Symphonie de mon Coeur
by alice oiseau
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Play the strings of my heart,
Light rhythm of dulcet tones,
of butterflies, of daffodils.
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Euphonic melodies you play
ever so gently,
Serenaded by you
ever so tenderly.
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The octave continues,
Incessant bliss and
Whirls of fantasia
as your beautiful whispers strum
my aeolian harp.
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Sunset's tempos,
Pulsing through my soul,
Red dress and quick paced tangos.
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Luna's lullaby of
ballads where swans take flight,
Blue gown and slow waltzes of the night.
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Stars go blue,
A symphony born from you,
Adagio of romance,
Now savor the cadence.
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When it ends,
play it again...
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*sniffle* Why do all your poems make me cry? They're just so beautiful! I am forever jealous. This poem...it's hard to believe you DIDN'T put in all your heart and soul, because I can really see that you did. This was no disappointment. This was so much more than beautiful...than spectacular...than anything. I thought it had a little touch because I was listening to Thunder ha ha by Boys Like Girls. It kind of went along with your poem.
Play the strings of my heart,
Light rhythm of dulcet tones,
of butterflies, of daffodils.
I really liked this first stanza because you started the poem off BEAUTIFULLY with "Play the strings of my heart". I immediately knew that from there, it was going to get even better. And it did!
The octave continues,
Incessant bliss and
Whirls of fantasia
as your beautiful whispers strum
my aeolian harp.
I absolutely adored this stanza because of the last two lines "as your beautiful whispers strum my aeolian harp." I thought it created really good imagery, and the words really hit my heart straight on. You put together words so wonderfully.
When it ends,
play it again...
Then of course you just finish it off as best as ever! Ha Ha I think this part was my favorite out of all the rest. Because it tells me, and everyone else, that the love is everlasting, that even when the song ends, it will still continue, over and over and over again. Beautiful written (I really DO need to find more words:) ) and completely hypnotizing from beginning to end. It went straight to my heart. This is definitely a favorite! And it shall always be. Once again great poem Alice.
Posted: Aug 7, 2008
when it ends play it again,
let the music sooth the pain,
a slow tender dance of love,
whispers from the stars above,
a dream awakened serenade,
upon the soul its music played,
and drew me into a slow dance,
lingers fragrance from said France,
it is so beautiful yet so sad,
oh love, cruel love why drive us mad,
you toy with us as though in spite,
just one sweet moment is our right,
yet all too soon the music’s gone,
pack away the moments done,
And what are we supposed to do,
gazing at the distant blue,
ah, pick the music from our hearts,
and know the sadness when love parts!
Posted: Aug 10, 2008
aww...c'est tres tres belle.
Truthfully, i was expecting my french to be tested to its max with a french poem---- but i was quite happy to have it in my, er, vernacular. hehe:)
"plat the strings of my heart"--- beautiful way to start---using the literal form of heartstrings. i really liked that--mostly, maybe, because i used a very similar phrase in a song i wrote earlier this week. It amazing when a thought is unknowingly shared, you know?...So yeah, it was very special to me.
"Sunset's tempos,
Pulsing through my soul,
Red dress and quick paced tangos."
I also liked these lines very much. a nice break in the almost somber atmosphere. Makes it vibrant for a moment...adds a whole nother dimention.
Symphony of your Heart, ey? Well, a beautiful one at that.
Much love
Ash
Posted: Aug 13, 2008
I like the french you spun in there, first of all. I just want to know what the title means, please?
This poem was exquisite, I must say. I'm a little jealous, Alice! Luna's lullaby... yeah, that was my favorite part I'm not sure why, but it was. It also put an image in my head of you and someone else ballroom dancing, so maybe you have reason to go shopping now? Haha. I also saw someone playing instruments according to every stanza, sort of like someone remembering how a special person used to play such beautiful music....
Anywho, thanks for that great read. I hope you can read some of my more recent poems. I do appreciate your comments so. They're always in depth anylaysis kind of things and I miss that. Most people give me one sentence now.
Posted: Aug 29, 2008
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