My Carnations Are Not Roses

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Poem By: Alice Oiseau
Romance

Tags: love, romance, carnations, roses, daffodils, different, unique, dream, wish, hope, prince, angel

MAmber Conrad's Challenge. She provided a title for a poem and you had to write the poem with the given amount of lines.
Title given: My Carnations Are Not Roses (I really liked this title by the way)
Requirement: 8 stanzas or 36 lines
It's the 36 lines - and it came out exactly at 36 lines when I wrote it and I wasn't even counting. Not bad, eh?

All right. Just a side note - I took a general meaning from the title that applies to the poem. My Carnations Are Not Roses - which to me makes me think, okay I'm not your classic cliche girl with roses (which I'm not, so that worked out well haha). So the poem focuses partially on that theme of being *different*. But since I was in the mood for a love poem, I combined the general message with romance.

I wrote this completely in the moment. It just came to me and I had to start writing. So it may not be spectacular, but I personally like it.

Enjoy ^^ View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 6, 2008 Reads: 899 Comments: 68 Likes: 34

My Carnations Are Not Roses

By: Alice Oiseau

I've never felt so sure,

Never thought I'd find a Prince like you,

Never a love so true.

You took me in your arms,

Protected me from harm.

It was there you saw me,

Saw what others don't see,

A weaker side hidden behind a shell,

My shell shattered when I fell...

But you caught me,

And now you know me so well.

I'm not a classic,

In a sense I'm not traditional,

I'm not perfect,

But you don't look away.

I am a snowflake,

I am give and take,

I am a rainbow,

But typical - no.

My heart needs your love,

My hands long to be held in yours,

My body wishes to be in your arms,

My eyes will gaze into yours.

My love, this is a new dance,

This is romance.

Listen to my heartbeat,

Hear it in the heat

of this fiery love.

Darling lets fly together,

Spread our wings forever.

I'm not the prettiest flower,

Yet in your embraces I'm showered.

My carnations are not roses-

But daffodils they are,

And as you said, Iwill look to the stars to know you're not far.

My Prince, hear me... because I'm so in love with you.

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Comments:

LeAnne

This is very sweet and well written!!
i liked it!

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!

Hugs and kisses

Ha I like it! My favorite stanza is the third stanza:

It was there you saw me,
Saw what others don't see,
A weaker side hidden behind a shell,
My shell shattered when I fell...

It's really sweet and has a sort of "10 Things I Hate About You" feel to it. Have you watched that movie? It's not spectacular but it's worth a watch. Anyway, I really like what you did with your title, I would have thought it was impossible, but you just proved it wrong!! Go you!!!

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

I've heard of the movie but I haven't seen it. I want to! Hm. Now I'll have to rent it!
Eeeeps! I like that stanza too :) Its one of my favorites in the poem ^^
Really? Haha it popped into my head immediately that I wanted to do something with not-your-typical-girl / romance poem. Haha, well thank you hugs and kisses! ^^

Pratibha

this is what i like about true emotions....flawless....and true...and just love ....nothing else.....

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

absolutely :) true emotions are perfection, especially love
thanks pratibha!!

jadey oneil

The flow of emotion was smooth. I rode in it. You didn't force words in each line. I love it! :-)

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! i'm so glad to hear that it was smooth! i thought so too ^^
thanks jadey :)

Adalia Ainsley

Very, very good! I loved how you explained that true love isn't the perfect model of a girl and the perfect model of a guy... every couple is unique in their own special way =) It shows that even when you don't feel good about yourself, your guy will always love you no matter what...sighh...jk lol. Anyways, I loved this! Keep it up!

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

lol haha thank you! see, thats the beauty of true love - its unconditional love :)
thank you for reading adalia! ^^

xxemoxbfsxx

you're right, i really did like it. it's like a few of my poems. a very reltable feeling. great job.

