008
Raw power, packed with an amazing punch. Rock on man!
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
hunterkyrie
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How sweet!
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
the ending was very powerful! i like this one!
Posted: Aug 19, 2008
Awww,this is so great.And touchy.Like it!
:)
Posted: Aug 19, 2008
I enjoyed that. It was short and sweet. It had the tone of determination, like a struggling relationship, or an issue that causes two lovers to distance themselves from eachother needlessly. In the end, they fight to stay together, to overcome the strife, together. Very sweet. I liked it alot. Keep going!
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
The first stanza is excellent, perhaps because like most I have been in the tunnel myself many times.
I don't comment on poetry much as you have probably realised but I like this. I can feel the determination in your writing and like that you made me feel it.
Good one.
Posted: Aug 21, 2008
Hey Alek :) This poem has a very lyrical quality to it that I like very much. When you use the word "babe" in a poem, wow that makes it great right there! I really liked it and now, I'm going to look at your other stuff. Take care Alek, Regan
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
I really enjoyed this one. And I too think that this is your best so far!!!XD
Short, but a lovely poem!
good job!^_^
Take care.
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
Awsome, I like this poem because people now a days have given up fighting for what they love, they let defeat slide over them. I love what you've written here. Keep on fighting and writing!
- Wandy!
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
You just put a smile on my face.
Thanks for that :)
Posted: Aug 29, 2008
ALL I CAN ADD is THAT - THE GIRL IS SPECIAL AND LUCKY Too to have YOU IN HER LIFE....
A PERSON WHO IS READY TO DO ANYTHING FOR HER ....
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
I like this spirit. Dont ever give up.
Posted: Oct 2, 2008
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