Lydia_xxxx

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! i'm glad you liked it. i thought you would ^^

mystory

This was such a sweet and romantic poem. I really liked it. All of your poems flow so well, you make me jealous! Loved it, great job. ^^

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha, don't be jealous! you are a talented writer yourself my friend :)
thank you muchly! romantic is what i was aiming for ^^

hiralarious

I really liked this :o
And idk why..but I liked the star things a lot too...-stares at them- o.o

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha thanks!
hm. i just realized that your name isnt spelled 'hilarious' its spelled 'hiRalarious" hahahaha
anywhoooo
thank you for the kind comment ^^

xXcoldXheartedXworldXx

.........this is so beautiful! and i totally know what the daffodil reference is for. the poem made sense to me cuz of that. i really loved it.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you so much!
you're so sweet!
take care :)

XBrokenHeartedX

WOW. I'm completely speechless! God why do you do so well on challenges??? I got Lionhearts challenge like a week and a half ago and I'm still working on it!!! Ha Ha. Alice this was so well written. The romance went really great with the meaning. I especially loved:

I'm not the prettiest flower,

Yet in your embraces I'm showered.

That was really beautiful. Describing how your just a natural flower, some beauty, but many flaws, but then being held in the arms of a true love, you become even more beautiful. Metaphor? Ha Ha, I'm messed up with metaphors and similies. But this was absolutely spectacular (there it goes again!). And the rhyme scheme! Oh god the rhyme scheme was so fabulous, it flowed along so nicely without any bumps.

I am a snowflake,

I am give and take,

I am a rainbow,

But typical - no.

Though it may have been just me (I don't get ANYTHING) but in this stanza the rhyme scheme seemed a bit forced. When I was reading it I didn't seem to understand why you were rhyming it with those things, so it seemed just a bit unbalanced. It didn't set of the rest of the poem though, which is good. Ha Ha, but other than that one thing it was really great Alice! I absolutely loved it, and can't wait until you post more poetry! :D

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha yeah i was trying to rhyme there -_- i always like to have some rhyme in my poems but i also like to go a few lines without rhyming. and that one stanza was rather forced with the rhyme. ugh. but what i was trying to get across was that i'm unique. every snowflake is completely different (believe it or not!) and a rainbow is just colorful like my personality - colorful/ well rounded personality. thats what i was trying to get across in that stanza. but the rhyming in it, i will admit was disasterous! lol

hahaha i dont know why i do so well on challenges. maybe its being i'm being stretched to do different things than normal so it opens new doors... and i guess i'm good at opening new doors lol. but thank you! the compliment was quite flattering ^^
haha and yes, you hit the nail on the head there with that specific metaphor of the flower :)
yay for spectacular! haha XD
i may post another poem soon... i'm kinda in a poetry mood lately. hmm. so yeah... expect more! :D
thank you SOOO much zoe!!!

Wayward Troubadour

Ooh, nice to see a love poem! Seems like a lot of the ones I've read lately have been sad/angry. I really like the honesty of the language in this piece; right up my alley! Good work, Ms. Birdy

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

sad/angry poems can get rather depressing after a while, so i'm glad my love poem brightened the mood ^^
thank you wayward troubadour! :)

hiralarious

Lol, it's kinda funny when people think it's 'hilarious' xD. Kinda. Sorta....Not really xDD.
and what broken hearted said.
why do you do so well of challenges?! :o

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

lol well i thought it was funny b/c its like an optical illusion to the eye! i fell for it -_- hahahaha!

*blushes* i'm sorry! i can't help it! lol i don't know why! XD

DarkFairy8907

Aww it was so nice. It makes me think of all the thoughts that were going through my mind before I asked my boyfriend out. How did you know!? xD lol.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

lol aww thats cute ^^
glad you liked it darkfairy
take care :)

StrictlyVee

I thought your poem rocked.. I'm not a roses kind of woman either. As a matter of fact, my favorite flower is the carnation. Thank you for inviting me to view your poem.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you vee! oo really, carnations? they are very beautiful indeed!
thanks for commenting ^^

whitehart

Loved this piece. As you did in all the other challenges, you knocked this one......and it was soooo romantic. Am a sucker for all romantics. Nice work!

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

eeps! thank you muchly ^^ i'm so happy that it turned out "sooo romantic" haha b/c thats exactly what i wanted ^^
thank you deb!!

indiefreak

So sweet... and she does sounds very happy...wish i'd feel what she feels. Great poem:)

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

aw, you'll find your perfect someone ^^ i believe in happily ever afters :)
thanks indiefreak! have a lovely day ^^

Susan Hartline Fouts

I loved the poem. It was so moving to me.You handled the challenge well.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! glad to hear it!

gerabel

" I am a snowflake"... doesn't that just about sum it up perfectly! Very endearing and with a simplicity that only real love can project. A wonderful challenge piece that stands lovingly on its own.....Jerry

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks jerry! i thought the comparison to a snowflake would be nice ^^ i was hoping the reader would catch that and know the EVERY snowflake is different, original, unique - like me! thank you so much! ^^

Classy Peach

Stands lovingly as Jerry said, sorta like Alice.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you peach :)
have a wonderful day ^^

BalletChick

This poem was amazing! Out of all the poems i ever read, this was the best. It flowed so smoothly, I can't just pick one stanza it was so great!

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

oh my goodness, you're too kind!
hahaha, thank you so much hon! you're so sweet :)
glad to hear that you liked it so much ^^ and the best, eh? haha, thank you!! take care ^^

ddrandall

Love what you have done with this... the raw emotion displayed with such tenderness... bravo for your efforts!... I think it is time for me to accept the challenge myself... write on my friend!

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

ah yes, do accept the challenge ^^
thank you ddrandall :)

air

so beautifully, gracefully, romantic! ^_^
well done Alice!!!! everyone has given such nice comments ^_^
take care ~katie

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

aw, thanks katie!
you take care too ^^ and have a great day!

Wandiola

ooooooooooooooh! wonderful!!! you and punishmet are like PROFESIONALS!!! GOSH!!!!!! well done, your poems always leave me thinking, im actually shaking!!! aaaaah!

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

oh my goodness! shaking? hahaha! WOW! i think thats a new reaction i've got from a reader. i've had laughs and tears and many more, lol, but shaking? well... i guess thats a good sign for me as a writer! haha XD
aw how sweet of you ^^ ha, but i'm no professional (though punishment could pass for one any day)
haha
thanks soooo much wandiola!

Ghiradelli Girl

Ohhh! Sooooo beautiful!!!!!! This was so sweet and... and... so so heart-warming. I don't know what to say... I really loved it, though! I liked the comparison-- I liked that even though she isn't the prettiest the guy still likes her for who she is-- and it's almost like a story you weaved into the lines! Seriously!

Lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

XD thanks ghiradelli girl!!
yes, she may not be the prettiest but with unconditional love, he loves her no matter what - that my dear is true love ^^ and thats what i wanted to write about. b/c true love is a beautiful thing :)
thank you so much!
take care ^^

pocorox

The poem IS really good

You are an amazing writer

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

why, thank you! :D

Threwen Greenleaf

Ahhh!!!! I LOVE it!
You are amazing and you make me wish I could write poetry.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

"at the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet"
you'll be able to write beautiful poetry thats breathtaking one day my friend :)
thank you sooo much!!

AngelaSteele

YAY!! I liked it. :) I love the rhymes by the way. You never fail to astound me Alice, you never do. This was incredible beyond words. I am speechless... for now. I know I'll find something to say later. ( I always do). Keep up the amazing work! :)

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

yay! thanks! glad you liked it ^^
i thought the rhyme scheme was pretty good except for a certain stanza that brokenhearted pointed out.
speechless? well then, i look forward to what you have to say later ^^
thanks angela!
take care :)

invisiblexme

awww how sweet. this is a really great poem. =)

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you :)

Punishment

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Punishment!!! *big hug* :)

suzanne capleton

It's so sweet and well-written, alice... i LOVE it. :D

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you suzanne!! :)

MAmberConrad

I totally got chills up my spine!!

The reason I gave you this title is this: My high school boyfriend found out early on never to give me roses or diamonds. I can't stand either. I want fresh-picked flowers and something more practical than jewelry... That's just me. Most boyfriends never learned this trick about me, for some reason. My current boyfriend will hand-pick flowers for me, has bought me pearls, and enjoys the time we spend together...

Anyway, my favorite part is so hard to decide, because the whole poem is so honest about love, true love. "I am a snowflake, I am give and take, I am a rainbow,
But typical - no."

You took the bull by the horns, asked for a challenge and came up with this absolute exquisite poem.

Very very awesome job.

MA

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you MA! i'm so glad to hear that i met the challenge well :) haha, wow and chills up your spine? i'm honored that you picked this title for me. i really loved it and it looks like i picked the perfect theme out of it b/c your story behind the title suits the theme perfectly. and wow - i'm just so glad that you enjoyed it so much!
thank you for the challenge!
it was a lot of fun. i enjoyed it so much! and i really love the poem that i wound up writing.
once again - thanks MA!

an0nym0us

this poem is soooooooo SWEet!!!
dunno wat to say...
i just loved it!!!
...
cant w8 2 read ur next 1

=D

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

eeps thank you! haha glad you liked it :) i'll be sure to keep you posted with my poetry ^^

AngelofTheNight

This poem was awesome! Very sweet and beautiful, it had alot of feeling into it, I love the imagery you used and.. just wow. There's nothing left to say as everyone else has already said it, but I give it 5 stars. I loved it. Keep up the good work ! ^_^

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thanks ^^ haha yes, a lot has been said. but i still appreciate the comment :)
thank you muchly angelofthenight!
(i like that pen name by the way - haha)
take care!

Kougaiji

I really liked it. I did an assinment like this and I'm fixin' to post it

Why don't you check it out?

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! sure i'd love to check it out :)
thanks for reading and commenting ^^

stephhlebreton

okay, first of all, I'd like to say I'm sorry for not being able to read right away, I was gone on a trip so yeah...and secondly, WOW ALICE! that was a really sweet poem, it truly touched me. even the picture at the beggining was adorable, I felt like saying "awwww" throughout the whole thing. lol, I really enjoyed this, and I'll get to your other work as soon as I can, right now I gotta go to work:( lol. This was really great though!
Steph(:

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha its quite all right steph! i read your news and i saw that you would be out of town so i figured it would be a while. but i'm happy you found time when you returned ^^
thank you for the sweet comment!! haha, i think "awwww" sums up the whole thing! lol
oo work :( yuck! haha
alrighty, well take care ma belle ^^

matthew smith

First I just want to say sorry for taking a while to read, I’ve been away from booksie for a few days and wow, 360 odd reads!! I think you’ve inspired the whole site. I average about 10 so I’m in awe. Well a love poem indeed! Yes a very beautiful piece of writing which also shows a fragile side to you for you say:

“A weaker side hidden behind a shell
my shell shattered when I fell”

These lines also remind me of another poem you wrote. Beautiful lines which show the depth of a poet. And then love takes you in his arms and so you feel protected and strong. Yes a beautiful portrayal of love. I like how you offer the image of imperfection but then show how love accepts us with all our little faults. Ok so you say your not the typical kind of girl but I’m wondering why your carnations are daffodils? Not that I have anything against daffodils, but their summer is so short and they soon find decay:

“Whose fleeting seconds fade like
Our years run.”

Hope this short but intense flowering is not an image of your love? Even so, it’s a beautiful love poem which will inspire many of its readers.!!

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

no worries ^^ its all good.
hahahaha yes! 360 reads! yesterday it was only at 70!!! and then i woke up and it jumped to like 300!!!!!! i was like oh my goodness! hahaha XD
ha, the life span of daffodils aren't the image of my life. i chose daffodils for a simple reason: they are my favorite flower ^^ there is no complicated-in-depth reason ^^
thank you matthew! i've been looking forward to what you have to say about this poem!
take care ^^

Ashleigh Butcher

ah, yes. Wonderful as ever, alice. it's very heartfelt, and of course very touching- particularly to me at this time. I truly love it; esp. the title (whether or not you came up with it). Lovely work.

Much love
Ash

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

aww well i'm glad that it was a touching poem to you ^^ all i wish is that my poetry touch the world :)
i love the title too! i'm so happy that MA picked that title for me to write about ^^
thank you so much ash!

tinker

this is so so so so so beautiful!!! i LOVE this poem!!! wow! i really like stanza seven!! your emotion in this poem is so extraordinary!! very good poem! you deserve the number one spot!! and you are my inspiration !*

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

awww, thank you!! haha well, i'm so happy you look to me as an inspiration. that in it self makes me "so so so so so" happy ;)
hahaha
alrighty. well thank you muchly! stanza 7, hm i belive thats the one about hands in yours, eyes gazing, etc..
yes, thats a good stanza ^^ i like that one as well
thanks tinker ^^

NocturnalMuse

awww, omg Alice! It's beautiful. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to read it. I kind of haven't really bee here the last couple of days. Well, away from the computer. Lots of stuff going on. I'll tell you later.
Great job on this! I'm not really sure which line or stanza was my favorite. I liked all of them. It beautiful and really well written. And flowed really well.
Keep it up!
*~mandy~*

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe thank you mandy!
aw, its okay. theres no rush to read it lol its fine really :)
i'm glad you liked it!!
thank you for the sweet comment hon!
take care ^^

SomewhereOverTheRainbow

0mg your right i loved it!!great writing!! i thought this was really cute and superb and i just loved it what more can i say!!keep it up xD___x

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

by the way - i absolutely love your pen name. i've been meaning to tell you that lol
hahaha! well thank you so much! i'm glad you loved it
XD
thanks again and have a great day ^^

ashen

Wow. That was so beautiful! It was so sweet ^^ Great job, and keep writing! :D

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

haha thank you!
i'll always keep writing :D
take care ashen ^^

Anna Therese

I thought this was very beautiful, thoughtful and true. Not all of us are the "rose" flower but other flowers are also beautiful, unique and individual that does not make us less loving or "worthy". Being the "prettiest" is only subjective after all. I see loads of beauty behind the words. Well done.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thanks anna! this was such a sweet comment!
yes, not all of us are "roses" but there's no need to be :)
thanks again!

Flying Piggy

Awesome poem! You did an excellent job in writing this poem. :)

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you muchly! glad you liked it ^^

xxyyzzz
(not registered user)

so sweet!
this poem has actually touched me so much........i dont even have words for this lovely poem......but 1 think i would like to ask is that "do u really think love exists in this pathetic world?"
anycase sorry this is a personal question but still i would like to have an answer.....
this poem is really beautiful....
and lastly just one word superb!

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

i'm an optimist, so my honest answer that i truly believe in is "yes, love exists in this world"
is our world pathetic? well, looking at it, sure, maybe so unfortunately. but is there such thing as love? yes. i believe so with all my heart ^^
thank you for reading! and i'm glad to hear you liked the poem! you left a sweet comment :)
take care ^^

kaylalebreton

welll sweetie i just have to say this is awesome and i love it. it just made my day :)
hahaha
well very very good

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

aw well thats good to hear ^^
i'm glad it made your day :)
thanks kayla!!

Jason George

Oh, wow... This poem is absolutely amazing. Your metaphor for a traditional girl is almost humorous:

"My carnations are not roses-

But daffodils they are,"

I laughed a little when I read this - I guess I wasn't expecting it. Your poem is amazing, and keep up the good work.

:)

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thank you! ha well daffodils are my favorite flower, which aren't the classic rose, so thats why i chose daffodils to be my carnations ^^
thanks for reading and commenting jason!
have a nice day :)

mum55

Really wonderful poem....flowed with grace...and you forfilled the challenge with perfection.......happy days to you juliet

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks juliet ^^
"flowed with grace" i think thats a new one, haha
well thank you muchly! glad you liked it! happy days to you too! :)

Urja

Sweet, simple, and straight from the heart. Hmmm.....daffodils! Now, it does ring the bell! You guys really complement eachother!

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha! i think you're the first one to pick up on that!! lol! yes, daffodils

Stephanee

I love how this poem kind of ties in with Punishment's poem, yet both stand alone as well. You guys are so cute, writing such beautiful poems about one another. Wonderful poem as usual, Alice. I really love your writing style. Your imagery is so unique and fresh that I just can't seem to get enough!!

Stephanee :)

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe :)
thanks stephanee!!! you're so sweet! i'm glad you liked it
take care ^^

November

This is ... magnificent =)!
I adore it
x

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thanks! ^^

Itania

I loved it. It was very moving and very beautiful for spur of the moment. It's better than most of mine

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

aw, why thank ya ^^
haha yeah i was a bit surprised how well it turned out for spur of the moment, but i guess when the emotion is there and its true, some of the most beautiful pieces of writing can come out of it :)
thanks itania!

Nita Eads

Sorry it took me a while to get to it, but I loved it. It actually reminded me of someone that I know. It brought alot of imagery (I hope I spelled that right, goodness. I am tired.) LOVE IT.

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

haha yes, you spelled imagery right ^^
thanks nita!! glad you loved it! and i'm happy it reminded you of someone you know :)
take care!

Eternal Night

Oh! Bravo! And I'm sure someone has said the exact same thing, that's how many comments you've recieved! Lol. :) Well done
:) Eternal Night

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

haha yeah, loooots of comments. i understand lol
thanks eternal night ^^

Melissa Gagne

Hello,sorry for not reading right away, I was gone on a school trip. But WOW, this poem is great and very sweet, it truly touched me. The picture is very sweet too! I loved everything about it, good job :)
Melissa ♥

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

haha its quite all right ^^ glad you liked!
thanks melissa!

Anaria

Hey I decided to check out this poem and I was really impressed on how good it was. It is extremely well written and I loved it. It seems very sweet and pure...

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you anaria! happy to hear that you loved it and that it was impressive :)

BekahBoo

ah... i very nice poem...
and it looks good too!
I love it! nice job!
and good message! :)

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! :)

craaig

I LIKE IT! Irrespective of any challenges, this poem is excellent. It speaks more than its words.

Perhaps it is just coincidence that we both chose to use the phrase "give and take" in our responses to MAmberConrad's challenge. I didn't read yours until I had posted mine.

My answer to the challenge is titled "Stand Alone".
Check it out, if you've a mind to.

craaig

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! ooo haha, yes coincidence! great minds think alike ^^ i'll be sure to check it out!
thanks craaig!
take care ^^

dreaming of you

sometimes the dreams of both male and female are uncannily alike , i think that is aptly demonstrated in this beautiful poem .

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!!
have a nice day dreaming of you! (love the username by the way - haha ^^)

Jbortti

That's great one . You really did very good with the challenge and captured the meaning of the proposal. Great work.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much! ^^

Kaylynn Brookes

I always seem to be the last reader to read it, but I don't mind...it was worth the wait!!! That is a really great poem, Alice. I'm glad my Internet didn't stay down too long, otherwise I would have missed it entirely!!! Mucho chocolate por tu, Alice!!! Adios!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Gracias!!
mmm chocolate XD haha, i normally get my chocolate from ghiradelli girl. i guess now i get double! hahaha!
thank you kaylynn!!
take care ^^

Laurel

That was so sweet and reminded me a bit of myself. *sniffle* You're a great wirter

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

aww hehe :) thank you!
i'm happy that it reminded you a bit of yourself. i love it when readers can connect with my writing ^^
take care :D

Keepers River

Loves it!
sorry for not getting to it sooner, haven't brrn on in a while! sorry again!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

aw KR, no need to apologize. there's never a rush to read my poetry. it will always be here for you to read whenever :)
thank you so much hon ^^

Those

I loved it! I liked how you could rhyme but still keep the flow going! Its perfect!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thanks ^^ haha, sometimes rhyming doesn't go as good as i wish it would. but glad u thought it was perfect! XD
thanks again!

amateur01

wonderful imagery!! not a typical love poem either. love the line, "im not the prettiest flower"

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you ^^
ah yes, i like that line as well :)

Kirsten Rain

AMAZING. You are a really truly amazing writer

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

haha well thank you :) you're too kind!

julistar

You wrote this so honestly even a cynic can take comfort in changing heart and looking out for love.

So often we see the cliche stuff and this shows - just be. A snowflake is here for such a little time but it is precious in its simplicity as love should be.

you should work on doing this - this stunning show of true feelings...more more more

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

aww why thank you julistar!
such a sweet comment :) hm even a cynic can take comfort? wow. that says a lot!
thanks again!! ^^

Farstyles

aww *sniff* this reminds me of my boyfriend. its so cute and sweet and romantic lol.

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

awww hehe :) well i'm glad it reminds you of him!
thank you farstyles for all the sweet comments you've left! :)

JoleneMoon

This is awesome, and I can relate to the feeling of the words. Really well done, it is romantic and sweet. :D

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

Author Comment:

aw well thank ya very much! :D

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